Graduate / 'theoretical and practical knowledge' - Statement of Purpose for Economic Admission [2]

I have to write a one page Letter. I need your comments, especially moderators' suggestions are important.!!!:) please pay attention to Grammar errors, essay structure (that i used below):

1.MY PROPOSED STUDY AT THIS PROGRAM
2.My FUTURE PLANS
3.MY PAST

Date

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a Master in Economics at the University of XXXX starting in autumn 2012. My decision to choose the Economics program in XXXX mainly grounds on under given factors:

With a career in Economics as my professional goal, I realize the necessity of obtaining the difficult theoretical and practical knowledge to reach that goal. After searching information on graduate programs in economics, I find that your program fits well with my long term academic and career plans.

One of the top reasons I wish to attend University of XXXX is because this Economics program would not only provide me with the essential education, but also vast opportunities to continue my studies and conduct research in the field of Economics. In other words, this specific Master Program comes from the fact that in the near future I would like to get to know more concepts, like modern economics and addresses issues such as business cycles, economic development, the functioning of markets and strategic interaction, how income is generated and distributed, and the role of economic policy. In fact offered program includes all of these conceptions.

Another key point, The Master program also gives an excellent chance for specializing in fields such as petroleum economic, development economics, international trade and globalization. Accordingly, I would like to stress that our countries possess similar features not only in locality fields but also in economical concepts thus, oil, gas and fishing constitutes major economical durability of both countries.

Together with I know that this Master Program would be an excellent starting point for my further academic performance in order to reach PhD level. You could be sure that I have enough work-related, analytical and methodological skills and abundant educational background for performing well. As an illustration, I would like to emphasize that my academic performance has been always on top of class both for secondary and high school. As a result, my GPA for secondary school is 4.9 (out of 5) and 4.8(out of 5) for high school. As a graduate student from Azerbaijan State Oil Academy I concentrated on getting a solid background in Economics, mathematics, and statistics which will make me enable to perform well in many courses.

Furthermore, even when I was sophomore my course papers were always distinct from others, such as in the comparison of Oil Industry and Environmental Problems in Azerbaijan, U.S.A and Middle East Countries. In addition, I was the recipient of scholarship from State Oil Academy, British Petroleum (Azerbaijan branch) and SOCAR's full-bright scholarship. As well as I served as a leader of Faculty Youth and Research clubs. My duty consisted of organizing regular discussions, like Marketing programs, International Economics, development of local enterprises, development of business in modern conditions and activities such as language learning hours, dancing competitions, swimming & ping pong tournaments and music contests among the university students.

Apart from my research experience, other activities and academic excellence, I also devoted equal effort to work experience and internship as I believe they will help me become a well-rounded individual. I used to work in distinct fields such as in "Elshan Ltd.(Oil&Gas Marketing Company)" as a marketing manager, "Azinka(Human Resource&Career Center)" as a Senior Recruitment Consultant, including Internship in Baku city Head Customs Department, Internship in Xazar Ltd. Broadcasting Company, Production experience in SOCAR(Azerbaijan).

In my opinion, learning doesn't stop when you graduate it is a process that continues throughout life. I expect that the knowledge I obtain in the master program will allow me to return home and obtain a job in the oil sector which would allow me to contribute in improving economic aspects of the oil industry. You could be sure that my academic credentials of a top tier education with a strong scientific component, my academic background, work experience and my personal traits such as good communication skills, leadership qualities, and team work attitude make me a worthy candidate for your Master program.

I would like to avoid say-ing clichés, but I believe "diligence is the mother of good luck and success", You could be sure that I have enough educational background and motivation not to disappoint you. I hope you will accept me for aspired program and give me a chance to realize my dreams and to create new relationships with people from different cultures for making the world smaller. If chosen, I will do my best to achieve success at your university as well as in every aspect of my life.

Best regards,
Rashad Allahverdiyev.

Essays / General Essay Structure (Past / Proposed Study / Future) - Is this correct structure? [3]

HEEELPPP. I want to know whether we should write essay in accordance with this structure???

- 1/ YOUR PAST: how your study, work and research experiences prepared you for this program,
- 2/ YOUR PROPOSED STUDY AT THIS PROGRAM: show that this program is the logical follow-up for your study and career and why this program is a good match with your interests

- 3/ YOUR FUTURE: what this program will give you and how it will help to your further studies and career after graduation (don't forget mention spesific features of this program)

Graduate / "People could find my name amont Notable Oslo Graduates" - Statement for Economics [3]

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a Master's Degree in Economics at the University of Oslo starting in autumn 2012. My decision to choose the Economics programme in Oslo mainly grounds on under given factors :

I finished my secondary school by the high marks in 2007 and at the same year I was admitted to Azerbaijan State Oil Academy. My first degree in Economics, International Economical Relations and Management from Azerbaijan State Oil Academy . My academic performance has been always on top of class, both, at the secondary school and at the university. Beside of this, I made a lot of academic researches and experiences in economic field during the university years . In addition, I was the receipent of scholarship's State Oil Academy during the four years, British Petroleum(Azerbaijan branch). at the last course of the university and SOCAR's fullbright scholarship.

This specific Master Programme comes from the fact that in the near future I would like to get to know more concepts, like modern economics and addresses issues such as business cycles, economic development, the functioning of markets and strategic interaction, the factors of motivation in firms and labour markets, how income is generated and distributed, and the role of economic policy . Thus, I work in "Elshan Ltd" ( Oil&Gas marketing company ) as an Assistant Manager from 2008 until now and I already got some ideas in my head. However, unfortunately until now I did not have the comprehensive knowledge and the right tools for elaborating and increasing them in practice. That is why I know that this Master Programme would be an excellent starting point for my further academic performance in order to reach PhD level.

South Caucasus especially. Azerbaijan plays an urgent role in the world's economical connectivity. Thus, the great projects -BTC and Nabucco which possess vital position in order to branch out natural energy resources to the Europe which are very important for providing fuel demands of European countries. If I am selected for the programme it will be an excellent starting point not only for my further education and career, but also a great opportunity for our government's projects.

In addition, as a being developing country our government has been always need well - educated employees. Fight with the corruption overturned priority of our Republic since our second independence in 1991. Hence, numerous students were sent to developed countries in order to get well - educated specialists by the Government. If I am chosen, I believe, I will be very useful and productive not only in economical improvement and development of my country, but also legal economical prosperity of society by the help of education which this specific Master programme will give me.

Moreover, I would like to emphasize that our countries have got similar hallmarks in economical, social and locality fields..Thus, oil, gas and fishing constitute major economical durability both countries. I hope the knowledge that I will get in UiO will give me opportunities to apply it to economical improvement of Azerbaijan. if I will get elected for this programme I will have the opportunity to learn from one of the best and the fact that I will study in Economics will give me the privilege to create new relationships with people from different cultures for making the world smaller. I am also aware of the kind of dedication and perseverance I will need to have for achieving the best results in the field and I believe my background will qualify me for such a Master Programme.

I would like to avoid say-ing clichés, but I believe that "diligence is the mother of good luck and success", You could be sure that I have enough educational background and motivation not to disappoint you. I hope you will accept me for aspired program and give me a chance to realize my dreams. If chosen, I will do my best to achieve success at your university as well as in every aspect of my life. And may be one day people could find also my name in the list of Notable Oslo Graduates.

Best regards,
Rashad Allahverdiyev.

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