Undergraduate / 'space and games' - common app [4]

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)

During my whole life, I have always been interested in two things: space and games. I always wanted to be a game programmer, but as I grew up, I discovered I had the gift for others things: mathematics and physics. At the beginning, it was just a gift I used for school and I just wanted to be a game developer but when came the time to choose want I wanted to do in the future, I did some researches and I found that I needed to pursue my study in mathematics if I wanted to become one game programmer. That is how I get interested in mathematics, then physics because I needed mathematics in order to work in physics. And as I entered into college, I was divided between my love of space and my will of being game programmer. During the two years I spent in college, I found that there was a study program which allowed me to study for both space and game programmer: engineering. That is how I get interested in engineering and more particularly the University Of Michigan College of engineering.

Not only would the UOM college of engineering will allow me to study for the both degree of study I want without losing time deciding which major to take, so that I can get the job I want in the future, but it is also related to math and physics, subjects where I am very good at, which is important because before doing something, I think it is better to have strong abilities necessary to do that thing. Because of mathematics, I became curious, so much that I became interested in researches in the space field. I know that the University of Michigan has the best equipment for researches and I have strong and original ideas. If I am admitted, being at UOM will give me the opportunity to turn those ideas into reality ,also the Michigan Learning Communities program will help me develop my interests and ideas with people who like them ,and want to help me to develop them. Either way, I am winning because my ideas will be developed on both sides, and will not die before even being explored. The ethnic diversity in the university will help me know people from different origins with different opinions and different ideas.

I think that how students spend their time inside and outside school is very important in order to succeed. With its academic programs, the resources available to students, and its reputation, the UOM has all the characteristics I think a university should have. Add to that an incredible diversity among the students, the professors' efficiency, and a college of engineering which offers the program I want, and you understand why I want to study at the UOM.

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Please edit any grammer mistakes and comment on whether this essay answers the question properly. I'm also not completely sure about the conclusion.

Thank you!

Letters / University of michigan. College of Engineering. Resume. [2]

hi all,
this is my resume for the UOM common app.please tell me if it is ok,or if i need to add something.
RESUME

Josep Enrique
address
phone number
email address

Education
Henry Ford Community College (HFCC), May 2010 - present.
Wayne state University, English language Institute (ELI) January 2010-April 2010.
College Sacré-Cœur, Dakar, Senegal October 2004 - July 2009.
Experience
-Volunteer member:
Tutoring peers in Math and Physics (HFCC).
Honors and activities
-HFCC Dean's List, fall 2010 and, winter 2011.
-Phi Theta Kappa Member.
Hobbies / Interest / Travel
-interest in electronics, planes, and everything related to aerospace.
Competency and Skills
-Very good at manipulating electronic devices.
-Excellent ability in Microsoft Word, Excel, and Visual Studio for C++ programming.
-fluency in spoken and written French and Spanish.
-Captain soccer team (College Sacré-Cœur).

Undergraduate / 'aerospace engineer' - commonapp personal-umich application [2]

Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

My will to become an aerospace engineer comes indirectly from my father. Not that he is an aerospace engineer himself but because he gave me the love of space. Indeed, my father is a formal civil engineer and he spent a big part of his engineer's career to build runways for airports. He used to take me with him on his workplaces when during my childhood. There were many planes taking off and that fascinated me. later, when I was eleven years old, he took me with him in a small plane to show me how the cockpit was.at that moment I decided that I wanted to be a pilot and I did everything in order to realize my dream: I tried to travel by plane as many times as possible.in high school, I was not the best in every subject but I was untouchable in math and physics. Unfortunately my dream was broken after I graduated from high school, as I went to pass a test in the company my father worked for, a company that also formed future pilots, to determine if I had the abilities to become a pilot. Unfortunately for me I did not pass the test because of my eye's problem. Indeed, since I am nearsighted, the testers told me I was not qualified for their pilot program. I was really disappointed but I still wanted to find a job related to aerospace, planes and which fitted my abilities in math and physics. I searched on internet and I found the job that matched all the specifications I wanted.it was aerospace engineering.in my researches, I also found that engineers' job is to innovate, create new things to ameliorate living conditions to make the world better. Those characteristics caught my attention and really encourage me to in engineering.

please guys help me with the grammar ,and tell me if i am on the right track.any critiscism and feedback are welcome.
thanks in advance

Undergraduate / 'Soccer changed the course of my life' University of Michigan-communities supplement [3]

Prompt: Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

I am part of many communities but the most important for me is soccer because it changed the course of my life. Before I turn 11 years old, I did not have any friends beside my neighbors because I was too shy and too quiet. Then I saw the UEFA champions' league final on the television, and one elegant and wonderful player named Zidane caught my eye. He gave me the inspiration to start to play soccer, and after 3 months of playing in my district's streets, I had made 5 friends.it was not a lot, they were only soccer friends but at least a had some friends.at my school, my class soccer coach had seen me play with my friend and decided to take me in his team.in the school team, I made more friends than expected but unfortunately I had to leave my country because of my father's job. I was really sad and anxious about the idea to make new friends in a new country.in my new school, I tried to enter in the soccer team but "old players" did not want me in the team because they wanted their friends instead. The coach made us play a short friendly game between the "old players" and the aspiring to see who can get in the team. After the match some "old players" ask the coach to take me in the team. I was accepted in their team and I had now the opportunity to make friends again. Pressure is the second thing I learned thanks to the soccer.in my country, we used to play school matches with no public except few students, and the coaches.in Senegal, it was completely different. During each game terrace were full of students and family coming see their children play. During the tournament final, the national television was even there. I was not used to that so I at the beginning my games were very bad, but after 4, 5 weeks, I was used to play with people around and the pressure they were exerting on players before and during the game. That is why I love this sport. Not only it is fun and it helped me to socialize with people ,but it also thought me something important to succeed in any job in life, how to deal with pressure.

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feel free to criticize as you want, but be constructive and please help me with any grammar errors because english is not my first language.It makes 395 words, more than allowed so if you can help me to get rid off anything make it shorter it would be nice.

thanks in advance.