Undergraduate / Scad statement of purpose- "A little about me'' [2]

I was going to orginally going to apply to FIT and I wrote a statement of purpose of for them. Now Im applying for SCAD.I was just seeing with a few edits could I use this essay for SCAD instead. Can you tell me if im on the right track subject wise or should I just scrap the thing and start over?

Statement of purpose. The statement should be no more than 500 words in length and should give an overview of the applicant's academic and personal experience, describing preparation for and commitment to further study at SCAD, as well as educational and professional goals and aspirations.

My name is Gianni and I really want to be a fashion designer. I believe that if you can't imagine yourself doing anything else but that thing, then that what you should be doing. I can't even think of something I would remotely like doing as much as fashion design .It took me awhile to come to terms with it, I was too busy being who everyone else thought I should.

I'm smart. I'm Magna Cum Laude, 3.8 high school GPA smart and I've always been that way. So I pretty much had to deal with my family shoving "doctor" or "lawyer" down my throat my whole life, mainly because they wanted to brag about their lawyer/ doctor cousin, niece, granddaughter, daughter. I knew that I was too absentminded to be a doctor (I could just see the lawsuits piling up). Lawyer wasn't really appealing to me either, so I set out to find a career that my family approved of and I could tolerant for the next 40 years. I went from archeologist to forensic scientist to museum curator, but in the back of my mind all I wanted to do was make the beautiful gowns the celebrities wore I saw in the magazines my mom brought.

Cliché alert: I think I got into fashion design because I come for a poor family and I was never able to get cool clothes. My mom is a single parent without a college education and two daughters she had to raise pretty much by herself. So that meant I could never really get the cool mall clothes that the "popular kids" had. The thing is that all I wanted was cool mall clothes. But all my mom could afford was thrift store clothes for my sister and me. As I said earlier, I was smart but I was also shy and quiet. To put it simply, I was a nerd and I knew it. I knew that I couldn't change my personality to be cool, but I could change my clothes to at least look cool, and maybe I would be accepted. However, 6th grade was an awakening.

The summer I was going into 6th grade my mom found out the store Rainbow had layaway. I was over the moon! I could finally get the kind of clothes the cool kids got and maybe they would like me. My sister and I picked out clothes in the middle of the summer and they were out by the beginning of school. I was really excited! I was finally in middle school; I finally had new clothes, I was finally going to be accepted by the popular kids. I was so wrong. When I got to middle school with my new clothes, nobody cared. The kids still picked on me and called me names, and were only nice to me when they wanted to copy my work. That's when I realized, "Why am I trying to impress these people? They're not that smart, they're not that pretty, they're mean to me and they aren't going to make anything out of themselves. Why do I need their approval?"

After that realization, I really started to find myself. I have been trying to fit in so long I didn't know who I was and what I liked. So like the nerd that I am, I did research. I went online and researched music, movies, art, TV shows, but fashion was by far my favorite. I always liked the red carpet aspect of fashion but when I started to research it I learned it was also about all the things I loved: art, history, and individuality. It blew my mind seeing designers, fashion bloggers, people on the streets taking things from art, history, and pop culture that they love and making them into wearable art.

I always liked fashion but that's when I really fell in love with it.
That's when I knew I wanted to make clothes that were going to speak to people and become a part of their life. A cozy sweater that matches with everything, the perfect jeans you had for years, that dress your wore on your first date with the man you were destined to spend the rest of your life with. This is why I believe I would be the perfect candidate for SCAD. I have this strong desire, the work ethic, and ambition to succeed in this field.

Undergraduate / 'The MTV Movie Awards' - Page 87 of autobiography-VCU essay [2]

Prompt: Compose Page 87 of your autobiography. In this essay, you should be creative, considering where your life story would be at this point.

This is a VERY rough draft so far. I just want to know if I'm going in the right direction for this essay. I like how the 1st and 3rd paragraphs are going so far but the 2nd concerns me. Like am I getting my point across on how and why this event is important? Do I need to describe the outfit in more or less detail? Also I have read essays from this prompt. They seem more narrative (More dialogue and more like they are talking about something in the present. While all the auto/biographies I have read are more "remembering" like they are recalling something from the past). So can you give me some opinions?

That was the moment I got my first taste of stardom. I was sitting on the sofa in my tiny Greenwich apartment with my friends. I usually don't watch award shows, but my first celebrity client was nominated for the MTV Movie Awards for best new actress. Out of the numerous press events I have clothed her for this was the first one being televised. Her movie was an indies rom-com that I had free-lanced for that summer. "This generation's Anne Hall" the critics had dubbed it. After dominating numerous film festivals it was now making its way to the masses. I worked on the set with her as wardrobe designer and after the movie became a sleeper hit she wanted me to dress her for the whole press tour. This was a great opportunity for me to create a name for myself by dressing this up and comer. Many fashion designers have got their careers started by showcasing their talents on Hollywood's fresh faces and now it was my turn. At that time I was still working for Zac Posen and doing some freelance. But I really wanted to get started on my own line and this was the kind of publicity I needed to get the ball rolling. The events so far have been a great success. She have gotten raving reviews on her performance. On top of that she and I have been making a splash on the fashion front. A few fashion blogs had even featured her in my clothes.

The MTV Movie Awards was award show was important to both her career and mine. She had to present herself as an actress to be wrecked with. For me this was an opportunity to showcase my designs to the millions of people watching. I have gone the attention of few heavy hitters in the fashion industry, but wooing the American public was a different matter. I had to find a way to get my design aesthetic out, but at the same time make millions of women ask "where did she get that" and I had only one outfit to do it. When I designed this look I wanted something that was playful yet strong. Also I wanted Leigh's look to stand out in the sea of bedazzled, bandage, and little black dresses what was the norm at these kinds of events. Leigh was a vision in the pale coral chiffon romper I designed for her. The color was perfect for her skin. The shorts were great for lengthening her petite frame. The blousy sleeveless top had a white Peter Pan collar was a nice contrast to the more fitted short bottom and it showed off her toned arms. To top off the look, I recruited my good friend Abby Smyth to design and make a flesh colored open-toe pump to give the outfit a little edge.

When the camera panned to Leigha working the red carpet in my outfit, I remember my friends and I harmonious shriek of excitement. "That color looks great on her" said Marco as he squeezed my hand. I squeezed back nervously, while I tightened my grip on the arm that was looped onto Abby's. Cutting my eyes was the response to Tia's "Are you nervous yet?" It was all good fun though; Tia and I have been pushing each other's buttons since we first met at VCU. What I really remember about that moment was when my friend Uno told me and Abby to chill out. "Guys! That outfit is amazing, I would wear that in a heartbeat" were her exact words. A surge of pride came over me that overshadowed my anxiety just for a moment. Though my nerves quietly returned as my client gave her first interview of the night and the moment I been waiting for crept closer. Leigh was funny and friendly. She breezed through the usual questions like pro; it was easy to tell she was going to go far in this business. Then it happened. "Leigha you look beautiful, who are you wearing?" My heart started racing. It was like all my emotions were boiling over. All my years of hard work had been to build up to this one moment."Gean Russo. She's such a talented designer." I sighed in relief as a smile of exultation slowly crept across my face.

The stuff I italicized I'm having problems with.
Stardom: I used a thesaurus but I can't really find a word I like. I'm using "stardom" as a placeholder right now but to me it seems like I'm only in it for the fame. I like recognition but it don't seem to be right for this essay. Any other suggestions.

My heart started racing. It was like all my emotions were boiling over. All my years of hard work had been building up to this one moment. : I don't know what direction I should go with this. Does this section seem okay?

Also should I plug VCU more?