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mdipeolu   
May 25, 2012
Undergraduate / (Nursing program) Admission for RN to BSN program. [4]

Question : Please submit a concise essay, which addresses your prior education and work experience, as well as how you expect the BSN to enhance your professional career goals. If you can, please incorporate the following:

- Experiences and motivations which have contributed significantly to your decision to pursue the BSN degree.*
- Based on your professional experience, specify qualities that you feel are essential to nursing.*
- Please indicate your interest in graduate study. Address the specific specialty area(s) that you may want to pursue and the population you would like to serve.*

What I Expect BSN to Enhance in my Professional Goals ( Can someone please make this topic more precise for me?)
Being a registered nurse for the past five years have been a great experience for me. My experiences have shaped me to be cautious, very observant to the slight-less changes, and being fulfill as well. I attended a three-year school of nursing and worked as a medical and pediatric nurse for three years. My experiences in these fields have helped me to realize the importance of holistic and individualized care. I have learned about disease conditions collectively in class, but I discovered that the application of these knowledge have to be personalized to individual client. Helping and assisting the sick have been something that makes me feel fulfilled in life, and am happy making others happy. I presently work with individuals that are physically or mentally challenged and I felt the need to broaden my knowledge in order to serve this population better. I also have the dream to be a nursing professor which I believe is a good way to contribute my quota to the development of nursing and help others to provide the best care required of them as a nurse. To achieve all these dreams, having a BSN degree is the first step to make my dream come true.

In addition, my professional experience has made me to realize that having a questioning-mind and a never-ending quest to learn are few of the greatest qualities a nurse must possess among others like being empathetic, able to perform multiply task at a time, knowing your values and great assessment skill.

Furthermore, having a graduate degree will also provide me with the skills and knowledge. For these reasons, I will like to pursue my graduate study in Community Health Nursing and Nursing Education to better serve the mentally and physically challenged individuals, and move closer to my dream of being a nursing professor.

In conclusion, getting admission into your great institution nursing program will help me overcome the long bridge between my dream and its extents in actual life.

Thanks.
mdipeolu   
May 25, 2012
Writing Feedback / Students spending time studying, but what about physical activities? [5]

In today's world, majority of prospective full-time university students are spending most of their time studying. Having said that(However), I completely agree( 0f the opinion that) they need to spend time doing other activities. This will(could) be proven by looking( taking a look) at how physical wellbeing and family life are important along with( as well as) education.

For one(instance), students need to spend time on physical activities(spending time on physical activities should also so be one of a student priorities). Let us take Shanghai as an example (For example,) Students in Shanghai are well known for their higher educational performances. This is demonstrated by the economic contribution from them to their country's benefit( This is demonstrated by their effortless contribution to their country's economic development). The drawback here is that (Unfortunately,)these students are becoming obese by spending most of their time studying, and not doing any sports. Thus, as can be clearly seen from my example there is a need of physical exercises as well( Thus, it can be clearly seen that physical exercise will be of greater benefit to student than it can be imagined).

In addition, students need to concentrate on family relations( long distance studying have created less interpersonal relationships between family members). For instance, in America, students often traverse longer distances and live at student residences in order to commit to full-time studies. This leads to damages in their family relations. Living with family allows them to have a sense of empathy and makes them become responsible. This makes it clear why students need to indulge in other activities as well as in education.

In conclusion, after looking at how important physical health and relations are in students' lives; it has now been proven that students need to spend time on other activities as well. Doing that gives them better health and strengthens their relationship to their families.

I made some corrections . The essay is concise and short. You may need to explain your examples further to give a broader view.
mdipeolu   
Jul 22, 2011
Book Reports / Critical Essay on "The Storm" by Kate Chopin research [2]

I will really appreciate if any instructor can help me go over this paper quickly because it is due tonight. I was only given two days to write this, and it really took a lot of effort to put this together. Thanks.

