Undergraduate / "economics was the right career path for me", common app transfer columbia university [7]

The RED is what needs to change to make it seem like i dont regret going to miami dade, can someone help make it better?

My reasons for transferring may seem impulsive but rest assured, the decision is most desirable. Miami Dade college does not offer fine counseling and resource services. When approaching the academic advisors for assistance in the college search and transfer process, all I received were ineffectual suggestions and several Associate degree planning worksheets. Where as, at Columbia, communication between the students and staff is greatly treasured. Elemental features of communication lead to the many opportunities that Columbia has to offer.

With regard to academic aspects, the Economics department at Miami Dade College does not fully provide students with the depth and distinctive features of the educational program, due to the limited availability of full-time faculty. Therefore, should I gain admission to Columbia, I would have a chance to further learn and explore my interest regarding this major with 55 current instructors at your department of economics. Columbia has a well-known world class business program in which I hope to partake; professors such as, Jeffrey D. Sachs, who has been an inspirational leader in his field and is placed among the 100 most influential leaders in the world by Time magazine. His research in poverty reduction and debt cancellation for the poorest countries matches my own interest. I look forward to gaining a more vital focus in this field, and advance in my educational quest.

And i want to add this in there but dont know how to blend it in. Please Help.

Despite the fact that enrolling at Miami-Dade College, at a glance, seem like an impulsive mistake. However, I do not perceive it as a blunder but instead, I see Miami-Dade College as a stepping stone for ushering me towards (need help here), where the business program encourages students to excel. Being an entrepreneur at heart, I am fascinated by the discussion of business especially when it deals with law.

Should I even mention Miami Dade College and just answer Why I want to transfer and what I hope to achieve.. even though one of my reasons for transfering is to go to a better school compared to mdc.

Please Help. I am in dire need of it. :/

Undergraduate / "economics was the right career path for me", common app transfer columbia university [7]

My reasons for transferring may seem impulsive but rest assure the decision is most desirable.
At Miami Dade college, the school does not offer fine counseling and resource services. When requesting for help from the academic advisors about future opportunities and transfer processing, all I received were ineffectual suggestions and several planning work sheets. Where as, the approach to Columbia, communication is greatly treasure between the school and the students. Elemental features of communication leads to many opportunities that Columbia has to offer.

In the academic aspects, the Economics department at Miami Dade college does not provide students fully its features of the educational program due to limited full time faculty.

I believe that an entry into Columbia college would allow me, as a student, excel and strengthen my academic goals. Columbia college has a well-known world class business program in which I hope to experience. As well as known professors such as, Jeffrey d. Sachs, who has been an inspirational leader in his field and is placed among 100 most influential leaders in the world by Time magazine. His research in poverty reduction and debt cancellation for the poorest country matches my own interest. I look forward into gaining a more vital focus in this field that supports my educational quest.

This is another free write. Please help. I have to submit this in tonight.

Undergraduate / "economics was the right career path for me", common app transfer columbia university [7]

I can agree to your first comment. But, I may have to disagree to the second because in no way did it mention that I regretted economics/mdc. Please read carefully.

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I would consider this as your free write. You have all the information that would make a great essay, now revise it.

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