violonc_21
Apr 16, 2014
Poetry / "I Always Wonder why..." - POEM [3]
Thanks for stopping by and giving me a bright feedback :D, Linh Hoang!
Thanks for stopping by and giving me a bright feedback :D, Linh Hoang!
violonc_21
Apr 15, 2014
Poetry / "I Always Wonder why..." - POEM [3]
I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.
Then one day I heard a sound
It was touching my heart so much
That moment I had to ask
where this music came from?
It makes me always love my home
love the morning with bright start
love the tree with pure leaf
the autumn with full of leaves,
in the summer running with yellow fields
and holding all-night-winter with warmness
When the piano sings these first notes
I'm surprised that they are you,
and from that I knew,
you could shape all flowers of spring in your mind.
I always wonder the day,
When you first falling in love
your heart must have beat so fast
and rhythms had each new change.
I'm always hurt when you get pain
For years I'm living with that,
when the past days your tears shed
Memories just go away...
I can't forget whenever you say
you remembering your childhood,
Parents, brother, the road and rainy day the most,
when life gets tough,
I wanna share everything with you.
I always wonder very much about you,
how attractive you are,
how sensitive and caring,
how funny and interesting,
and all of theses behind.
I always wonder your first child,
How beautiful that she could get
And happy faces of all your kids,
Because in that moment, I want to see your smile.
I hope you take good care for yourself
for every journey you'll take steps
for enjoying every moment you'll have
for being through sorrow and happiness,
you see clearly your life,
it's wonderful because of you!
I have never told you,
in an untold way,
How important you are to me.
You are the first and the last,
For I sing my most beautiful time in my life.
I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That whenever I see it,
I find deep in your soul peace.
- This is a poem I wrote. I'm about to send this in a special day to the one that I love so much for 7 years. This is my sided love. I'm so grateful if you all can give me some feedback, I would really appreciate. Thank you so much!
- Here in this poem:
"I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eye(s)
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.
...
/That whenever I see it
I find deep in your soul peace." -> I want to keep the word eye is "eyes", but that will not match the grammar with "it" in the next sentence right? Because of wanting to keep the spirit and sound, I very want to keep the original, but get a little confused.
Hope you guys can help me. Thank you for stopping by! Thanks for this chance to meet new friends. :)
I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.
Then one day I heard a sound
It was touching my heart so much
That moment I had to ask
where this music came from?
It makes me always love my home
love the morning with bright start
love the tree with pure leaf
the autumn with full of leaves,
in the summer running with yellow fields
and holding all-night-winter with warmness
When the piano sings these first notes
I'm surprised that they are you,
and from that I knew,
you could shape all flowers of spring in your mind.
I always wonder the day,
When you first falling in love
your heart must have beat so fast
and rhythms had each new change.
I'm always hurt when you get pain
For years I'm living with that,
when the past days your tears shed
Memories just go away...
I can't forget whenever you say
you remembering your childhood,
Parents, brother, the road and rainy day the most,
when life gets tough,
I wanna share everything with you.
I always wonder very much about you,
how attractive you are,
how sensitive and caring,
how funny and interesting,
and all of theses behind.
I always wonder your first child,
How beautiful that she could get
And happy faces of all your kids,
Because in that moment, I want to see your smile.
I hope you take good care for yourself
for every journey you'll take steps
for enjoying every moment you'll have
for being through sorrow and happiness,
you see clearly your life,
it's wonderful because of you!
I have never told you,
in an untold way,
How important you are to me.
You are the first and the last,
For I sing my most beautiful time in my life.
I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That whenever I see it,
I find deep in your soul peace.
- This is a poem I wrote. I'm about to send this in a special day to the one that I love so much for 7 years. This is my sided love. I'm so grateful if you all can give me some feedback, I would really appreciate. Thank you so much!
- Here in this poem:
"I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eye(s)
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.
...
/That whenever I see it
I find deep in your soul peace." -> I want to keep the word eye is "eyes", but that will not match the grammar with "it" in the next sentence right? Because of wanting to keep the spirit and sound, I very want to keep the original, but get a little confused.
Hope you guys can help me. Thank you for stopping by! Thanks for this chance to meet new friends. :)
violonc_21
May 13, 2013
violonc_21
May 12, 2013
Poetry / "Dear You" ; Poetry writing [3]
Dear You,
I have made my mind
with a lot of thoughts
Then finally I decided
to come to see you,
the happiness of my life
tonight...
