Writing Feedback / watching TV is an unhealthy pastime. what do you think about this statement? [3]

Some people proclaim that they do not watch TV or do not let their children watch TV, as though it is just junk food for the mind. In contrast, others say that there are many benefits that watching TV can have. What do you think about this?

In my opinion, watching is the useful recreational activity for everybody, not except children. Watching television is beneficial in many respects. Firstly

The first benefit can be mentioned is that we can learn more explore more about different people and places. People get only limited opportunity to travel and explore World, due to their involments, which is required to live a life. The fact is that most people are limited in the amount of travel they can do. Moreover, TV help us to even explore those different parts of the World, where we can't even imagine that we would have visited. (what word is correct?) to "strange land", "around the world", and so on. Besides, we can get acquainted with (what word is correct?) a lot of films with multicultural characters on TV nowadays. In addition, there are a large number of TV shows which help to stimulate the brain and increase the intelligence by watching programs like "who is millionaire?", "arena with one hundred of opponents", or "road to the top of Olympia"... (I am not sure about name of those programs and I fear that this does not support for topic sentence about learning more about different people and places.)I think you are right and you should rewrite you essay eliminating this point.

Secondly, TV is one of the most ways to relieve stress. People who work in stressful situations environment need some sort of relaxation in their life, for which comedy shows are helpful and eventually makes person out of stress for atleast some time. In fact there are twenty hours comedy shows that available on TV. These comedy shows make people laugh that has been found helpful in increase blood circulation and lowering blood pressure. Many other diseases are also known to get cured because of this light and happy mood of the person. Apart from this while watching TV, whole family can gather together and discuss about their day today activities. I think TV is one of the good source of family time that is the most wonderful time with a person.

One can argue that watching TV much is harmful for children's eyes and there is too much violence on TV nowadays for them to watch. Those are true but those are as a result of watching TV improperly. This problem can be solved by enforcing certain strict rules such as , limiting time For TV (and other entertainment media), remove TV from a children's bedroom, encourage alternative entertainment such as reading, athletics, hobbies and creative play (according to Committee on Public Education, 2001). Parents should encourage their children to watch the right programs.

I believe that watching TV can bring us many benefits if we have control on ourselves. Watching by the right way is also a civilized way of live and we know we are civilized people. ^ ^You need to rewrite the closing sentence, this is poorly formed sentence.

Writing Feedback / Classification essay: Foreign trade university students [5]

HI everybody, I wish to receive your comment about my 2 methods of classifiacation FTU students. What do you prefer? about my expression, grammar and word usage. THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!!!!! [/i]

essay 1: principle: degree of dynamism

When I was a pupil, I very admired student life with a lot of the exciting activities. Now, I am a second-year student at Foreign Trade University, I recognize that not all of students have the same views about the school activities. I classify my school's students according to their degree of dynamism for school activities; I have three groups that I call for the group one, group two and group three.

The first category consists of students who are active and positive contribution to the movement of school. These students always enjoy activities, have a lot of enthusiasm, ability and talent, and are willing to participate in those. They organize evens and promote them. Although number of these students is not much, they are an important driving force for the development of school activities. Addition to, they are the typical appearance of school, help to expand and spread school's image to the public. They usually are members of clubs or Youth Union.

The next group includes students who are not involved in many school activities but they always stand by these activities. Majority of students own this group. These students also enjoy activities, but they have not ability or they are not confident or their condition does not allow them to join those. However, they can support for the school activities by attending one of the meetings, conferences, talks... which they like no need regularly. Even though these students do not contribute directly to the school activities, they are target that almost school events towards.

The last category - a minority is made up of students who are not care about the school activities. They only think that study is to go to school every day, listen to the lesson in class and complete all of tests and examinations. They are not interested in activities or they do not consider them and think those are work of the organizers, they do not relate to. These students have a negative view about the school activities.