Instruction: Write a critical essay on Kate Chopin's "The Storm," William Faulkner's "A Rose for Emily," Ernest Hemingway's "Soldier's Home," or Ralph Ellison's "Battle Royal," using one of the approaches below.

I used approach #2
Approach #2: Biographical Analysis
Illuminate your reading of one of the selected works by considering the author's biography. In your essay, show how biographical context of the author is relevant to your interpretation of the work.


Critical Essay on "The Storm" by Kate Chopin



Marriage had been known to be traditionally dominated by the man while the woman is expected to be submissive in all forms. In the late 1800's women are not expected to express their displeasure in marriage. Marriage was known to be the "happily ever after" indeed. Kate Chopin-being an independent widow after her husband's death - decided to be the voice of the woman of that time by writing stories about how the women feel suppressed and confined sexually and spiritually to their marriage. The general society at that time does not give room for women to be open-minded. In the story "The Storm," which was not published immediately until after Chopin dead, due to its sexual content This helps to set the reader's mind to the time when the women are not allowed to express their sexual desire. In "The Storm" we see a woman who tries to conform to the societal norm of marriage, but find another means to fulfill her sexual desire which gives her joy and satisfaction.

Literally, "The storm" means a disturbance of the normal condition of the atmosphere, manifesting itself by winds of unusual force or direction, often accompanied by rain, snow, hail, thunder, and lightning, or flying sand or dust. Chopin uses the storm to illustrate the sexual tension that was sustained throughout the story between the character of Calixta and Alcee. Some critic suggested that Chopin's title refers to nature, which symbolizes feminine; therefore the title illustrates the image of feminine sexually and passion. I agree with this opinion, and this can be related Chopin's background which is made up of mostly widowed woman. It concurs with the information that the discrepancies in her life, led her to become an independent writer, and an activist.

In the beginning of the story, Bobinot- Calixta's husband was introduced as a caring husband and loving father. He knew what his wife loves and decided to buy it for her. This is to show that Bobinot was happy with his marriage. He will do anything to avoid getting into trouble with his wife. Calixta was said to be sewing furiously by the window side at home, unaware of the storm. Calixta can also be described as a devoted wife who works hard to make her home better, but was unaware of the approaching storm. Chopin illustrated that before the storm everything was fine. The woman sexuality was shown to be constraint as represented by the house chores Calixta performs. It can be deduced that Chopin is trying to tell the reader that not all act of adultery was intended. From her biography by Emily Toth, it was read that she had an affair with a married man called Albert Sampite which bloom after Chopin's husband's death. Chopin is trying to show the world that woman's hidden sexual desire can be erupted uncontrollably when she finds the right person, and not every woman finds joy in the assumed happy marriage.

More so, Chopin uses the house chores Calixta focuses on to symbolize the constraints of marriage and the unperceived need for sexuality. When Alcee came into the house, Calixta tried everything possible to repress her sexual urge for Alcee by keeping Bobinot and Bibi in mind, but this was overpowered by her sexual urge. "Alcée flung himself into a rocker and Calixta nervously began to gather up from the floor the lengths of a cotton sheet which she had been sewing (P II)." Calixta knew she was sexually attracted to Alcee, but must conform to the societal norm of honesty in marriage. Chopin was said to have attend a catholic boarding school which influence her idea about the need to keep the bed undefiled. Everywoman is expected to maintain honesty in her marriage during Chopin's time no matter what the husband does.

During the storm in the story, Calixta put everything aside and finally decided to let her desire take over her. Calixta knew this will be a betrayal to her marriage but was determined to carry on with the act. The storm Alcee seeks shelter from can be addressed as the societal obstacle in their world while the storm inside is the Calixta's forbidden fervor up inside the house with them. Chopin continually uses the storm as a symbol in the story.

