Undergraduate / Title of my life- Is it Ok to use 3 adjectives as a title? [5]

Before our great editors get bored, I'd better summerize my essay. The first part is about an experience and the second part is using 3 words to title the experience(However, the experience is just one part my life).

I wonder if it is Ok to use 3 adjectives as a title? Does the essay fits the prompt? Will you be confused about what I am writing?

Essay prompt: If you were to write the story of your life until now, what would you title it? Why?

Icy water chilled me from head to toe. My raft squeezed through a waterway surrounded by spire-like cliffs. BOOM - the raft was stuck on a rock. Water rushed past, splashing back into the raft. Bodies fell over, crashing into one another. Scream of panic spreads throughout the rain.

Weeks earlier, travel books were strewn across my desk. Yellow sticky notes spotted the front board of my bed - it looked like I was planning a prison break. I was exploring the best route for me to explore an exiting rafting trip in Fenghuang. Now I was back into reality.

If I am going to title my life until now, I will title it "Rafting in torrents." Like rafting in the torrents, my life has surge and fall, even drown. With caution in mind as helmet, knowledge in hand as rope, raft full of courage, I am no longer afraid of the whitewater standing in my way. Once I set up my goal, I stick to my direction no matter how fierce the currents are.

I have been rafting in torrents since my primary school. When I found my capability beyond my academic grade, I became less interest in homework. That day, I returned home and my parents noticed I was a little absent-minded. After me talking to them, they both support me the decision that I skipped 5th grade and went to 7th grade directly. I was surprised that I was actually longing for the solution for a long time. My biggest enemy in front of me was the math. During the summer holiday, I taught myself one year's math text books and entered the honor class of my middle school. I missed the graduation of primary school, but I didn't regret the chance to stand out of the box.

In the year of 17, I was qualified as exam-waiver for the Chinese National College Entrance Examination, which was a rare opportunity many excellent students were dreamed of. Stepping in front of the headmaster's office, I was lost in thought. I prepared long to fight for this battle and I couldn't just give away the weird idea to give up the privilege. Actually I enjoyed the feeling of blood pulsing through my veins in this battle. Like a soldier in an army, I wanted to stay with the team until we all triumph back. Rumors came that I was showing off. My parents' and peers' misunderstanding gave me a lot of pressure. Once again rafting in torrents, I managed to go the Sun Yat-sen University by my own effort.

Year passed and now, I am facing another choice in front of the torrents of my life. I know I should follow my heart. There are rocks stuck in my way of chasing dream, bleaching wind blowing my raft away, and dangerous shoal threatening to drop me down. My motivation and determination are the oars that keep me forward.

I love rafting in torrents and my next adventure will be in The Grand Canyon, I can't wait to see it.

Grammer critics are welcomed~Thank you guys

Looking forward to your comments~

Undergraduate / Sponge Girl - My Emerson Supp essay [3]

OK.This is a rough draft and I know I need much critic to make it better.

Much of the work that students do at Emerson College is a form of storytelling. If you were to write the story of your life until now, what would you title it? Why? (400-600 words).

Sponge Girl

You think of the Spongebob. No, I don't wear boxers. My whole life until now is soaking up something. Let me tell you.
Literature
I was 5 and tried to look like adult. My eyes are focus, my back is tight and my hand with a newspaper. I should be able to understand everything. Well, I got the paper upside down. When I realize how funny it is to read, I immerse myself into books. In the Tales of Two Cities, I cry for Carton, a man sacrificed himself to keep his promise to his love. In the pride and prejudice, I worry about the relationship between Darcy and Elizabeth. I sought the treasure with Jim in Treasure Island. I fly to the Neverland with Peter pan. I am always on the ready to read more before my bed, on the subway, even in restroom. I am no longer that little girl who imitates adults. I have my own world in books.

Art
Eyes were on me. Suddenly the hall is void of people and I could only hear my beats and breathe. I stretch my hands and arms with elegance; my finger is on the keyboards, waiting for the shoot. I have practiced the song for more than one thousand times. But my head is stuck in a minute and my memory is black out. Who pull out the light?

"Hey, there's nobody watching you. Just you with your piano. And your love song, Fur Ellice." My mind keeps me sober. With a deep breathe, notes flow out from the piano. I am not frozen any more. Applause rise, I walk down the stage. "Woo, I have never see a girl play piano in SYSU before." The teacher comments, "It's rather impressive." I won the respect of my classmates. Even though many of them are specialized in piano or other instrument, they give me claps. I know it's for my desire to gain confidence and bravery to try. This happens in my anchor class, when I am the only student comes from another university.

Cook
See, this is a girl who takes cooking for fight. She pours the oil into the hot pan, and then rushes the vegetables down to the magma and fight against the hot boil splitting out of the pan. She tries to add some water to make those little green organic calm, but it gets them fiercer. Thanks god, the cabbage isn't spoiled again. She takes out the note book and write down, "Sunday, successful vegetable. Try some meat next time." 3 years past, she is a sophisticated cook now. She could now bring you various delicate meals without calling a firefighter to her kitchen. She grows up.

Whether in life or study, I remain myself sponginess. In life there is much to learn and I will never stop soaking up. Whether in college or in life, I am desperate to learn.