Undergraduate / "Nursing degree" - all they want is a simple response on academic goals? [12]

My Assignment:

Please submit a concise essay (two page limit) which addresses and centers on your primary academic goals and objectives. You may wish to include information on your motivation for entering the nursing profession and a synopsis of personal, academic, volunteer and employment experiences which have shaped your choice. If you are drawn to a particular aspect of nursing, you may wish to include a discussion of your specialty interest(s) within your essay. The essay is reviewed by our Admissions Committee so that we may learn more about you, and also serves as a writing sample.

My essay: (Simple and to the point) Any feedback would be helpful! Thank you!!!

With each day I venture upon new challenges and learning experiences that support my goals. Unaware as a young girl, I gained great strength from my mother. I lived my entire childhood in a single family household, my mother and two younger sisters. She successfully raised us to be responsible and optimistic young adults. Embarking on adulthood, I was making decisions that would affect my entire future. I was discovering where I was best utilized in the business world, which jobs I enjoyed and which ones I did not. I was also deciding which education path would lead to a fulfilling career. During this time of personal discovery, my grandmother was hospitalized after an aneurysm in her abdomen burst. Aneurysm was my first knowledgeable experience with a medical term. After my grandmother passed away, my family realized she had complained of pain in her abdomen for months. My grandmother was never able to communicate her pain into action. Receiving medical treatment for her pain may have saved her life. With the education I have gained thus far I could have recognized her pain as something more serious. I choose nursing for the possibility of saving lives, saving someone's grandmother, or relative. Nursing is also a field in which I can grow and strive to be more knowledgeable and current with new medical research. Nursing will allow me to face challenges, challenges I am sure will only increase my desire to succeed. Nursing will also cradle my passion to communicate with people of different cultures. As I study the Spanish language I realize there is a great need for nurses to speak languages besides English. Nurses are often a patient's first communication when receiving medical treatment. It is important that these patients are able to receive adequate and quality health care no matter their language barriers. My main academic goal is to continue my education at your University earning a Bachelor of Science in Nursing degree. I am also going to continue my education in Spanish by becoming fluent in the language. I am also interested in learning sign language. I believe that people who speak different languages are at a disadvantage in our health care systems and I hope to one day bridge that gap one person at a time.