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1mPeRvI0uS   
Dec 27, 2010
Undergraduate / "I am from a village in Macedonia" - A letter to your future roommate! [3]

Dear Roommate
My name is Nikolche Kolev and I am from a village in Macedonia, called Erdzelija. I know that you may have never heard of Macedonia before, but Macedonia is a small country located in the Balkans, in the southeastern part of Europe. I could write about my love for sports, rock music and science fiction, but I believe that we already might have that in common. So I'll try to give you a unique aspect of mine.

One of my favorite pastimes is making paper airplanes. As I grew up, I took my passion for making flying crafts to the next level. I created my first hovercraft model when I was eleven. There is no greater pleasure for me than seeing something I created with my own hands working perfectly.

Another thing is that I love computer games. I love playing strategies like Stronghold Crusader and Red Alert. If you like, these games also, we can have a little one on one when we meet.

I am sure that you haven't heard about my favorite card game Kant. This game is specific to my hometown, and is especially difficult to master due to its tactical aspect. Kant is all about guessing your teammates cards from the way he or she is playing. Masters of the game are able to guess their cards just after a couple of hands!

I can't wait to show the dynamic of Kant in person!
Sincerely,
Nikolche

Please comment on any grammar or structural mistakes!
Thanks in advance
1mPeRvI0uS   
Dec 26, 2010
Undergraduate / "used to sharing my room" - Stanford : message to roommate [2]

it's a letter...so try starting with...dear future roomate or so...
try writing an essay that opens you, and talks about things that are unique about you...do not write about an introduction...cause (no offense) with an essay like this you certainly won't get one !
1mPeRvI0uS   
Dec 26, 2010
Undergraduate / (father debate, natural world, dishes) Why Stanford, Intellectual Vitality and Letter [8]

essays 1 and 2...do not use quotes...restate them with your own words...
essay 1: you have a good intro its catchy but maybe you should try to do more showing in the second paragraph and try telling the point and how it relates to you things in the last one

essay 2: tell them what makes you a good match for stanford...do not praise stanford...imo you completely missed the point.
essay 3: it's ok I guess!
1mPeRvI0uS   
Dec 26, 2010
Undergraduate / "A good match for all of me" (Why Stanford) [4]

try telling why you are a good match for stanford...saying stanford is good in this this and this it's not the idea...you need to write something unique...for ex if you write tufts or yale instead of stanford the essay would go...try finding a unique characteristic of yours that matches stanford!
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