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Name: Fasseeh Memun
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Apr 6, 2021
Scholarship / HOW YOUR PROPOSED STUDY RELATES TO: A) DEVELOPMENT ISSUES AT THE GLOBAL.. -Commonwealth Scholarship [NEW]

Hi. I am writing my development statement for Commonwealth Scholarship. Please leave useful comments for revisions in the essay

How your proposed study relates to:


a) development issues at the global, national and local level?
b) development issues connected to your chosen CSC theme and the wider sector?
(200 words)


"Despite preserving colossal renewable assets, 80% of Pakistan's power generation comes from nonrenewable fuels. Generating energy from fuel-based sources, however, poses its perils. For example, the voluminous industrial pollution from thermal plants has significantly deteriorated the urban air-quality seven times greater than the WHO prescribed levels, causing 22,000 premature deaths and hospitalizing 6.5 million people annually (Asian Development Bank, 2008). The stagnant evolution of renewable technology in Pakistan is partly due to the dire deficiency of the relevant field expertise. The cognizance of these grave issues has motivated me to pursue the renewable energy field as a postgraduate specialization.

It is unlikely that a community can advance in the scientific and technological realm without a well-developed energy infrastructure. For this reason, Pakistan also is actively striving to establish a stable energy foundation that will furnish it with the requisite potential for scientific advancement. Renewable energy promotes the sustainable approach of power production that is non-depleting, clean, and affordable. In addition, renewable power encourages the accelerated progress of energy sector development by solving problems including electricity deprivation, environmental contamination due to industrial exhaust, and predominant reliance on imported fuel to drive power plants."
fassehmemun10   
Apr 1, 2021
Scholarship / "Raising in a middle-class family was indeed demanding" Commonwealth Scholarship Personal Statement [2]

Hello people! I am writing my personal statement for Commonwealth Shared Scholarship UK. Please help me to identify the areas in the essay which I need improve. Feel free to point out any mistakes and given suggestions. Thank you :).

to make an impact in your home country



Prompt: Summarize the ways in which your personal background has encouraged you to want to make an impact in your home country. You should indicate areas in which you have already contributed, such as having overcome any personal or community barriers to higher education. (500 words max)

"Raising in a middle-class family background was indeed demanding. Though, the self-reliant environment eventually helped me in cultivating a responsible individual identity. I was in 3rd grade when the factory my father worked in had been shut down due to bankruptcy, leaving my father unemployed. Being the only child, I was the primary concern of my parents' attention. Although both of them had not received a formal education, they were cognizant of its gravity. Despite facing financial instability, my parents made every persistent effort to support my education. Observing these events embedded an unusual stimulus in my personality to conquer the apex of my career and make my parents proud.

I received my early education in the town's school where the classrooms barely had any partitions between the different grades. Due to the unconducive learning atmosphere, I urged my father to transfer me to St: Bonaventure's high school for 8th grade. Living in a combined family setting, I could hardly attain privacy for my studies at home. However, I never joined any coaching academy as I found self-tutoring more comfortable and rejoicing.

After school, I engaged myself in assisting my father in fixing household appliances. Out of curiosity, I would unscrew defective machines to check their working mechanism. Through time, this interest grew manifold as I began understanding the big picture of machines in the industry during college factory visits. I found Mechanical Engineering to be the center of all my interests and decided to pursue my passion-turned-profession. Eventually, I successfully achieved admission with distinction in Mechanical Engineering at MUET Jamshoro, becoming the first family member to attend a university.

Seeking to build a concrete technical understanding, I applied for an internship at JPCL Thermal Power Plant. Being able to execute the systematic energy analysis of the plant incredibly surged my interest in energy generation. The work required applying the profound thermodynamic concepts into exercise which also helped in nurturing my practical acumen. However, one thing that left me deeply unsettled was the widespread industrial pollution. In Pakistan, environmental pollution has exacerbated the air quality seven times higher than acceptable levels, causing 22,000 premature deaths and hospitalizing six-and-a-half million people annually. Therefore, the country's situation demands an immediate turn to sustainable energy generation. Particularly, it was the moment I decided to pursue Renewable Energy as a postgraduate specialization.

I strongly believe that obtaining my postgraduate degree Renewable Energy degree in the UK will prove to be an important milestone in my professional development and attaining my long-term goal. Obtaining diverse technical expertise in the UK will enable me to construct radical solutions to the intricate problems in my domain. My enhanced qualifications will eventually place me in a unique professional position using which I can propose/implement my research initiatives. On returning to Pakistan, I will exercise my acquired expertise as a Mechanical Engineer in the Alternative Energy Development Board and hopefully contribute to amplifying the renewables segment in Pakistan's energy mix and attain its 2030 renewable energy goals."