Writing Feedback / IELTS- Travelling benefits for the travellers [6]

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Q. Today more people are travelling than ever before.
Why is this case ?
What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller.
Give reason for your answer & include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Essay

Travel has become part of almost everyone's life. People travel places for the various reasons. Some people have to travel because of work, some travel for holidaying and some travel to meet near and dear ones or to attend a family functions. There are many advantages of travelling places like ranging from exploring new places, culture and people to relaxation & fun with family.

Globalisation has definitely decreased distances among cultures. many people have experienced this during their work trips. Business has grown to manyfolds at country levels due to which many are frequently travelling to other countries. For instance, Software consultants have to travel to visit client's location in other countries for requirement gathering of work. Experiencing new places, meeting new people and cultural experience are clear advantages of travelling.

People often travel to places to take breaks from their busy work life to relax. For example people take a break of month or two to visit hill stations or city with beaches for relaxation. Some people go to an extent of taking a break of around a year and take a visit around the world especially when their children are young so there young ones experience the world closely and learn about different cultures, languages and people around the world. Trips like that brings knowledge and relaxation which rejuvenates people to perform better in their profession after these breaks.

Lot of people travel to attend family functions like marriages, birthdays or demise of a family member. These visits provide an opportunity to meet our family members who are staying away. This in turn also helps strengthening family bonds and brings a feeling of joy.

To conclude, in todays busy life people have to travel by choice or no choice. Travelling has become a part of our life and it brings clear advantages ranging from cultural experiences to strengthening family bonds.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-human activities harming Earth or improving quality of life [NEW]

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Q. Some people say we humans are harming the Earth through our activities, but other people say we are improving the quality of life on our planet. Which opinion do you agree with ? use specific example and reasons to support your answer.

"Save the planet Earth" is a common line which can be read and heard all over the world. There has been a lot of initiatives to protect the planet Earth from unbridled human developments. Although some people argue these developments are making our life comfortable, but concerns to save Earth are vital due to various reasons.

Firstly, rapid development of infrastructure is eating most of the forest throughout world. The so-called Concrete jungles have evolved endangering forests and wild life. As we all know life saving oxygen is produced by trees after converting harmful carbon-di-oxide gas. Moreover, wild life is very essential to maintain ecological balance on planet Earth.

Secondly, large emissions of carbon monoxide gas from refrigerants like air conditioners have depleted ozone layer. Importance of ozone layer is evident by the fact as it protects us from harmful ultra violet rays. To add to it, excess emission of carbon di oxide gas mainly by vehicles around the world has increased the average temperature at north pole which in turn has increased water level due to gradual melting of glaciers.

Lastly, either industrial waste or domestic waste produced everyday is badly polluting the planet Earth. For instance a large amount of unnoticed industrial waste released in oceans effects aquatic life to a large extent. Harmful chemicals present in industrial waste kills lot of sea creatures in oceans or rivers.

To conclude, Earth is our home and it should be protected. Any human activity causing harm to Earth should be controlled and alternate ways should be devised to control damage. Creative ideas should be encouraged to leave minimum environmental footprints without compromising quality of life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Natural Talent or Training with Hardwork ? Both Views [5]

Q. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay -

The world is full of exceptional talent that is why there has always been a considerable discussion about natural talent and training whenever people enthralled by a great performance from an artist or player.

These are players whose indelible performance always make people believe that they are blessed with skills. These exceptional players always find it easy to perform which

seems very difficult for other players especially in fields like sports, music and art. Good examples are Roger Federer who is a born tennis legend, belated Michael Jackson who

will always rule our heart as king of pop music.

However, there is a strong belief in our education system that with continued teaching and guided practice, any skill can be mastered. There are plenty of such examples of players who have proved time and again with their commitment towards training and practice that they are good in their field of work. For instance, one of the great cricket player Sachin Tendulkar is not always at its best in all his games but has always learned from his mistakes and achieved great milestones in cricketing world.

In my opinion, to a certain extent this is true that some people are born or blessed with unmatched skills which makes them perfectionist in their job especially when we consider

areas like sports, music and art. But it is always said " Practice makes a man perfect " , which is undoubtedly lot of people's formula of success who are focused and have desire

to perform.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - watching events on television? - 'comfort of home' [3]

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Live performance offers once in a life time experience. Nowadays, live events are in high demand due to their increasing popularity. Most of us would like to see their favorite player or artist performing live but not all of us get to experience it may be due to lack of time or resources. I agree most of us would like to experience events live but still there are some of us who prefer to watch it on television from comfort of home.

Due to increasing popularity of live events, people often would like to experience it, because of spectacular view it offers and on various occasion some people get a chance to see and meet their favorite players or artist. For example, soccer world cup organized at South Africa in the year 2010 had a phenomenal success.

Live events are always a delight to watch but some of us just miss out on these opportunities due to insufficient time or other reasons. For example, some people could not get a day off from their work. Also, some of us could not buy tickets because tickets were sold out or were unaffordable.

However, there are people who really do not like watching live events. Firstly, some prefer to enjoy peace and convenience television offer to watch such events from home.

Secondly, some are scared to go in a crowded place due to fear of stampede, infections or any other discomfort. Further to add, television advantages can never be underestimated as one can enjoy such events while working from home which saves on valuable time and money.

To conclude, watching live shows or events offers to an extent thrill and adventure but watching them on television is always an option if one prefer comfort or miss out on opportunity.