The joy in Calixta heart during the sexual act was immeasurable. "When he touched her breasts they gave themselves up in quivering ecstasy, inviting his lips. Her mouth was a fountain of delight. And when he possessed her, they seemed to swoon together at the very borderland of life's mystery"(P II). The author's description of Calixta at the beginning as being frustrated and furious was changed, and expressed as being happy and fulfilled during the act. Chopin is trying to portray to the reader that when women are sexually fulfilled, their mood and attitudes change for better. Chopin further described Calixta's mood saying "the generous abundance of her passion, without guile or trickery, was like a white flame which penetrated and found response in depths of his own sensuous nature that had never yet been reached (p II)." Calixta experienced what could be described as her climax. It was shown that Calixta had longed for this, but was more committed to managing her marriage the way it is.

At the end of the story, when the rain storm was over; "and the sun was turning the glistening green world into a palace of gems,"" Calixta, on the gallery, watched Alcée ride away. He turned and smiled at her with a beaming face; and she lifted her pretty chin in the air and laughed aloud (p III)." Calixta did not feel guilty for what she did, neither did Alcee. They both acted like nothing happened and decided to be nicer to their spouse and have a better home. The massage Chopin seems to be passing at the end of the story was that, so far the woman is happy with what she did; the society- the external storm- can be over looked. Chopin used the illustration of the sun turning the world into a palace of gems as a new life after the internal storm Calixta experienced was over.

In conclusion, "The Storm" is not only a story about humans' innate sexual tendencies, but this story also represents the sexual reservations of Chopin's particular time period. Chopin seemed to be more connected with her feminine sexuality due to her background. Through Chopin's writing of this story, she was able to communicate her own thoughts about sexuality, and was also able to make a concealed declaration about her mind-set on the sexual way of life of the modern time era. "The Storm" continues Chopin's argument with the theme of the difficulty of the marriage and the sexuality of women. She portrays the marital problems of the 1800's and was not afraid to talk about her opinion.
mdipeolu   
Feb 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad? [3]

I think this essay is too brief. It sounds more like a summary of the original essay. Put some more example and use transition words. The last sentence of your first paragraph should also be in your conclusion.

Parents always want their children succeed in their life. However, they have to motive these children to do well in school but not with money. In order to let children focus on their studies, parents should use other constructive means but not money.

First, I think giving money to praise children for high marks will distract them from the purpose of learning . For example, when I was a substitute teacher in elementary school, I saw a boy who will not to do anything unless he gets some money from his parents or teacher. With my experience, it became clear to me that money as an incentive can't make a child productive rather,they become less constructive.

More so / Furthermore, I think children still need to get something they really want after excellent performance in school, but not money. Every children want to get some praises form their parents or teachers who are important in their mind. Even adults want to get their boss' praises about their work. Besides, praises can make children more self-confidence. I believe children who are more self-confidence will make more success not only in school, but also in their life.

In conclusion/finally, using money to praise children for their high marks is worse than better. Parents should be smart to use some appropriate words as praises to encourage children to focus on pursue their own succeed.
mdipeolu   
Feb 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / favor food, why it's so special [10]

Hi Kathy, I think this will help you.
Form what you want your thesis statement (central points) to be in the essay and explain why. You can also start your essay with some statistical information about food or ask a provocative question.
mdipeolu   
Feb 8, 2011
Writing Feedback / Nursing, My First Job Experience (narrative essay) [3]

I need help for my narrative essay first draft in school.

As Iwas going around in the city in search for a job, a question that comes to my mind was how do I get job experience when nobody offered me for job? Although I just graduated from a three year College of Nursing few months ago, I couldn't find a job because the employers required only experienced candidates. Could you imaging being in my shoes? Statistics showed that there was over 2.9percent increase in the number of the unemployed in my country 2006. I got frustrated being one of this population and decided to go back home hoping luck will smile on me one day. As I was walking towards the house, the radiating beam from my sister's face made me wondering what had happened. After all, I was being told one Missionary hospital that i applied to called me for an interview in the next two days. I was happy because i knew it was time for me to be considered experienced in the labor market. I couldn't believe it when I got the job because the interview was like writing the Nursing Board exam itself. I was so delighted getting the job but my experience in this hospital was one I will never forget and will live to appreciate for the rest of my life. It was my first exposure to the real world in my field, thereby assisted me in learning how to be independent and be responsible for all my action. It also taught me that being at your best all the time will be of greater advantage to you in life.