...
This afternoon I heard outside
The wind is blowing up
The birds are singing on trees
And my violin singing your song high.
I feel nervous, a little shy
I run away from my heart
But the road I always want most,
is the road I'm running to you.
Dear You.
Dear You,
I have made my mind
with a lot of thoughts
Then finally I decided
to come to see you,
the happiness of my life
tonight...
...
This afternoon I heard outside
The wind is blowing up
The birds are singing on trees
And my violin singing your song high.
I feel nervous, a little shy
I run away from my heart
But the road I always want most,
is the road I'm running to you.
Dear You.
violonc_21
Oct 31, 2011
Writing Feedback / Different countries, different work settings [2]
Hi Michelle! You have a great dream to long for, you realize the necessity of how you can study well with an appropriate/a suitable environment to get the best results in studying and working effectively. So the person like you can achieve more and more if you're always proactive in everything you do, you only need it: MORE PROACTIVE.
So how can you be more proactive? Just FORGET the wrong things happened, let's VISUALIZE everything you long for: excel in my performance, professors who encourage me, I want to own creative, innovative, and unconventional ideas can develop and produce mainly individuals and no moderation. I wish for lively discussions and no chalk and talk, I would like to be able to represent my own opinion and not the opinion and view the word as the teacher must act.
I want to find a study group and sit in the library with others and learn using books, and not be there because we need a large desk with computer. None of my fellow students borrow books from, or is the effort to learn more than is necessary or prepare for the next lecture.. ...ect and your another wishes (that I think it's quiet creative). Why do you have to be under the pressure of the environment while you can give and show your ideas to the world - THAT MEANS YOU CAN CHANGE IT!
But firstly, I think broadening and improving your English Grammar/your English Writing can help you give to the reader your ideas and your thoughts the best meaningfully. You can also know a lot about the culture, the lifestyle, the many interesting things in the world through one more language, and you can prove that you can write well, do well, and can achieve everything that one German can do!
Hi Michelle! You have a great dream to long for, you realize the necessity of how you can study well with an appropriate/a suitable environment to get the best results in studying and working effectively. So the person like you can achieve more and more if you're always proactive in everything you do, you only need it: MORE PROACTIVE.
So how can you be more proactive? Just FORGET the wrong things happened, let's VISUALIZE everything you long for: excel in my performance, professors who encourage me, I want to own creative, innovative, and unconventional ideas can develop and produce mainly individuals and no moderation. I wish for lively discussions and no chalk and talk, I would like to be able to represent my own opinion and not the opinion and view the word as the teacher must act.
I want to find a study group and sit in the library with others and learn using books, and not be there because we need a large desk with computer. None of my fellow students borrow books from, or is the effort to learn more than is necessary or prepare for the next lecture.. ...ect and your another wishes (that I think it's quiet creative). Why do you have to be under the pressure of the environment while you can give and show your ideas to the world - THAT MEANS YOU CAN CHANGE IT!
But firstly, I think broadening and improving your English Grammar/your English Writing can help you give to the reader your ideas and your thoughts the best meaningfully. You can also know a lot about the culture, the lifestyle, the many interesting things in the world through one more language, and you can prove that you can write well, do well, and can achieve everything that one German can do!
violonc_21
Sep 10, 2011
Undergraduate / "The best way to get to know me" - Common Application [3]
Nice to meet you. I think what you need is the idea through your whole essay.
You have a good and an interesting view, what a vivid story! , and it makes you have a lot of things to mention in detail.
But in each paragraph you should have one topic sentence, it's better to help you link other ideas and the readers will find it interesting in your story. You can fix some sentences to avoid repetitive words, make your two or three sentences be shortened but they still express your ideas and your thoughts, and therefore it also can help you add more your ideas and stories, remember the topic and link, it will help you notice more about your writing way and using the approriate words to describe, not in too detail, people will find it interesting and know more you, surely - a kind and cute girl. :)
Let's try to review your whole essay, after rearrange your ideas and some sentences, you write it again. Let your love and soul open more and you can discover a lot of interesting things of your life.
Thanks. :)
Nice to meet you. I think what you need is the idea through your whole essay.
