Posts by Charles Le

Charles Le

Oct 12, 2022

Writing Feedback / Writing task2: taxing industries as a good way to protect environment [3]

You seems to overlook the clarity of your points. In the second parapraph, "these renewable...green industry" => in which way renewable resources can impact upon the industry. The example following the viewpoint is also repeats the preoccupying idea thus it creates the same issue, how government encourages Tesla become more eco-friendly ? You should add more support for these views by saying something like "With the authorities providing incentives and imposing enlightened policies, businesses are able to generate more profit and relived of the budern of potential legal issues.

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Charles Le

Sep 2, 2022

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Environmental problems from human harmful activities) [4]

I think your answer goes a little bit off the topic as the question is about the fact that it is "too late" to make any meaningful improvements. Therefore, the first paragraph should focus on the reason why it is "too late", and the second should explain why it is not "too late".

Moreover, the connection thorough your essay is another problem.

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Charles Le

Jul 31, 2022

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: buildings which were recently constructed should follow the form that used in old ones [4]

More academic vocabulary should be used. Use of the word "rule" could be replaced by mandatory/compulsory. "people can choose their house style freely" could be rewrite as : citizens should be entitled to opt for design and style of their own home. Likewise, the topic sentence of the third paragraph could also be: that inhabitants should be given the ultimate decision when it comes to planning their safe haven. Several words seem to be repeated, so try to paraphrase as much as you can.

Charles Le

Jul 31, 2022

Writing Feedback / Some people believe that keeping pets is beneficial while others believe that it is a bad idea [5]

The writing could be a little more formal by opting for more barely used vocabulary. "able, unable, would, could, might" may be used in exchange for "can, can not" in certain cases. Also, pets can be paraphrased to human's beloved friends for instance. The topic sentence in the 2nd paragraph could be more explicit about the following context. FE: Keeping pets is a viable alternative to provide people with a great sense of fulfillment.

Charles Le

Jul 31, 2022

Writing Feedback / A dispute whether the computer was the most critical breakthrough in modern civilization [2]

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years

There is some dispute whether the advent computers was the most critical breakthrough in modern civilization. In my opinion, this statement is partly true as other innovations also play significant roles in human's life.

On the one hand, with the creation of computers, humankind has subtantially benefited in various aspects of life. This is rooted in the fact that the modern equipment has faciliate work and daily life of bilions of people. Given the automation in all types of work, computers has enabled workers to reduce their workload, enhance productivity thus increase the number of output. Likewise, people witnessed improvement in our stardard of living. To illustrate, employees are now able to complete their tasks at their safe haven while taking care of their dependants, which is greatly attributed to the harness of their computers. Finally, invention of computer acts as a precedessor for many innovations for the time being. Internet, smart devices and various crucial applications are developed based on elements of computers.

On the other hand, many modes of transport, healthcare development and inventtions in other industries are also significant. Given the enhancement in transportation, goods are delivered much faster, demand is quickly met with supply thus result in flourishment of individuals all over the world. Mass-production electric cars is envisioned to safeguard the nature from the detrimental impacts of burning fossil fuel, which contributes to the well-being of all living creatures. Furthermore, new breeds of medicines have saved milions of lives. One case in point is that Pfizer, the vaccines released in the middle of Covid epidemic has maintained numerous lives. Besides, the vision of deployment of new technologies such as artificial intelligence, robots and 3D printing has become more apparent which hold the key to the prosperity our societies.

In the light of these fact, other innovations have their positive affects upon people, albeit the position of computers is irriplacable. The roles of each creation should be credited proportionaly to their impact on our world.