Undergraduate / "My family is an immigrant from China!" - Mit, The world I come from and my dream. [2]

Please, edit my grammar errors. Tell me what do you think about as well. I'd be more than glad to tear to essay apart and start a new one if you guys really think that it doesn't fit with the prompt and not good enough.

Thank you in advance.

Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations? (*) (200-250 words)

Since I was a kid I always amazed by constructions, buildings, towers. I always imagine myself as an engineer who standing on the top of the buildings working with those construction workers, controlling those fantastic looking machines, be part of the people who built those buildings.

My family is an immigrant! We migrated down from Southern China about five decays ago. I used to hear series of stories about how my grandpa managed to hide from the cops. Although, hearing those stories over and over again never make me want to be a policeman. Then when it came to my parent generation, both my mom and my dad side were an illegal immigrant, they finally got Thai's citizenship. Then, my grandpa got sick - he has cancer, he was suffering from it for almost a year and finally it killed him. At that moment, I thought 'if' I were a doctor, I might be able to heal him. Although, that was just a quick thought - quickly come, quickly gone. After this I have a great job, tutoring, which made me around $100 a day, but I know that whenever I figure something better to do I will be quickly move out of this job.

Although, I have several of chances to change my aim, but for some reasons, it just never changes. It always is the same thing as I first started it out. It always is an engineer.

Undergraduate / "I came back from an exchange program to USA, Thailand" - MIT, Significant challenge [2]

I extended the word limit, but I think that might not be a big deal? I'm not quite sure whether I answer the prompt good enough. So, please give me any comments if you think I should fix it a little more. Please, help me with the grammar and structure too!

Thank you in advance.

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

After, I came back from an exchange program to USA. I want to work as a tutor, in Thailand almost everyone goes to tutoring school. So, I can keep up with my English. I started it out by putting ads on the internet. I had couple cases that called me and arranged the place that we could meet, but at the end, my customers had never showed up. It could be because they think that internet is unreliable. Therefore, I changed my strategy. I put paper ads on, with my profile and mobile number, and I told my teachers that I want to a tutor and I am looking for students, it would be great if they could help me. This did not work again. I thought that it might be because no one notices my ad; even know it was such a big colorful sign, also most of the teachers already teach a special class for themselves as well. Until that moment, I have been spending three months with two methods just to find 'a' customer. 'Don't give up' that was the word I told myself. This time I analyze all the things I have been failed to see in order to gain students. I have failed to capture anyone attention and to make them feel that I am real and reliable. This time I open an English club to teach any students for free. Then, I advertise myself. It worked this time! At this very moment I teach about ten students each day, I gain almost $100 a day. Moreover, my students always pay me respect when we walk by each other.

Undergraduate / "want to major in Engineering" Which department at MIT appeals to you and why ? [12]

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Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

Have you ever imagined that a 131 x 80 pixels black & white monitor can give out such a beautiful picture? About two years ago, I bought myself a graphing calculator for my birthday present. I vividly remember that I was spending my entire night putting equations into the calculator and see how their shapes like. Ever since then, I've started to draw pictures by putting whole bunch of equations into the calculator. Therefore, I want to major in Engineering where I can learn more about all these graphs and learn how to use them in a proper way.

Undergraduate / "paper and glue to make 3D models" - MIT! What do you do for the pleasure? [4]

Please help me check the grammar mistake and tell me about what you think of my essay

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

I always have to buy paper and glue to make 3D models. I built since a 10 cm high little shutter to a meter high Taipei 101 building, but these models are upset my mom because every aspect of my room has been filled with them - so she has a hard time to walk in. I usually have an inspiration to build any models of mine by travelling and most of the place where I go I'll take a walk. So, I can capture pictures of all the buildings I pass and slow down my thoughts. So, I can think about my next model.