You have a good and an interesting view, what a vivid story! , and it makes you have a lot of things to mention in detail.
But in each paragraph you should have one topic sentence, it's better to help you link other ideas and the readers will find it interesting in your story. You can fix some sentences to avoid repetitive words, make your two or three sentences be shortened but they still express your ideas and your thoughts, and therefore it also can help you add more your ideas and stories, remember the topic and link, it will help you notice more about your writing way and using the approriate words to describe, not in too detail, people will find it interesting and know more you, surely - a kind and cute girl. :)
Let's try to review your whole essay, after rearrange your ideas and some sentences, you write it again. Let your love and soul open more and you can discover a lot of interesting things of your life.
Thanks. :)
violonc_21
Sep 6, 2011
Writing Feedback / "an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday. [NEW]
It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided to go by bike on this trip because we all wanted to enjoy the atmosphere there. As expected, the air was so great and clear. We felt very excited about this place. After having lunch at my grandparents' house, we took a short nap and made all preparation to go fishing with grandparents in the afternoon. The lake beside the house has many fishes and we had a joyful fishing and a lot of dishes cooked with in the evening. It was our first day.
On the second day, we got up early and drove bicycle around the village. The traffic was not heavy of course. We went along the small roads, had lunch under the shade of an old tree and saw the children play with kites in the afternoon. The wind made us feel relaxed and peaceful.
On the third day, dad and mom allowed my sister and I to help my grandparents with the works on the fields. The summer comes, either the harvest does. People are more busy to collect all corns and rices. We had a hard- working day. We went to sleep early and the village at night was so silent.
It was such a memorable travel of mine, we felt very happy during the after time of that summer, and all sorrow was disappeared!
Please feel free to give me some corrections. Thanks for all advices!
This is a short essay with about 15 sentences written "to describe your last summer holiday" with simple words and grammars.
I haven't visited EssayForum for a long time (to me) because I had some troubles and difficulties with my life in this period of time.
Finally I can come back till today.
I missed EssayForum very much (although I didn't have time to join with everyone a lot and had not so much memories but I could know exactly what I felt.)
I missed all of them: EF_Kevin, EF_Susan, amrosca, oscarlpf1, chatoyante, snowfairy10... my friends! , I remembered the discussion between us, the advices I was took and given, the effort we all tried to learn English better and the help of all people.
I am making a change with my life and ready for the change to better and better, the change that I accept, now, and everyday.
Happy to come back. :)
It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided to go by bike on this trip because we all wanted to enjoy the atmosphere there. As expected, the air was so great and clear. We felt very excited about this place. After having lunch at my grandparents' house, we took a short nap and made all preparation to go fishing with grandparents in the afternoon. The lake beside the house has many fishes and we had a joyful fishing and a lot of dishes cooked with in the evening. It was our first day.
On the second day, we got up early and drove bicycle around the village. The traffic was not heavy of course. We went along the small roads, had lunch under the shade of an old tree and saw the children play with kites in the afternoon. The wind made us feel relaxed and peaceful.
On the third day, dad and mom allowed my sister and I to help my grandparents with the works on the fields. The summer comes, either the harvest does. People are more busy to collect all corns and rices. We had a hard- working day. We went to sleep early and the village at night was so silent.
It was such a memorable travel of mine, we felt very happy during the after time of that summer, and all sorrow was disappeared!
Please feel free to give me some corrections. Thanks for all advices!
This is a short essay with about 15 sentences written "to describe your last summer holiday" with simple words and grammars.
I haven't visited EssayForum for a long time (to me) because I had some troubles and difficulties with my life in this period of time.
Finally I can come back till today.
I missed EssayForum very much (although I didn't have time to join with everyone a lot and had not so much memories but I could know exactly what I felt.)
I missed all of them: EF_Kevin, EF_Susan, amrosca, oscarlpf1, chatoyante, snowfairy10... my friends! , I remembered the discussion between us, the advices I was took and given, the effort we all tried to learn English better and the help of all people.
I am making a change with my life and ready for the change to better and better, the change that I accept, now, and everyday.
Happy to come back. :)
violonc_21
Jun 18, 2011
Undergraduate / Oscar Luis Puelles "My Journey started in Peru" [18]
Sorry for unaswering, please sympathise, I have had no leisure time till today.
