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karthik21   
Nov 9, 2011
Writing Feedback / Do women have to serve in the military?... [5]

Great one but I see some spelling mistakes and I think in the following sentence, there is illogical comparison:
"thus they tended to be nurses at military more than fighters" is illogical comparison which means you can only compare same type of things. Here you can restate the sentence as:"thus they tend to be nurses at military than being fighters
karthik21   
Nov 8, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'Better to attend a small college or a large university?' - TOEFL Essay [3]

Some people want to attend a small college. Other people think that it is better to attend a large university. Which type of school do you prefer?why?Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Deciding the type of university is also a big decision for students as choosing the wrong one could have unexpected dire consequences on them like on their grade. Some of the differences between a small school and a big school could be difference in the size of the classes, acceptance rate of the school and, sometimes bigger schools have better lab facilities and bigger library. In my opinion, going to a bigger school would be better than going to smaller school for various reasons

Firstly, when I go to a bigger school the class hours would be more flexible as there would more classes taught in each course as it has more students which also means it is more probable that it has more options for class timings. Moreover, these classes are taught by different professors as bigger schools would have more professors. So, if could not understand one of the professors, I can simply drop that class and try for the same class taught by different professor. This would really help me in getting good grades.

Secondly, the larger schools will generally have more majors available than in smaller schools which would really help me as I am undecided major and I can explore about different subjects and then pick up my major. In addition, as I already mentioned that larger schools will have better lab facilities which would give better hands on experience if pick up my major in the science or engineering department.

Since I am also looking for a job, as larger school would have more facilities which in turn would mean that they have more jobs available than other university.

Even though, a small school would have small classrooms, but the advantages of a large university will outweigh the advantages of a small university. These reasons drive me towards a larger university
karthik21   
Nov 7, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I fashioned some moves of my own' - UC essay prompt#1 [5]

This sentence looks weird to me: "The people who you grow up with are hence an important aspect in your life"

No offence but I cant remember anything even from my 5 grade. I don't know how you remember it. You also mention that what you used to do before you first time went o school which means you remembered what happened to you even got 3 years which is doubtable. I know this is offensive but I want to tell you that if it is a lie, don't ever mention it. If it was correct, then it's awesome. I think it has some grammatical errors. Check out those by taking it your english teacher. I am also applying to UC and good luck
karthik21   
Nov 7, 2011
Undergraduate / "You can't do it." - Stanford Supplement What Matters to You [2]

Try to correct the this sentence: "I have see that if I want to be successful in life I cannot just give up when others tell me no. What matters to me most, is having the strength and courage to never say, I give up. "

It looks good I mean inspirational but you should try to improve vocabulary of this. I think talking to your advisor is better.

I also actually feel the same thing when someone says that I cant do something.

Good luck for you. I am also trying to get into stanford
karthik21   
Nov 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / College years remains fruitful over whole life [NEW]

Hi everyone, Here is my essay.Please review my essay. I really appreciate your effort in advance.

The college years are the best time in a person's life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons to support your opinion.

The university is the entrance to one's future. It is the place where people can turn their dreams in to reality and the conditions in the college are generally set so that they are conducive to help everyone succeed. If a person is able to perform well in college, then he or she is most likely to succeed in his or her future. So, success in college almost assures once success in his or her future. This is the last stage before one gets into job and so is the best time to enjoy in these days, people will not have much stress on them. In my opinion, I completely agree that the college years are the best time in person's life.

Firstly, this is the first time when people get their freedom after high school which makes the college really excited for the people. As the university is the microcosm of the society,the people who are studying in college will learn to live in the society in these years. In addition,it is total different experience where people living in dorms keep their doors open all the time and watch movies up till 2 am in their rooms. Consequently,all of these things make the college years totally different.

Secondly, at this time they will have their choice to pick up their major and they will not study anymore those subjects which they hate. Besides this,most of the students will try to explore all the subjects and decide their major when they are about to enter their junior year. If you are studying in a diverse country like united states,you will be meeting all the people from different parts of the world and you can also learn about different cultures which can be exciting for some people.

Thirdly, these days are the least stressful when compared with other times. They wont have any stress on them to take care of their spouse or family and hence they really concentrate on their education and can also enjoy on weekends.

On the other hand, if the person taking advantage of his freedom and becomes a alcoholic addict or starts smoking, these years may turn out the worst as these habits sometimes have profound consequences on their future. While, if the person tries to take advantage of all the possibilities in their university, these years remain fruitful to them all over their life.
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