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Joined: Dec 30, 2010
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tiffany17   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "I came back from an exchange program to USA, Thailand" - MIT, Significant challenge [2]

Thanks for your input on mine.

After,delete the comma I came back from an exchange program to USA.<<doesnt make sense.reworde I want to work as a tutor, in Thailand almost everyone goes to tutoring school. So, I can keep up with my English. I started it out by putting ads on the internet. I had a couple of cases that called me and arranged the place that we could meet, but at the end, my customers had never showed up.

this has many grammatical errors, i only fixed a few. If you the fixed the errors, it would make more sense.
tiffany17   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "COWBOY BOOTS" - STANFORD - ROOMMATE LETTER [14]

Pretty good overall. I think you can take out the "no pun intended part" and omit the P.S. part. Other than that it was pretty good. I answered that same question :)
tiffany17   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "there is a song for everything I have ever felt" - Stanford Roommate [5]

"I think I'm in love with my radio, cause it never lets me down. And I fall in love with my stereo, whenever I hear that sound", words sang by Beyonce in her song "Radio". It's safe to say that I am in love with music. I love how there is a song for everything I have ever felt, such as heartbreak, happiness, loneliness, and a want for God. Sometimes, I just sit and listen to my music and let the rhythm and melodies hit me and take me away where my mp3 player is my best friend. I love how one song evokes memories, how another gets me ready for a track meet, and how Mary Mary's "Heaven" gets me excited for the future. Music became alive for me when I joined the Marching Band as a flute player and flag girl, where I got to march and dance to the beat of the music. I love the fact that I can sit down at the piano and teach myself how to play a song by ear. If only I could sing as good as I play. Consider this your warning, when I am really feeling a song don't be surprised if you hear me singing along, maybe you'll want to sing along with me! As my roommate, I hope you love music just as much as I do, if not, I would be happy to show you the many things I have learned by just listening to it.

i dont know what else to do. is it good???
tiffany17   
Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / Short Answer: Running, my heavy breathing [14]

nice!! i can relate because i am a runner too! i agree with brookelenae .you should connect this to another significant part of your life.
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