Looking back at all the challenges I have had to encounter with, --> In my opinion it will be ok.
"at a early age I learned that to keep moving forward in life, a person must be willing and able to do sacrifices, with a strong heart to firmly believe. To give up something one might like or enjoy to get instead of something more benefitial." (why do you add the sentence "to give up..."? Think about it: what idea do you really want to convey to this sentence? Don't mention the giving up while the before sentence is a possitive one, it makes people not entirely have sense of being interested in this point - when you tried very hard, when you had drawn many experiences and even had had some temporary failures, you only changed your strategy and took action again to achieve the better results after but you NEVER GIVE UP, just change to be better :). I think the verb 'give up' is not appropriate in this situation or maybe you can find another way or another verb to demonstrate it.
and, "family or relatives will be ok. :)
Have a nice weekend!
Sorry for unaswering, please sympathise, I have had no leisure time till today.
Looking back at all the challenges I have had to encounter with, --> In my opinion it will be ok.
"at a early age I learned that to keep moving forward in life, a person must be willing and able to do sacrifices, with a strong heart to firmly believe. To give up something one might like or enjoy to get instead of something more benefitial." (why do you add the sentence "to give up..."? Think about it: what idea do you really want to convey to this sentence? Don't mention the giving up while the before sentence is a possitive one, it makes people not entirely have sense of being interested in this point - when you tried very hard, when you had drawn many experiences and even had had some temporary failures, you only changed your strategy and took action again to achieve the better results after but you NEVER GIVE UP, just change to be better :). I think the verb 'give up' is not appropriate in this situation or maybe you can find another way or another verb to demonstrate it.
and, "family or relatives will be ok. :)
Have a nice weekend!
violonc_21
Jun 18, 2011
Essays / I'm a student university (HUI) (profession in university) [5]
Dear percy. Here's some of my suggestions. You can lengthen this paragraph more, give more your thought as well as tell others more about your story, your poitn of view or another problems.etc.. to share with all people :). Eg: What do you feel and what experience have you drawn when being a freshman? You've got good mark in university so what is it relevant to your dream or do you benefit?... :-)
i'm from VN,I'm studyI am studying/study in HUI university. it's one of which that's 10 top of university. the first time I kept my foot in this univer i think this is a well-future I dream (maybe have dreamt is appropriate). Encountering withface to new enviroment, new friends and other teachers I was hardwork am a hardworking studentWhat do you mean in this sentence? You have to encounter with completely new environment while the rest of this sentence does not suit with the whole? , I looked for everything whichis relevant to my job ( profession in university). But i considered it, what I got after all, 7,8,9 marks and respect from friends, is that what you need? I almost forgot a point, can you tell me what is it ?
You have to combine the sentence more reasonably and give more information and details to persuade the readers and support your idea. Give it a try! Nice to meet you, a VietNamese friend too. :-)
Dear percy. Here's some of my suggestions. You can lengthen this paragraph more, give more your thought as well as tell others more about your story, your poitn of view or another problems.etc.. to share with all people :). Eg: What do you feel and what experience have you drawn when being a freshman? You've got good mark in university so what is it relevant to your dream or do you benefit?... :-)
i'm from VN,
You have to combine the sentence more reasonably and give more information and details to persuade the readers and support your idea. Give it a try! Nice to meet you, a VietNamese friend too. :-)
violonc_21
Jun 17, 2011
Poetry / "A cry for love." - poem [5]
:-). I can see your feeling and emotion in this poem (although I have not known to make an English poem yet :D). Let's make effort and try to the best of your ability in this life. Nice to meet you.
:-). I can see your feeling and emotion in this poem (although I have not known to make an English poem yet :D). Let's make effort and try to the best of your ability in this life. Nice to meet you.
violonc_21
Jun 17, 2011
Research Papers / (the first real Americans) John Smith and Mary Rowlandson Research Essays [8]
Dear ramonalford. These are some my suggestions. Hope it can help you. Your idea is good and you can only correct some sentences which go with structures.You can rewrite this essay after adding and correcting. I am also practing writing English so here you can consult. Wish you a good health, success and a happy life!
