Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Computer Programmes for Teaching Purposes [2]

Computer Programmes for Teaching Purposes

Topic: Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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Answer:

In a world where technological advance constantly takes place, utilising computer programmes in classrooms for educational purposes is becoming a trend in the majority of schools these days. However, it is sometimes argued that this change is possibly affecting the students in a negative way. In this essay, I will be discussing both of these views, followed by my own opinion regarding this problem.

Firstly, computers can be a great help in classrooms in order to increase teaching efficiency. With a vast number of interactive programmes, teaching materials that teachers can choose from, this can directly build growth of students' interest in the subject, as they can participate in the process of learning themselves. Consequently, the interest in the subject is slowly built in each learner, helping them to reach the aim faster and in a more active way. Moreover, computers are becoming the cutting-edge device, used widely in various activities in our lives. Therefore, it is indispensable to learn how to function it properly, considering the difficulties it can bring if a student does not know how to do so.

However, those convenience can become great dangers if each student are not aware of what they are facing online. For instance, false information, threats and scams on websites, cyberbullying, especially for teenagers, are only a small part of the adverse elements can be found when browsing the Internet and can contribute to damage a student's health mentally and physically. In order to prevent this from happening, it is essential to create school curriculums which provide students the basic points of Internet safety. Limitations of screen time should also be made so that students can stay away from being addicted to computers, or experiencing a downfall in their education.

To conclude, although dependence on computers can indeed have a potential to harm students in some way, I still believe that it should be widely publicised to make use of technology in teaching. It is considered a breakthrough for humanity and can bring great benefits to the learning of many individuals.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - The proportion of national consumers' expenditure on various items [2]

TOPIC: The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

MY WORK:
The table illustrates the proportion of national consumers' expenditure on various items in five selected countries in the year 2002. In general, it is clear that all five countries mostly spent on food/drinks/tobacco, while leisure/education accounted the least.

First of all, Ireland and Turkey had the highest percentage of expenditure on food/drinks/tobacco with 28.91 per cent and 32.14 per cent respectively. Italy, Spain and Sweden, on the other hand, did not have as much expense on this category as the rest. For clothing/footwear, the majority of the selected countries shared a quite similar amout. However, Italy stood out with 9 per cent spent on the category.

Spain accounted the lowest proportion for leisure/education with only about 2 per cent. The percentage were slightly higher for Ireland, Italy and Sweden, and Turkey was in the lead with over 4 per cent.

Overall, the table provides information of five particular countries' spending on three different categories, where the expenditures were mostly spent on food/drinks/tobacco.

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  Percentage of National Consumer Expenditure by Category - 2002
  

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Children's Talents can be learned [2]

TOPIC: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

MY WORK:
These days, people generally believed that many people have unique abilities when they were born, whereas others do not. On the other hand, there are still opinions stating any child can be trained to have a special talent. In this essay, I will be discussing both of these claims and then offer my own opinion.

Firstly, there are definitely people who had special skills when they were born or were very little. Some of them might be a superb pianist or an active football player. These can be especially benefit for children as they have the opportunity to develop their skills from a young age, and, as a result, they might become an outstanding person in the future.

In contrast, there are still children who are not as unique as the rest as they do not carry unique skills at a small age. However, it is not impossible to teach a child to play sports or music. Nowadays, with an amazing growth of technology as well as training methods, educating kids to do such things is now not a concern. A majority of sportspeople, musicians and actors, for instance, are taught as they grow up and yet most of them are now successful in their careers.

In conclusion, we can see that although it is incredible to be given with special talents since you were born, but it is still achiveable for children who are ready to learn. From my point of view, I totally believe that any child can learn any talents, as long as they are passionate about what they do.

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