Writing Feedback / Groups or Organizations are an important part of people's lives. Are they important? [5]

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Groups or Organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position

I agree that Groups or Organizations are crucial to people's lives. They can get more association with other colleagues, learn new norms and value for a living and apply all of them to the whole community. Joining Groups or Organizations will shape you how to survive a dynamic society.

First, People will have to make friends
Today, it is true that we must have a lot of friends so that when people have a problem, they immediately come round to help you. Therefore, if they attend a group or movement, they will have an opportunity to meet a lot of companions and hit it off very quickly. For example, Mr Karn is not outgoing and does keep company and when he decides to join The Rotari Association, he is a lot more talkative than he was a year ago.

Second, they will have an opportunity to learn new ways of living in a group.
Most of people who stay alone do not get accustomed to how to behave politely in public. Some behaviors are considered either unacceptable or acceptable. When they join the movement for a while, they learn new cultures like greeting and talking so that they are quickly familiar with living approaches in a rapid-changing society.

Third, after understanding proper behaviors in their own group, they can easily adapt themselves to other people from different backgrounds.
Nowadays, there are a lot of people who do not different cultures towards professional and personal lives. It is very hard for all the people to behave the same. Therefore, if they have an experience to make friends and learn good interaction among their own group, they can apply it to those who are very strange and unfriendly.

To sum up, Groups or Organizations is a path toward how to make a proper living in a rapidly-changing society. People can learn new approaches of leading a happy and normal life and do not trouble getting used to many citizens from different places through means obtained from association in their own Groups or Organizations.

Writing Feedback / 'money for school tuition'; Teens work while they are still students [4]

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In some country, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a very good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

I agree that this is a very good thing because it is very beneficial for teenagers to get jobs and at the same time study in a school. This can create their habits of self sufficiency in the dynamic society without being dependent on their parents. There are three advantages teenagers can obtain from working while studying.

First, teenagers can learn how to apply their knowledge to their career.
Today, a lot of companies recruit personnel who have more experiences because these are very crucial to the success of work. If teenagers do not have enough experience, they are disqualified or do not produce good working outcome for the company

Second, they have money to pay for school tuition themselves.
When they have money from working, they can spend it on tuition without asking parents for it. I think this habit is good especially in a fast-paced changing society which everyone cannot stay alone and is outgoing because they do not make their parents worried about it.

Third, they can take care of their family by themselves
Nowadays, many people mainly from poor background do not have ample money even to care for either themselves or their children. Therefore, it is a responsibility of teenagers to do jobs for money to help their family. For example, In the Northeastern part of Thailand, most parents send their teenagers come to study while work in Bangkok because they think it is only way to reduce their burdens especially money.

In conclusion, working and studying at the same time can create a lot of advantages. Teenagers can adapt to new lifestyles and survive without any burden on their parents. They can use their ability from class in a real life and have money for expenditures particularly on an education fee and family.

Writing Feedback / Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation? [7]

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Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

In my view, people from different ages do not possess the same things which may be considered either right or wrong. Moreover, the social trends old generation were familiar with ...

Writing Feedback / Many students educate themselves abroad - it's parents' decision or enthusiasm over living overseas [5]

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Many students choose to attend school or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your example.

In my view, a lot of people want to continue their studying in foreign countries because of their parents' decision or enthusiasm over living abroad. However, they decide mainly to study oversea for benefits like learning new language, making friends and understanding culture.

First, Students find it very easy to get English than in their own country.

Today, many of them do not like to study in their homeland because the environments here are not suitable for learning English. When they study about it, they can not only sit and listen to their teacher but also apply it to real life. For example, they may work as a tour guide and have to use English to communicate with tour members, so that they are comfortable to your services.

Second, they can associate with plenty of friends from different nations.
When they study abroad, they find it is very good for them to contact more colleagues and share an exchange of words with one another. There are a lot of advantages from having many friends; for example, their peers can give you advice when you are in trouble and they do not feel lonely and go out a lot.

Third, they can learn how to adapt to the living lifestyles abroad.
It is true that different countries have dissimilar cultures and when you go to study in the United States, you have to adapt your lifestyles so that you are treated well and know how to survive in dynamic cultural variations. For example, In Thailand, you have to obey teacher no matter what he tells you; however, In America, you can express everything with freedom if it provides good things for a society.

In conclusion, studying abroad has a lot of advantages that appeal to students, each of whom develop their own reasons or mother's for overseas education. Main benefits that they inevitably get are new language, social association and new culture.