Dear ramonalford. These are some my suggestions. Hope it can help you. Your idea is good and you can only correct some sentences which go with structures.You can rewrite this essay after adding and correcting. I am also practing writing English so here you can consult. Wish you a good health, success and a happy life!
violonc_21
Jun 17, 2011
Undergraduate / Oscar Luis Puelles "My Journey started in Peru" [18]
:-). Uhm, I appreciate your effort and your drawing experience. Maybe what I want to say and share with you is the grammar and some sentence structures to make your essay better, you can only improve some sentence structures and grammar to a higher level, practice more with them because it will demonstrate more EXACTLY all your thought and emotion to be closer to the readers (I mean it make them interested in your essay), well, and using more another ways of expressing your idea with English can also make your English better. Anyway, nice to meet you with a nice day, today.
:-). Uhm, I appreciate your effort and your drawing experience. Maybe what I want to say and share with you is the grammar and some sentence structures to make your essay better, you can only improve some sentence structures and grammar to a higher level, practice more with them because it will demonstrate more EXACTLY all your thought and emotion to be closer to the readers (I mean it make them interested in your essay), well, and using more another ways of expressing your idea with English can also make your English better. Anyway, nice to meet you with a nice day, today.
violonc_21
Jun 16, 2011
Undergraduate / Oscar Luis Puelles "My Journey started in Peru" [18]
Dear oscarlpf1. These are some my suggestions. In my opinion you should express and demonstrate some phrases and sentences in another way more exactly and interestingly but they still can express your own idea, even make people excited and attentive with your essay, trust me. The paragraph which has the chain of 'remember' verb, you can give more details or explanation to clear your emotion or your thought to the reader, I means why don't you point out how all this memories and experience that you remember have took effect on you? Did it make you more mature, brave or master your life? to prove this after idea I thought if I were able to overcome all that, I would be able to accomplish/achieve my goals here.. OK? :-)
Hope you lead a happy life as your expectation and your wish. :-)
Dear oscarlpf1. These are some my suggestions. In my opinion you should express and demonstrate some phrases and sentences in another way more exactly and interestingly but they still can express your own idea, even make people excited and attentive with your essay, trust me. The paragraph which has the chain of 'remember' verb, you can give more details or explanation to clear your emotion or your thought to the reader, I means why don't you point out how all this memories and experience that you remember have took effect on you? Did it make you more mature, brave or master your life? to prove this after idea I thought if I were able to overcome all that, I would be able to accomplish/achieve my goals here.. OK? :-)
Hope you lead a happy life as your expectation and your wish. :-)
violonc_21
Jun 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My grown up Christmas list" song [8]
When I saw the link to page "EssayForum Contributor Page" I am very happy but just a little anxious about whether I myself will be capable of contributing to EssayForum with my English or not, will I be accepted?.etc... because I am just a new member. But after checking this page I felt more self confident, thank you so much! It's a good new thing to me and I feel better to try hard to the best of my ability. Thanks Kevin Moderator! :-)
When I saw the link to page "EssayForum Contributor Page" I am very happy but just a little anxious about whether I myself will be capable of contributing to EssayForum with my English or not, will I be accepted?.etc... because I am just a new member. But after checking this page I felt more self confident, thank you so much! It's a good new thing to me and I feel better to try hard to the best of my ability. Thanks Kevin Moderator! :-)
violonc_21
Jun 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My grown up Christmas list" song [8]
Thanks EF_KEVIN Moderator. Your comment ecourages me a lot at this moment. I will remember all your say. You make me believe that I can do everything I have dreamed in this life. I bookmarked your profile page this morning (according to Viet Nam's time zone it's night now) because I simply think I will learn a lot of things through all the threads suggested and corrected from you, which helps me improve not only English but also the life skill. Anyway, Thanks!
Thanks EF_KEVIN Moderator. Your comment ecourages me a lot at this moment. I will remember all your say. You make me believe that I can do everything I have dreamed in this life. I bookmarked your profile page this morning (according to Viet Nam's time zone it's night now) because I simply think I will learn a lot of things through all the threads suggested and corrected from you, which helps me improve not only English but also the life skill. Anyway, Thanks!
violonc_21
Jun 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My grown up Christmas list" song [8]
I'm glad you clarify it for me!
While writing this essay I always wonder "some of rooms" is true or not,
or "in the dorm". May we use the preposition "in" in that situation?
Thanks!
I'm glad you clarify it for me!
