EricJ
Sep 29, 2011
Undergraduate / NYU SCPS - Kick in the Teeth [4]
Hi, John,
Thanks for your service to our country.
Scarred has two r's.
I've learned to view life's "roadblocks" as challenges that provide me the opportunity to grow as an individual; as a result, I've found my purpose in life. This is why I am ready to attend New York University.
In essence, earning a degree from NYU not only benefits me - it also will benefit the hundreds of veterans whose lives I will change.
Personal taste, but I don't like "Instead of wallowing in self-pity..." It's too strong and too negative. The sentence is better if you drop that phrase.
Good luck,
Eric
Hi, John,
Thanks for your service to our country.
Scarred has two r's.
I've learned to view life's "roadblocks" as challenges that provide me the opportunity to grow as an individual; as a result, I've found my purpose in life. This is why I am ready to attend New York University.
In essence, earning a degree from NYU not only benefits me - it also will benefit the hundreds of veterans whose lives I will change.
Personal taste, but I don't like "Instead of wallowing in self-pity..." It's too strong and too negative. The sentence is better if you drop that phrase.
Good luck,
Eric