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captaincrunch   
Oct 31, 2010
Undergraduate / "journey into philosophy" - Common App ..Viktor Frankl [NEW]

this is what i have so far, but I'm stuck, i don't really know where to take it
any ideas/comment/edits will help

My journey into philosophy began after receiving a gift from by uncle, a Buddhist monk. When I turned eleven he gave me a copy if Viktor Frankl's Man's Search for Meaning. Since the first time I read the book, the way I experience my life has changed. With every reading of the book I am recommitted to changing the way I think, to look at my life in terms of what my purpose is, and in my pain, find the why for which I struggle and the why for which I must persist. In handing me the book my uncle was challenging me to look deeper into myself and find my purpose in every aspect of my life.

In Man's Search for Meaning, Frankl gives an overview of his experiences in Nazi concentration camps during World War II. However, instead of focusing on the cruelty and inhumanity suffered by the prisoners, Frankl focuses on the psychological responses of the prisoners to the dehumanization in the camps in order to explain his concept of logotherapy. Logotherapy is a type of existentialist analysis that focuses on a will to meaning, founded on the belief that striving to find a meaning in one's life is the primary driving force in humans.

Frankl's main goal in writing Man's Search for Meaning was to convey to the reader through a concrete example that life holds a potential meaning under any condition, even the most miserable ones. Frankl's idea is a simplistic yet powerful concept, each person is the master of his own fate and must hold himself responsible for his own destiny. While he can not control the action of those around him and will not always control every situation, his strength lies in the way he empowers meaning from each situation and each struggle.

An aspect of Frankl's view is that meaning is always changing and, as human are perpetually making choices and reorienting themselves within the world, the meaning of life is inherently transitory. What matters is not the overall abstract concept of the meaning of life, but the meaning of a person's life at a particular moment. Each person must strive to find what drives them to action and to success. At this moment, writing this essay, I am driven by my desire to further my education. At other times, like in diving, I am driven by my desire to be the best, I push myself forward through the frigid practices in order to progress personally as an athlete.

Frankl conveys a definite contrasts between the prisoners that surrendered to the suffering and succumbed to death, and the prisoners that triumphed over the pain. The difference for the prisoners between life and death lay in their mindset. Survivors had some meaning or purpose to propel them forward, while the ones that died had simply given up hope; the body cannot endure without the mind. Frankl concludes by quoting Nietzsche, "he who has a why to live for can bear almost any how." Without being aware that a purpose exists, humans do not search for their reason to be and commit metaphoric suicide with their lives.

In previous eras, tradition, religion, and other community structures conferred a sense of meaning in life, clarifying the direction and purpose of individuals. Because these structure have eroded, individuals must assume the responsibility to seek meaning themselves. When humans are unaware of their driving forces and go through life unaware of why they continue their rote action, they fall subject to the "existential vacuum," a pervasive pattern of existential frustration, where one experiences one's life as being empty and meaningless. Meaning is harder to define in the modern world of clones, in a society that promotes conformity, totalitarianism, and aphrodesia, values that are essentially passive and unsatisfying. This in turn contributes to the continual rise in social and mental maladies like depression, aggression, and addiction.

The first step in avoiding the vacuum is defining the self. In applying for college I am asked to define and describe myself to a governing board of complete strangers. I initially struggled with who I was and how I was different from the other millions of applicants applying to college. I fought against the vacuum, determined to know my own self. I began by taking a pencil and a piece of paper and making a list of things I liked and of adjectives that describe. I soon began writing prolifically and was unable to stop at ant given word limit. Applying for college has been a self actualizing journey and has given me a better sense of who I am, what my goal are in life, and what I want to become. I know my journey is far from over, but I am thoroughly excited to be on the brink of self discovery and to continue my journey in college.
captaincrunch   
Oct 31, 2010
Undergraduate / Advertising, Journalism? - ESSAY FOR HARVARD, UCHICAGO, AMERICAN, CARNEGIE [15]

I faced brutality freshman year, when my high school swim team coach scratched me from Sectionals with no explanation. He had no excuse to scratch, which devastated me because I was seeded first and would have made it to state finals.

wording here is a bit awkward..maybe: when my high school swim team coach scratched me from Sectionals with no explanation, this devastated me. He had no reason to scratch me from the race, I was seeded first and would have made it to state finals
captaincrunch   
Oct 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "Curiosity Didn't Kill Me" - Critique on Common App Essay [6]

i like it, its different from the other one's i've read on here and it definately cpture my attention
i deffinately feel the same about computers and curiosity...but this could be submitted under option 1 on common app: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
captaincrunch   
Oct 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "explore the world from a new perspective" - What makes Stanford a good place for you [4]

I decided to just rewrite it...how's this?

