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Name: Jason Van
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Last Post: Nov 5, 2021
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School: TonDucThang University

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iam5102   
Oct 12, 2021
Writing Feedback / Saving our ecosystem not by increasing the price of fuels [5]

Your writing is quite off the topic, and I think you should take some time to do research on the proper way of writing essay before jumping right into it. On the other hand, your vocabulary is rich and flexible actually.
iam5102   
Oct 12, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Nowadays, families are not as close as they used to be. Causes and Solutions? [5]

I rewrote the first paragraph here:

Recently, there has been a bigger gap which makes people living under one roof feel much more seperated from each other than they did in the past. In this essay, I am going to point out some primary culprits behind this problem and also recommend some possible ways to fix the situation.
iam5102   
Oct 12, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Nowadays, families are not as close as they used to be. Causes and Solutions? [5]

Prompt:
Nowadays, families are not as close as the used to be.

What is the causes? What can be solutions for this?



My writing: 297 words

Recently, there has been a bigger gap between family members. Regardless of many efforts have been made, this is still happening in many households.There are some reasons leading to this problem, and fortunately there are also appropriate measures to fix the situation.

To start with, difference between generations is the primary cause of the gap deviding families. For example, parents easily get confused, and struggle to understand their children's thoughts. Spontaneously, children also feel like their parents are incomprehensible, and keep breaking their privacy and freedom. This is how generation gap looks like, and leaving it unsolved can result in various kinds of nagative knock-on effects. Secondly, the lack of communitcation is one of the most serious culprits which is need to be fixed. It is obvious that every organization existing without sharing and communicating will be collapsed including families. Therefore, the shotage of talking and listening between members in a house can help the gap grow bigger and bigger from day to day.

From my perspective, the solutions should come from both sides, or all family members together. On one hand, parents should be friends with their children in order to listen what are their problems and struggles. This is an ideal method to narrow the generation gap, and aslo to get to understand their children more deeply. On the other hand, children should try to put themselves in their parents' shoes so as to recognize difficulties and hardship parents are facing. As a result, from understanding each other, members can become more close-knit as a true family.

In conclusion, the gap in families can come from many distinctive causes, but some proper approaches can be very beneficial. And the main point here is just to share, and to communicate more from both parents and children.
iam5102   
Oct 7, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS - taking a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience [8]

Prompt: Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience.

Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?



Most students tend to go straight for university right after their graduation. However, there has been a popular trend to take a year off before attending college among youngsters. From my perspective, having a year off to take journeys, or to pick up some more knowledge is totally beneficial for future students.

Firstly, it is immensely helpful to take a gap year before becoming a university students emotionally. For example, imminent students can utilize their free time to make journeys, or to have fun in vacations. And I believe that having some time to relax, and to settle down mentally is absolutely reasonable because in order to graduate high school, students have spent loads of their time to study, and to overcome the tests, so it is nice if they can have fun for a while.

Secondly, youngsters can also gain new real-life experiences which may be useful for academic purposes could not found in schools. For instance, many gap-year takers have their first jobs or part-time jobs which related to chosen majors in college. Therefore, those can obtain experiences, and save money for their tuition fees spontaneously. Therefore, having some time off instead of jumping right into studying after finishing high school is quite good for students' university life.

In summary, a gap year can be really necessary and crutial for a certain amount of students who have just finished taking the entrance examination. Because 12 months free are enough for students to prepare themselves mentally and emotionally before heading to campuses. So if it is possible and in need, feel free to take a gap year.

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