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Posts by vikasp
Joined: Mar 12, 2010
Last Post: Mar 18, 2010
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vikasp   
Mar 18, 2010
Writing Feedback / Comparison and Contrast essay: Solar power and Wind power [4]

as per my knowledge i have made some corrections

these two of energies

two of these energies

allow to sun

allow the sun

which it cover

it covers

In the other hand

on the other hand

where is 62% which contribute with acid rain

were 62% which contributes with
vikasp   
Mar 16, 2010
Writing Feedback / Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years. [7]

you have great ideas but weak grammar. I think you should practice little more...
government should get charge more tax on the importing vehicles and set a limitation of the numbers of cars which are imported per month or year....

how is convenient and how is about service and how is cheaphow convinent and efficient it is and can people easily afford it .... So, in my opinion, the intensive developmentingdevelopment for public transport is the best way that to reduce traffic congestion.
vikasp   
Mar 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / insufficient respect towards old members of society [3]

The modern era has robbed many things from us and out of them one thing is our culture that comes in the form of love and respect for elders. Our modern generation has adopted an ignorant attitude towards the old people of society. They are venerable but they are not getting it, there are sevral reasons behind it.

First, today's generation from their childhood has been taught to live in the splited families, so they can not resist the obligations put by the elders. Young generation take them as restrictions and often offend them and disrespect them.

The second reason, behind this kind of attitude is generation gap. Their is a great difference in their thinking and perspective. Old people are regarded as narrow-minded as their thinking and views do not match with the present generation who are highly influenced by the western culture.

However, the young generation cannot be only accused as their parents are also equally guilty. They do not give adequate time to their children to spend with them and to talk to them about their culture and traditions. As a result, the children have become ill-mannered and obstinate and disregard the old members of society.

All this has put a very bad impact on society. The society has turned into barberic. People no longer believe in their moral values and traditions. Society has totally deprived of things like showing respect and gratitude to their elders. They are so busy in their life that they cannot spare time for those who are known as backbone of society.

thanks for giving your valuable time
vikasp   
Mar 15, 2010
Writing Feedback / living in one place or always moving for a good job ,house,or even climate. [3]

your grammatical errors have made your writing vague, you also have a problem wtih correct usage of words
people has many thinking about the life- different people have different views about life
we can supply provide our family a better life
entire lives life
transport is convenience convinenet
vikasp   
Mar 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Schools should allot some hours a day to the physical exercises for their students. [2]

i think that you have little problem with grammar i'm pointing out some of your mistakes hope it will help you
"who most of time they are inside" most of the time who are inside
"One of the most things" one of the most important thing
"daily programs" daily program
"to get depression" to get into depression
"There are all of students to attempt to suicide" many students try to commit suicide
"they had" they have
vikasp   
Mar 12, 2010
Undergraduate / essay about more people prefer living alone than in the past [7]

In the last century world has seen many changes. One such change is clearly witnessed in family structures. Earlier families preferd living together and sharing joys and sorrows with each other. But nowdays, situation has changed in many countries and people like to stay away from their extended families.

The main reason behind this is advancment in technology and mass communication, which has increased the mobility of people. Now with an easy access people are moving far from their families to work and to study. Secondly, today's generation cannot tolerate restrictions put over by their parents, so they like to live away from them.

However, moving far from one's family for higher studies and better jpb job prospects ia a good sign of development as it helps an individual to build up his future and also makes him self dependent. Moreover, the generationn gap in families often led to disputes and increases differences, so some people think that it is better to live away from families and maintain the relationship.

But, one can not escape from its negative consequences, as splited families often result into lonliness. The main sufferers are children and elderly members of society as they do not get proper love and care. In addition, people sometime also get overburdned with their official and hosehold work , which disturbs them mentally as well as physically.

To conclude, we can say that living alone has become a latest trend nowdays. but, a person should be in touch with his seprated family to maintain the sweetnesss in the relationships.
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