The solutions to world issues cannot be solved from a single direction; they often require collaboration from several fields. I believe in a similar approach to my education. At Stanford I will have to freedom of interdisciplinary studies and can explore my interests in neuroscience along with my fascination of biomedical engineering, computer sciences, and philosophy. Taking a combination of versatile courses will help me develop a unique perspective of the brain and a new approach to neural research. The comprehensive classes, ingenious professors, and collaborative environment will assure me the interdisciplinary education I crave. The research opportunities for undergraduate students will allow me to apply my knowledge and explore new outcomes while working closely with other passionate students and teachers. I hope to contribute to the basis of human knowledge and understanding and push the bounds of modern science.

To say that I want Stanford is not enough, everyone want Stanford, so what makes me different from the other 30,000 applicants? It's not my deeply passionate nature or love of knowledge, or my curiosity, the answer lies within my drive. Stanford is my opportunity to contribute to the world. Watching those around me suffering from strokes and other neurological disorders has inspired me to find a solution. The brain is the basis of human life, yet it remains the most mysterious and misunderstood part of the body, and I am inexorably fascinated by it. I am driven by my quest for understanding.

I am consonant with the ideologies at the core of Stanford University and know that I will fully take advantage of the opportunities available to me. I expect to thrive in the challenging yet rewarding environment and contribute to the diversity of the university
captaincrunch   
Oct 28, 2010
Undergraduate / "Music is a necessity for me" - Stanford: future roommate short essay [4]

This is what i have so far, but i think it needs something. tell me what you think, i need feedback! Rip it to shreds

any suggestions/comments, everythings helpful

We'll have nine months to get to know each other better, but we have to start somewhere.

Music is a necessity for me, especially when studying. My brain works on several different levels at once, and listening to music helps to keep me cognizant and focused on one task. An innumerable amount of times I have shocked myself to find I already completed my calculus homework or biology project while the entire time I had been analyzing the latest story for my English class and mentally drafting an essay. Most days you will probably find me sitting cross-legged on my bed, papers around me in an ordered semicircle, my laptop at my side and my iPod blaring just about anything but country. Sometimes breaks are a necessity for my mental sanity. While I push myself with and am fully committed to my school work, I know when I need a break. Sometimes the best thing I could ever do when working on a particularly tricky assignment is to take an exercise break. Going for a jog or doing an abdominal workout clears my mind and the problem I was struggling with seems to almost solve itself. So, when I'm not busy studying, doing brain teasers, or reading, I like to stay active. Swimming, diving, biking, hiking, running, yoga, and, ever since I saw The Matrix, I have wanted to take up Kung Fu.

I have a wide variety of interest and I am always open to trying new things, hopefully we can learn from each other show each other something new.
captaincrunch   
Oct 28, 2010
Undergraduate / JHU essay. Why major in Biomedical Engineering [6]

it sounds pretty good overall--I'm going into the same major
it's such an exciting and growing field, the possibilities are truly endless
captaincrunch   
Oct 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "explore the world from a new perspective" - What makes Stanford a good place for you [4]

This is what I have so far, so I could use some help proof/editing please
any commentary or feedback is helpful

Sitting atop my roof watching the sun set over Arizona, the shadows lengthen, the sky darkens, and stars appear in the night sky, I began contemplating my future. For a moment I felt entirely uncertain. I didn't know where my life would take me or the things I would be able to accomplish, or how I would achieve any of it. My scientific, analytical brain took over in order to find these answers. I began by merely stating what I was interested in, this is what I came up with. I am inexorably fascinated with the brain. The possibilities for neural research are endless and I truly believe the secrets of the universe are locked within the brain. I am going to apply biomedical engineering to the brain. In fifty years, looking back, I want to be able to say that I helped discover the secret for regenerating neural tissue ...
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