While writing this essay I always wonder "some of rooms" is true or not,
or "in the dorm". May we use the preposition "in" in that situation?
Thanks!
violonc_21
Jun 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My grown up Christmas list" song [8]
I don't know why I choose the song "My grown up Christmas List" to listen now, maybe I am lost in memory, maybe I miss my childhood and my Mom very much, or simply I haven't listened to an English song for a long time, for months. Or because I only want to listen to Kelly Clarkson's voice now, a beautiful voice which I love so much.
I already study 4 periods of English at school. Oh no, I must say exactly in the dorm of our school. My university doesn't have enough classrooms for all students so that more classes are placed at some of rooms in the dorm, of course there're tables and a board in need.
I feel disappointed after class. It has been my feeling for long time. Sometimes I felt very excited about the lesson some of days in the past, but I soon realized my problem is that I am not self- confidient and I still have not become a confidient person as I expect.
Some English songs really give me relaxtion, peace, and they warm my heart a lot. I always feel like adventuring an interesting world, getting a new feeling and enjoying an exciting experience when listening to an English song. That's enough to illustrate my thought and my passion. Ah, also US film about life, love, friend, adventure and childhood make me feel so.
When will I become a confidient, never say can't and not fear person? When is this day?
I must have a strong heart.
Not feel bored and unmotivated any more. Practice and try to the best of my ability.
To keep my Dreams.
To love more, share all of things I have without receiving with the people who I love
And Give all of love and inspsiration to My Passion.
To Live My Life!
P/S: Maybe I need a list,
A list of the Dreams of my life!
Do you remember me
I sat upon your knee
I wrote to you
with childhood fantasies
Well, I'm all grown up now
And still need help somehow
I'm not a child
But my heart still can dream
So here my lifelong wish
My grown up christmas list
Not for myself
But for a world in need
No more life's torn apart
That wars would never start
And time would heal all hearts
And everyone would have a friend
And right would always win
And love would never end
This is my grown up christmas list
As children we believed
The grandest sight to see
Was something lovely
Wrapped beneath our tree
Well heaven only knows
That packages and bows
Can never heal
A hurting human soul
(rythms)
What is this illusion called the innocence of youth
Maybe only in our blind belief can we ever find the truth.
...
This is my grown up christmas list.
I don't know why I choose the song "My grown up Christmas List" to listen now, maybe I am lost in memory, maybe I miss my childhood and my Mom very much, or simply I haven't listened to an English song for a long time, for months. Or because I only want to listen to Kelly Clarkson's voice now, a beautiful voice which I love so much.
I already study 4 periods of English at school. Oh no, I must say exactly in the dorm of our school. My university doesn't have enough classrooms for all students so that more classes are placed at some of rooms in the dorm, of course there're tables and a board in need.
I feel disappointed after class. It has been my feeling for long time. Sometimes I felt very excited about the lesson some of days in the past, but I soon realized my problem is that I am not self- confidient and I still have not become a confidient person as I expect.
Some English songs really give me relaxtion, peace, and they warm my heart a lot. I always feel like adventuring an interesting world, getting a new feeling and enjoying an exciting experience when listening to an English song. That's enough to illustrate my thought and my passion. Ah, also US film about life, love, friend, adventure and childhood make me feel so.
When will I become a confidient, never say can't and not fear person? When is this day?
I must have a strong heart.
Not feel bored and unmotivated any more. Practice and try to the best of my ability.
To keep my Dreams.
To love more, share all of things I have without receiving with the people who I love
And Give all of love and inspsiration to My Passion.
To Live My Life!
P/S: Maybe I need a list,
A list of the Dreams of my life!
Do you remember me
I sat upon your knee
I wrote to you
with childhood fantasies
Well, I'm all grown up now
And still need help somehow
I'm not a child
But my heart still can dream
So here my lifelong wish
My grown up christmas list
Not for myself
But for a world in need
No more life's torn apart
That wars would never start
And time would heal all hearts
And everyone would have a friend
And right would always win
And love would never end
This is my grown up christmas list
As children we believed
The grandest sight to see
Was something lovely
Wrapped beneath our tree
Well heaven only knows
That packages and bows
Can never heal
A hurting human soul
(rythms)
What is this illusion called the innocence of youth
Maybe only in our blind belief can we ever find the truth.
...
This is my grown up christmas list.