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"ketchup's popularity" - uc prompt-tell us about your community [5]
winstonliKetchup is the most wonderful
condiment in the world. Nothing can go wrong when you add ketchup to it, not even that brick of a meatloaf a family friend brings to a dinner. There are many reasons why it's so great. One: it has a wonderful color
: red that can brighten anything, even the dreaded broccoli.
(ketchup on broccoli????????? Two: Ketchup has a
conglomerating (seems like you used a thesaurus for this word) taste that works well with any food. In the same sense, the world from which I come from has the same aspects that make ketchup great
: great color (atmosphere) in the city and a wonderful community at school.
( sort of an iffy comparison)This listing thing right here isn't cutting it for mePlano, Texas is one of the most prosperous towns in the nation. Aside from the economy, culture thrives in this city like
a rabbit in Australia. Every month, the city has public activities planned for the amusement of its residents.
As a National Honors Society member(makes it seems like your bragging about being a NHS member), I volunteer at many of these occasions and end up staying after my shifts to enjoy myself. The most popular gathering is the Plano Balloon Festival
, which I both attended and worked. Bearing the atmosphere of a fair, the festival allows visitors to participate in a myriad of activities from eating to jumping in jump houses.
(explain?) As a grand finale, dozens of passenger
- bearing hot air balloons are released followed by spectacular fireworks. At the end of the night, everyone leaves exhausted, happy, and loaded with freebies.
In addition to the grandiose cultural atmosphere it bears, Plano also has the best public high schools in the nation. My high school, Plano Senior High School (PSHS), has a great student body committee that allows everyone to feel like he or she is an active part of the school. For instance, PSHS has over 30 clubs and organizations on campus, ranging from anime club to the Academic Decathlon; everyone can find a club that suits his or her interests. Over the past school year, my friends and I formed the first ever Art Club on campus and arranged meeting that attracted dozens of members with our interesting activities and excursions. Furthermore, organizations such as the Student Counsel and Student Congress allow my fellow classmates to take part in how the school is run. Recently, our senior class president was selected solely on the votes of students with no administrative interference.
(doesn't seem like a big achievement) This practice, along with our broad range of activities allows every student to achieve his or her best in academics as well as feeling great about the school and having fun.
For me, ketchup's popularity rests on its color and ability to work well with other foods. These characteristics model the community from which I come from. A great atmosphere of culture and wonderful surroundings at school are all revealed as I reflect upon my city. I hope that my admission to UCLA will allow me to bring these qualities to the school and its surroundings.
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