Although the degree of dynamism can analyze nothing of students' capacity, this is really necessary for student to support their learning as well as their future career. Therefore, I advice you participate in school activities as soon as you are able to. No matter which you belong to: the most active, average or the least active, you could start right now.

essay 2: priciple: major/faculty

I am a second-year student at Foreign Trade University. A fact in my school is that every people usually have the different views on students who have the different major. They are international economic, business administration, and banking and finance. Therefore, we can follow the main faculty to sort my school's students into three groups.

The first category consists of students who study international economic. We can say that this is the strongest faculty in FTU with a large force student account for nearly half of students in schools, and the highest point input. Therefore, these students often are analyzed more highly than others. Addition to, number of graduated students have good job are large attract a large number of students' choice.

The next group includes students who study business administrator. Although these students' point input is not as high as international economic students', they are very hard working and prove that they are not inferior to anyone. Especially, they are renowned as the first dynamism in school, and MC Hoang Dung is a typical example.

The last category is made up of students who study banking and finance. Even though this is a new major, the banking and finance students are also hard working and active. These students' point input is also high, and they become one of the biggest faculties in my university.

No matter what you are studying, as long as you love it and take it to heart. Wish you to achieve the highest academic results.

Writing Feedback / Teenagers work while they are studying - argumentative essay [6]

"In some countries, teenagers work while they are studying. Someone says that it is not a good idea for children, but others think it is useful for students to work part time. In my opinion, I completely agree with students' part time working. To earn money and to gain more experiences for their future jobs are prominent reasons.

It is obvious that, most students work part time to earn money may be to support their education, may be to gain a more free and satisfy life about finance. Some students whose family can not provide enough money for their school expenses really need money to compensate their study as well as to help their family. Others use the money they earn to be able to buy according to their own wish instead of depending on their parents' subsidy.

Another advantage of working part time is to support their future career especially those relate to the major they are studying. When students work, they can practice theory they learned in class. This not only helps them to remember and comprehend lesson more deeply, but also makes inspiration in studying and know exactly what is important and needs to pay much attention. On the other hand, working part time brings a lot of confidence to work, opportunities to learn about responsibility, cooperation - skills which are very necessary for working.

One can argue that students' study is affected by working part time. After working, they can feel tired and lack time to study. This may be true, but I think this can be solved if you have a suitable timetable. Once you decide to work part time, you have to arrange your timetable to balance between studying and working. For example, my English teacher works part time when he was a second-year student. He worked as a waiter in a cafeteria at night and he did not have enough time to study at home. Therefore, he paid much attention to his lesson in class and tried to learn as soon as possible. And now, he is my English teacher.

I believe that teenagers work while they are students is not bad. In contrast, this is good if you really know how to manage time best. I advise you work part time when you have a careful preparation and choose suitable jobs for your future career."

PS: I wish to receive your comment to improve my writing skill. I think my essay use so much the long sentences, and I hope you will advice me write by other structures correctly and clearly. thank you very much.

Writing Feedback / Do you like living in a big city? It's a good opportunity for the students [5]

Do you like living in a big city? Even though, having a number of difficulties and disadvantages, we can not deny that living in a big city brings many advantages, especially with the youngs. Chances to hold a good work, determine yourself and have a convenient life are three typicalities.

Most of graduated student choose the life in the city instead of countryside because they want to developing their career. The big city, the place with a large of people live, is the potential market for investing. A lot of big companies and corporations based in here. Therefore, you have many chances to ear a good job. Moreover, if you want to work for your own, this is the convenient environment to make relationship, to research market, to find business opportunities and so on. In short, the big modern city will be a ....

Notwithstanding, living in a large city, you find many not only opportunities but also threats, and this is the place to demonstrate your ability. Bigger city, more competitive. This requires people to be really capable: have to have knowledge, degree, skill and vision. Accordingly, who continues in being last is the most honor victor. On the other hand, the place where technology develop, society is improvable and law is fair make the condition for you to express yourself.

The factor, I think every one know, is that almost the youngs enjoy living in a big city because of convenient life. Many kinds of goods, services, and entertainment are provided best. By staying at home and making a phone call, you have had the world in your house.

In summary, a good job, chance to develop yourself and a satisfy life are reasons that nearly the young people choose living in a big city.