Undergraduate / 'China' - Describe the parts that add up to the sum of you" prompt [NEW]

"The parts that add up to the sum of you" UMD Emergency

I have to send out my essays tonights, could u plz look at my essay?

Essay topic: "The whole is more than the sum of its parts." - Aristotle

The intellectual, social and cultural differences embraced by the University of Maryland are integral to the fabric of our community. The strength of the University is realized through the contributions of every member of our campus. We understand each individual is a result of his/her personal background and experiences. Describe the parts that add up to the sum of you.

Esssay:

It was a gloomy Saturday morning, as I was sitting in the living room, attempting to cover my reluctance to leave and spend more time with my family. When we heard the honking of the car, my grandma's tears came out like water splash. I comforted her and said "good bye" to them for the first and last time, and I swore to myself that I would show them that this was worth it.

I'm from China and I speak Hakka. As I grew up, I was taught the importance of courtesy, responsibility, and righteousness. My family is very strict, a grade of 92 is considered to be "okay". They have a hobby of comparing me to other children, although I dislike it. School in China is really tough; teachers give much more works and exams include questions that are not being taught in school. That's where I developed my competitive and hardworking nature. In China, there are family temples. Every year, we have a tradition of going to our temple and tomb for blessing and speaking to our beloved ones with our relatives. That's where my respect and beliefs come from. My scope was limited in China.

I moved to the U.S. with my mom when I was 12, the turning point of my life. I knew nothing about the culture and had to adapt to this new environment. Back in China, my family prepares almost everything for me, I remember how my mom would tear the chicken apart, and feed me piece by piece! Now I am becoming more independent and take care of pretty much everything in the house. I am becoming more extroverted and making more friends than I ever had. I actively participate in class discussions and initiative talk with others. Education here stresses active learning on students. That's when I am interested in reading books and news during free time. Christmas and Thanksgiving are like Chinese New Year's, where houses and stores are decorated, family gathers at one place to celebrate. The overall me was modified in the U.S.

If I have to say what I am, I will say I am a mixture of eastern and western cultures. I am a more independent person but I also value family and friendship. I call home every week. I have the Eastern work ethic, but also Western athletic spirit. I like to run and play badminton, and like to draw myself into the storylines of books.

Undergraduate / 'to be a programmer' - Essay about what is your something [4]

Essay Question:
According to Henry David Thoreau, "One is not born into the world to do everything, but to do something." What is your something?

I am really bad at writing essays, gimme some advice and revise, thank you.

In the past, I dwelled upon many goals. However, I realize that my passion in life is to create things. The world is changing at an incredible pace. My something inspires me to take part in technological innovations that will solve our present issues and propel us toward a better future. The motivation I have for programming comes from the first game I played called Maplestory. The first thing that crossed my mind was how horrible the animation was. If I was the CEO of Nexon, I would integrate elements of different culture into the game, and increase places for socializing. Moreover, why do we have to rely on a mouse, keyboard, and controller to play, what if we could transform games into a place where people could become the characters by wearing virtual helmets and gloves that could transfer our senses to the virtual World?

By 2020, the world's population will reach 9 billion, resources will become even scarcer. The demands for clean, convenient, and energy efficient technology will go skyrocket. For this reason, I want to become a programmer, someone capable of turning ideas into reality, changing the world, and making things for the welfare of public. Without programming, we wouldn't be able to explore the universe or using calculator to perform complex calculations. Without programming, every technological product is just an empty shell. The first program I made is for pressing keys, mouse, and returning the color of a pixel at the given screen coordinates. For the first time, I felt the joy of making something that's useful to me and others. My dream is to make something that automatically protects you when danger is detected through programming. Every day, thousands of people died from robbery and homicide, I am inspired to prevent these unfortunate things to happen. Although I've only grasped the surface of this task, my goal in life is to go through it and prosper.

Everything seems so miniscule whenever I think about the impact of technology on our lives. Computers, robots, satellites, and other technology have made our lives much easier than before. Dealing something with so much creativity involved inspires me to create my own ideas and spread it to the world. I believe my passion for technology is not a flash for the pan, but a goal I've been waiting for long to reach. I plan to have a long-term study in computer science and participate in diverse programs to increase my knowledge. I will push myself in all ways and take whatever means I need to succeed.