My resumption day was a beautiful monday morning. On entering the unit i was assisgned to,I saw the head nurse and other staff holding a meeting. I greeted everyone and stood by the corner to listen to what was being said. They all seems delighted to see me because they had been shortage of staff for a while and my presence means more hands. While trying to adapt to my new situation, the next word i heard was "this is our new dummie and she will be working with us as a colleague. Please put her through when necessary." These were the words from the head nurse. I felt downgraded but the smiles and hugs from everyone in the room lifted my spirit. I knew I had to prove to the point that I am not a dummie. I was allocated to take care of about 15 clients with different disease conditions and no mistake is expected of me. I took my time to study their case files and started attending to them. One of the client was the most difficult client had ever met. She insisted that i will not touch her even after being persuaded for a very long time. I got resentful and kept imaging how i will cope in the future. It took the intervention of a senior staff to influence her decision. By the time my shift will be over , i had barely attended to half of the clients. The head Nurse decided to put me through how things should done faster. With her assistance,we were able to complete my tasks in a couple of hours. This made me realize why people say experience can not be brought with money but will be learnt with time.

Taking responsible for my action was something I am always afraid of while in college but being registered invested that power on me. For example, I drew attention of the dosage to a physician when he prescribed 15mg of brenadryl for a ten-year-old child; however, he said that the child needed medication and told me to give it to him. Eventually, the child was being put into almost 24 hours sleeping without eating and doing anything else. Nervously, I reported to my head nurse, who confronted the physician and blamed it on her but she insisted that it was my fault because i should have know that right dosage. My head nurse punished me by siezeing one of my off days because i didn't reported the incident to her before administering the drug.I was only lucky the child did't get worse and my license wasn't on the line of being suspended.

Also, maintaining a good relationship with the boss or other staff members bacame one of my priorties after my first job experience. My boss was the most understanding person i have ever met . Many people said she is weird, but I would say she is only disciplined and professional. On one faithful day, when I was on my way to a client, I saw a man and he asked me to assit him to go to a restroom. I told him to give me a couple minutes and I would be with him, but he started shouting and screaming?. After finishing my errands, I walked to him but he started to kick, hit, and abuse me. I was calm and apologized for the waiting. Also, I showed him to the restroom but he still complained to the overall matron in charge who decided that she would punish me without even listening to my explanation. My saving grace was my immediate boss who told her that I am one of her best nurses and I have never abused any client. This showed me the power of good interpersonal relationship.

In conclusion, my first job was full of experiences: good, bad, bitter and happy moments I can't even remember but they shapened me to be a better person and be more professional. I discovered that some people can just decided to be more difficult to test your response in certain situations and see if you will be patient enough with them. Infact, being accomodating and friendlier with clients and colleagues became my watch word because you don't know who will be your saving grace on the bad days.
mdipeolu   
Dec 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / Ielts : Young people's awareness of global issues [4]

Rina, if feel your essay was out of point .Your illustrations were not in line with the question and the concluding part was too short.Try to build your points in such a way that they can make meaning to the reader.Overall, It is a good try but you need to work harder.
mdipeolu   
Dec 1, 2010
Grammar, Usage / To get correction of these sentences [11]

The student [....] is eligible to attend the Study Abroard Programme at the Roehampton Univeristy, London. A semester in this programme will be beneficial and fit in with her educational achievement.
mdipeolu   
Nov 30, 2010
Writing Feedback / The meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements [2]

The genuie meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply be defined as the accomplishments that a person as acheieved in life or the opposite of failure to be precise.This makes it a misbelieve that being successful solely depend on earning a lot of money.

Firstly,lets take a look at the very wealthy hollywood stars and musicians,they make so much money but are always invovle in one sandal or the other...

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