Undergraduate / "to ignite my aspirations" - My passion to become an engineer at U penn [7]

I'll edit yours if you edit mine :)
Thanks!! that really helped! Its down to 489 words wohoo!
Edited version: I feel that there is not a coherence between the acknowledgement for women's engineering abilities and your development for space suits. How can I incorporate my work with NASA to say that in order for ideas to become real your need opportunities. At Penn that opportunity would be from the research and AWE program... any suggestions?

Undergraduate / ("Princeton in the Nation's Service") How to Improve Princeton Supplement Essay? [30]

WOW this is crazy amaazinngg. omg your a writer that truly knows how to be personal, and descriptive. I was cryingg!!! Your gonna get in don't worry!!!!!

can you pleasee read my upenn essay? it's not as great as yours, but i really need some more review :)

Undergraduate / UC prompt 1: How band helped me realize how change can be good [13]

... but my parents were forcing me to leave my home of 14 yearsthe house I spent 14 years in on Long Island, New York, to find ...
... teammates, and family who were still in New York.

b But I will always remember that even when things do not go as planned;(change to comma) something great will still come in the end.

good job! can you read my upenn essay in return :)

Undergraduate / "returning to my life of academia" - Rochester curriculum 150 words [26]

A Rochester education would allow me to explore my passion in these subjects, as well as grant me access to renowned educators, the latest technological advances, and a plethora of research opportunities.

I look forward to learning, envisioning and exploring all subjects of the academia.

NICEEE! can you read my u penn essay in return its due in an hour for me!!!!!!

Undergraduate / There are many things I wish I knew, but most of all I wish I knew the future. [8]

I think the ending are fine for these essays! concise and to the point.

Can you read my upenn essay :)

Undergraduate / "to ignite my aspirations" - My passion to become an engineer at U penn [7]

I had originally done that but my word count went up :(
basically I want to use the same ideas found in this essay to write my essay for uc..
I'll read your essays now

Undergraduate / UChicago's Find x: The Missing Ingredient [2]

wow! nicely done! I enjoyed reading this, and I do like this idea for this prompt. I can tell you that you are on the right track of answering the prompt, but I can't be too sure until it is finished. So post up the rest and i'll give it a read. But, this is definitely not a cliche topic to write about. I think it is rather fascinating! :)