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Name: Simon
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Last Post: Jan 2, 2021
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simonp00   
Jan 2, 2021
Undergraduate / Tell us about who you are. Include something you are proud of and why? - Graduation and tough times [2]

me and something i am proud of



My mother, sister, and friends would describe me as an individual who is calm, dedicated, and focused on achieving goals through hard-work and persistency. The descriptions of myself can be illustrated through my graduation of the Kinesiology program at Langara College. I am proud of myself for completing the program because I have struggled over the last few years with mental health, and family and personal issues. Throughout middle school, high school, and in my early twenties after graduating, I had struggled with depression because of the effects of being bullied and coming from the life of a broken and separated family. Being the victim of bullying caused a Persistent Depressive disorder. Furthermore, tragic family problems added to my depressive state. The house I had grown up in was destroyed by a fire that was caused by an electrical issue in the bathroom. Unfortunately, another family issue arose and had impacted me in a negative way - the death of my uncle of whom I was very close to and considered a father figure. However, through these struggles, I attempted to find what I was interest in, thus my post-secondary journey started later in my life. Through all the hardships, setbacks, and failures, I had found what I was interested in, and would use my dedication, hard-work, and persistence to achieve my goal of obtaining a diploma in Kinesiology towards my journey of becoming a Physiotherapist.

[ Any advice or tips would be greatly appreciated! Thank you all :) ]
simonp00   
Jan 2, 2021
Undergraduate / Both my parents - UBC Draft - What is important to you? [6]

Hi Parin,

It seems you have written mostly about aspects of your parents you like and not how their characteristics or personalities has changed you as a person. I think you should add, or maybe replace some parts of your essay, with what your parents characteristics or personalities has benefited you as a person or why those adapted things has made you a better person.
simonp00   
Dec 27, 2020
Undergraduate / The university application - writing about my personal qualities which describe who I am [5]

Hello Xuanhieu,

I am new to this message board so please take my reply with a grain of salt.
I noticed that you mentioned very minimally on what others thought of you. I think, it would be best to perhaps expand or give just a little more detail on those things others mentioned about you and how they have made you grow into a better person.
simonp00   
Dec 21, 2020
Undergraduate / What is Important to you? And Why - Bond with my mother [4]

Tell What's Most Important to You



Throughout times of depression and adversities, my mother has always shown me her unconditional love and support. The bond I have with my mother is what is important to me. When I was eighteen years old, I was living in Edmonton alone. I had suffered a period of major depression and had no friends or family in the city to support me. I had told her that I had been admitted to a psychiatric hospital due to the severity of my depression, and about a couple of days later, to my surprise, she had shown up at the hospital where I had been admitted at. The experience of her encouragement gave me the inclination of adopting a supportive characteristic to the friends around me. Her support and love were key factors for me overcoming my depression and many more tribulations in my life.

I know I need to develop this paragraph more, I would love some feedback and assistance on it. Thank you :)
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