Posts by kenneth1001

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Writing Feedback / Interesting essay about weird poem (my favorite anything) [6]

one word: Wow!

I don't think there is any major grammatical mistakes and your analysis about your favorite poem is great and flows easily throughout your essay! :)

Great job and Best of Luck to you! :)

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

there is no word limit, all it says to write a one or two page response.

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

I just realized my essay is generic, so I'm going to redo it because the UChicago wants to hear applicants, not the school itself.

Thank you guys for all your help :)

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

Yea that's I was trying and still trying to figure out how to do it. Thanks though :)
Anybody else want to give a feedback? because this due by midnight and I really want to finish this.

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / 'chances to experience the terrific Core' - Why Uchicago [7]

your revised essay is very well written. And I agree with myjeselle about the phrase "no time at all ". Try to find a different phrase for it. How about "there wasn't any moment at all "? You don't have to agree with it, but it's just a thought.

Can you also look at my revised UChicago essay please? any feedback is appreciated. Thank you :)

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

Thank you Mango17 :)

kenneth1001

Jan 3, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

anybody else want to comment?
ill edit yours in return :)

thanks guys!

kenneth1001

Jan 2, 2012

Undergraduate / 'struck at the ambiance' - POMONA 2 -- Fun experience [5]

What made the task merry, though, ~~were~~was the occasional compliments about my young looks and the hearty laughs that followed.
You've really set the tone for myme and my companions' new year.

overall, the essay was well written. It was good that you chose to write about what you did in New Years' Eve because it was the holidays and there was no school and it was the time of relaxing and having fun.

Best of luck to you!

Thanks for your help :)

kenneth1001

Jan 2, 2012

Undergraduate / 'unconventional essay prompts' - why uchicago essay [11]

this essay is great! :)
not only you did research on this campus, but also your essay reveals who you are.
Best of Luck! :)

kenneth1001

Jan 2, 2012

Undergraduate / 'the first club day of my high school career' - POMONA high school experience essay [6]

I agree with sansonmccrady. The second sentence " In middle school, I had neither the peer support nor the ability to relate to people to be able to contribute to the learning environment, and I not only felt, but knew that high school would give me a chance for redemption, and all I had to do now was to take advantage of it. " is a run-on sentence.

In my opinion ( correct me if I am wrong), I agree with pjw7109 about the paragraph that needs to be deleted "My experience at Robotics has also equipped me with the determination to aim high. In my AP US Government class during my senior year, I became the campaign manager during the mock election and worked hard with fellow teammates to help our candidate win the election. " because it is as if you randomly "threw it" in there. Your essay focuses about robotics and what values you gained. That's it; just robotics and what values you gained.

But overall, it was a good essay. Best of Luck to you! :)

kenneth1001

Jan 2, 2012

Undergraduate / Core program at the University of Chicago brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation [13]

Read and revise please. Be harsh with me because I think I have a lot of grammatical mistakes. Thank you so much :)

Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago. (one or two paragraphs).

Out of all the colleges I applied to, the University of Chicago would be my final choice because of the prestigious education it has and its diverse community that I want to experience and enjoy. UChicago has a program called the Core which is originated from the faculty members and brings the undergraduates closer for a global conversation, which can take my desire to learn to a whole new level and go beyond my limits. I remember when my high school counselor asked me if I was the kind of student who takes classes for high school credits or I take classes to challenge myself, I told her that I was both. Although I take classes because I needed to, there are some cases where I take classes from the sense of my curiosity because I may never know if I would like themor not, but most importantly I want to challenge myself. In addition, because I participated in a few high school activities, I look forward on changing that by joining the tremendous amounts of clubs and organizations, such as the Ultimate Frisbee (Men's), Alpha Phi Omega and etc., and communicating to other students that have the same interests as I do.

But the most important that is as equally as to UChicago's education is its diversity, one of the things I value the most. Although I have friends that originated from different backgrounds, I don't really know anything about their culture. But, UChicago brings out the culture from each background by holding events such as Culture Shows and PanAsia. Not only that, but also the fact UChicago has a study abroad program excites me because I can get the chance of exposing myself and embracing cultures that are unknown to me. Overall, University of Chicago would be a match for me because I want to experience and challenge myself the education this campus offers and have the valuable skills I need to exceed in life, but at the same time to enjoy the college experience.