Unanswered [11] | Urgent [0]
  

Posts by iloveyou [Suspended]
Joined: Mar 20, 2011		 Last Post: Jul 17, 2011
Threads: 5
Posts: 12  

From: malaysia

Displayed posts: 17
sort: Latest first   Oldest first  | 
iloveyou   
Jul 17, 2011
Writing Feedback / "my father whom i respect forever" - The person i would like to be [5]

Everyone must have their own favorite idol or the person would want to be.Then, the person i would want to be is the famous detective in this world named Sherlock Holmes. He is a fictional detective created by physician Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. He is famous for his astute logical reasoning and his use of forensic science skills to solve difficult cases.

Sherlock Holmes who appeared in publication in 1887 was featured in novels and many short stories. Although i want to be him, i would not learn his personality and habits. He is a eccentric man and he was smoker, he keeps his cigar in the coal-scuttle and he is willingness to bend the truth or break the law on behalf of a client. In my opinion, all of this might be he shortcoming.

Besides Sherlock Holmes, I would to be another character in animation named Jimmy Kudo. He is a 17-years-old high school prodigy who frequently help polices solve cases. Why i will like to be a detective? This is because a detective should have a cool-headed, strong analysis skill and intelligent mind. In this county, there are a lot of cases that polices cannot settle it, i wish i can become a excellent detective like Sherlock Holmes and Jimmy Kudo.

I would want to be a famous detective to stop the cases that done by criminal to protect my family, my country and this world. Nowadays, if you flip newspaper you can see a lots of news about criminal damage country, criminal try to drug trafficking and civil strife. Therefore, i must start hardworking to study to get a good result. A normal detective will only help people to find dog or cat. Beside, i will be a special detective who only solve difficult cases and i am not wishing cases appear.

Lastly, i want to be a cool-headed, have strong analysis skill, intelligent mind and hardworking people to achieve my dream.
Sherlock Holmes and Jimmy Kudo are good detective, i want to combination both of them.

EF_Kevin did i miss the topic help me elaborate it and give some comment...
iloveyou   
Jul 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / "my father whom i respect forever" - The person i would like to be [5]

The person that i would like to be is my father who i respect forever. His is slim, tall, have scruffy beard and always wear ragged shirt. Besides his outward appearance, he is caring, responsible and hardworking. His was facing a lot of problem to take care our family.

I would like to be my father because his is responsible. Since i was 2 years old, my mother liked to gamble at casino and her debts was huge. Then, she was looking for loan shark to cleared her debts and she cannot sustain it, she was left. After that, a lot of loan shark looking for my father and my father pay for it. Although the debts is huge, my father will sustain because this is his responsibility.

Luckily, my father has a restaurant to help him for our living expenses. His is a very hardworking man i never seen before. He needs to wake up at 6.30 morning and works until 12.00midnight. His daily task is not reading newspaper or drinking coffee, it is making coffee to customer and taking order from customer. He only can sleep at 1.00am and wakes up at 6.00am.

Oh my God I am lacking idea someone help me
iloveyou   
Jun 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / About Water - Water is the most important in our world [5]

Water is a natural resource in the Earth.Water is essential to our life also, such as water can solve our thristy problem, water can make us survive, water can clean our body, water can recharges our fatigue, and water can revitalise our skin.According to scientist investigation, 70% of our body mass are water.Therefore, water is very important to us.

Although water is essential to our life, we will lose water everyday also.How we lose our water? We can lose water through perspiration, respiration and bowel movement. For example, regular exercising will start perspiration which is sweating and respiration. We will proceed bowel movement also which is defecation.

Water is having a lot of benefits to us. First and foremost, water will revitalises our skin because our skin will dry under sun.
In this hectic lifestyle, we will facing a lot of stress and this may make us age.Then, water will helps to revitalise.Besides that, water can rehydrates our body.Playing games, working and perspire will causes us dehydrate.Dehydration will causes us many health problem and this may need water rehydrate.

When we playing, working, studying and so on, we will be fatigue. We need water to recharge fatigue for us to continue our activities. Fatigue can having at mentally and physically.Fatigue mental will make a person become sleepy and decrease attention of the person whereas fatigue physical will make a person's muscle become pain and tired. All of these fatigue will make people become sluggish.Last but not least, water can help a person detoxes to cleansing the bacteria of a human.In this whole world, there were nothing to help us detox and cleansing.Water is the best agent.

Water is the most important in our world.If we without food for three days we still alive but we without water for three days we will become a corpse. Water is having a lot of advantages, we should take care our water to prevent water pollusion.
iloveyou   
Jun 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / "Mark." - a story research [15]

I am weak at marking
Just hope we can hardworking together
iloveyou   
May 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / About my 1st story book: percy jackson and lighting thief [3]

When i was a kindergarden kid, my english was tough and smooth, i learn a lot of vocabulary which my teacher teaches.Although malay is easier than english, i would like to read english book because my malay is worse than english.After a few year, i did not look for any other english storybook because i had became very lazy such like a worm. But now, this is my last year for wear school uniform to school to study, i need to improve my english because my grammar is bad and i am writing this essay.

My 1st story book that i buy myself is percy jackson and lighting thief.Why i will buy this book? Because i had watched this movie last time, this movie is awesome.

correct my mistake...
iloveyou   
Mar 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / Music is a therapy for better health [2]

Music is a communicative activity which conveys to the listener moods, emotions, thoughts, impressions, or philosophical, sexual, or political concepts or positions. Last year, i had read an article about music is a therapy for health, it attracts me to study music because my ambition is to be a doctor because of that article i want to use music to therapy my friends, my family who sick.

last week, i had saw a lot of news about japan because earthquake and tsunami had attacked japan cause 10 thousand people missing and dead at japan. the nuclear leak was dangerous to people because it may cause people damaged by radiation. i want to use music to therapy whole world people, no need waiting for 7years to studying the course of doctor. The end of the world was coming, i just a 17years old student, i have no time to wait for the 7 years. Playing music to cure all people in the world is the fastest way to help people.

i had watch a case at hospital, the patient have cancer but he does not have enough money for cure his cancer. Although he has cancer, he was never seem sad and still playing his guitar. I was so curious why a patient have cancer but does not seem sad, i ask he about why he have a cancer but still seem happily. He just say a sentence : although i was poor, no money to cure cancer, but music is a therapy to health also. Suddenly, i shocked because a person have cancer still can be happy. i feel i was so ashamed because i was worry about my exam result was bad.

i want learning guitar from the patient this is because he had teached me music is a therapy for health. i want to prevent the end of the world, i hope the whole world people can prevent world destruction. ours world- the Earth is very precious.

I digress it?
Can you help me add a little content?
iloveyou   
Mar 20, 2011
Student Talk / I'm weak in English, unable to write any composition. What to do? [31]

i am listening english song also but i need the lrics to know how to pronounce it
i am reading percy jackson and the lightning thief it help me learn a lot of vocabulary although it was difficult
i am writing essay at this website but i need u all help me correct it
i was scare to speak with other people who speak english because i can not speak a smooth english

my english was bad.if my comment has anything wrong please correct it thank you
Writing
Editing Help?
✖
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