Writing Feedback / Behavior Therapy (Psychology paragraph) [3]

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Behavior Therapy
According to Richard A. Kasschau in Understanding Psychology, behavior therapy is a sort of therapy in which the therapist focuses more on what is not actually alright with the recent lives of mentally ill patients and tries to make changes via some steps. Particularly, it is believed that a disturbed person is the one who misunderstands how to behave properly; therefore, those patients are going to be educated again. Undoubtedly, the therapists will try to figure out how to change the inaccurate behavior of theirs rather than to the causes or roots of the main problem. In this behavior therapy, there is one important technique known as systematic desensitization which assists patients to struggle irrational fear and anxieties they have ever undergone so far. For this method, patients are asked to list down their fears, and the therapist will instruct them how to relax in such kinds of situations. Consequently, this can help patients feel less frightened of those stuffs than they used to be afraid of, and that is an advantage of this therapy. However, one disadvantage of this therapy is that the procedure is followed step-by-step through the list of anxiety-arousing events, and it still does not figure out the roots of those problems. In short, it seems that Richard A. Kasschau preferred this behavior therapy to psychoanalysis since it concentrates more on action rather than just a talk, and it is not as time-consuming as psychoanalysis is at all.

Writing Feedback / An Unforgettable Dream (marriage and death) [9]

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An Unforgettable Dream
Last night I dreamt about an unexpected marriage which almost scared me to death. First of all, I was travelling back home from my university; when I arrived, I heard such surprising news that I was going to get married with an unknown guy in the next few months. Suddenly, I felt so shocked since it was beyond my expectation that I was too young to get involved with this issue. Then I saw many wedding invitations scattering all over the sofa with the specific date. It was on August 10th this year. After that, the guy's family came to my house to discuss the wedding party, yet he came up with a refusal and wanted to cancel the wedding. I was thinking in my mind that it would be great if he denied getting married with me, for neither did I approve of getting married in this young age. Meanwhile, his parents were so furious and got out of control. They kept asking him the reasons why things got worse like that. With a sound of panic, he answered the question that it was because he just took pity on me. Suddenly, that guy asked me whether or not I agreed with his idea. Unhesitatingly, I replied I totally agree with his idea; then, everything was solved, and I was so delighted to see this happy ending. No sooner was it solved, I woke up. After having such a dreadful dream, I really cannot forget those situations since they look so real and appalling, and I am practically scared to death because of it.