Undergraduate / School Leaving Certificate / studies at COA [2]

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Is your past academic record an accurate reflection of your ability and potential? Please elaborate on your answer.

I passed my School Leaving Certificate with all A's and Distinction. In high school, I gave more time to extra-curricular activities, clubs, composing songs and teaching but spent less time concentrating on coursework, thus, graduated with a High School GPA of only 3.72 while all the teachers had forecasted my grades as A*'s to Cambridge. Now that I think back, I showcased my ability to perform academically good with only classroom activities and lectures. However, I believe that I did not perform not even close to my utmost ability.

How do you envision your studies at COA fitting in with your overall educational and career goals?

Realization that I come from the third poorest country in the world has never been enough for me. In my own odd ways, I have always tried to bring about small changes in this place but my impacts have only lied in the small corners of the city I live in. My dream to alleviate energy crisis from Nepal made me follow the path to COA which has strong promising systems to inducing leadership and intellectuality in each student enabling them to take up challenges and never back down, become a global citizen, gain practical knowledge and expertise in any field.

How did you first learn about College of the Atlantic?
During my week-long research on US colleges and universities at United States Education Foundation-Kathmandu, I found College of the Atlantic.

Undergraduate / (Wheaton people / Caring community) - short supplemental answer [5]

Please corret for grammatical mistakes and suggest how I can improve the content....this is for WHEATON COLLEGE, MA..

1. How did you first become interested in Wheaton? (e.g., Wheaton was recommended by a teacher, graduate, friend, etc.)

During my week-long research on US colleges and universities at United States Education Foundation-Kathmandu, I found Wheaton. Then, I took my time to know about Wheaton and its people on the internet. Going through facts, statistics and reviews, I made my decision to apply to Wheaton.

2. Please tell us why you are interested in Wheaton?

Until my tenth grade, I went to one of the most prestigious schools in Nepal that focused primarily upon discipline along with knowledge, which I have found to be the most important factor to have shaped me. The way Wheaton values the same gets me interested towards it. I was really thrilled to know that Wheaton promised in developing well-rounded students stimulating the intellectual, spiritual, moral and social development of each student.

Since I am a student of science and still have a belief in God, I could not find it less interesting while I listened to the science students in Wheaton telling how Science and Christianity went together. Whatever we do with our lives, I feel that it is important to take some time to think about God and that brings me to Wheaton.

The caring community that international students far away from home desire of, people from diverse background and diverse belief, talks about faith, promises to community service are all what got me interested to Wheaton College.

Undergraduate / 'to get knowledge of arts and social sciences' - Providence College [3]

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Question:
Please attach a statement with any other information regarding your interest in Providence College that you believe would be helpful to the Committee on Admission in the consideration of your application.

Answer:

I went to the school that is considered one of the best institutions of the nation where academics and discipline came first. The blend of these two factors has shaped me into who I am today. While I knew that the curriculum of Providence was shaped by seven centuries of experience and workout and that it committed to stimulate the intellectual, spiritual, moral, aesthetic and social development of each student, it came to me so abruptly that Providence is where I've always wanted to go.

Even though I have an aim to become a mechanical engineer, I always wanted to go to a liberal arts college so as to get knowledge of arts and social sciences along with mathematics and physics. Interestingly, Providence provided me with not just 3+2 but 4+2 program where I could finish liberal arts and get another university of my choice to finish engineering within two years. In addition to it, I found the courses even compelling as I went through the catalogue.

From my research, most students at Providence have conveyed the message that once they came to Providence, they would not want to transfer anywhere. What a satisfying place! Providence being a city of art, culture and history is located central to major cities like Boston and New York which makes it a perfect place for incoming international students. Providence's promise for community and caring is the most important factor for an international student like me who is moving thousands of miles away from home. I was very glad to know that this college also keeps an aim to help community so actively through social service and volunteer program. Since I have always been involved in community and social service, it would be only worthwhile to join a college where the same can continue in future.

There is much more than just an undergraduate degree in Providence; it is a complete package which according to me will transform anyone in the end of four years, making him a complete person- a better version of himself.

Undergraduate / 'much more to life than just to have a mansion' - commonapp short answer [4]

Being a teacher is a challenge. The responsibility one has to undertake is huge and the pressure it induces needs some real courage and meticulous behavior to come across. The fun part is that there is immense pleasure to make students understand concepts, make the class drawn towards you and make positive impact in someone else's life. At first, I only took teaching as work that paid me but it got me so interested that I chose to spend my gap year as an assistant teacher. I understood the meaning of "learning"; I saw what it had taken for my parents and teacher to make me; most importantly, I learnt the essence of "giving" which now makes me think that there is much more to life than just to have a mansion, a happy family and a dog. Teaching is a way to learn about whole lot of things.