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Joined: Jan 18, 2012		 Last Post: Jan 20, 2012
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mimi305   
Jan 20, 2012
Undergraduate / 'who could memorize the most and reproduce it' - something not found on your resume. [5]

Some of my most intense learning periods in life have been thatthose of failure. Failure is something that I have learnt how to handle, and most importantly overcome.I did'nt like Failure is something that One of the major failures I've had to overcome is the second year of my Undergraduate degree.

After the completion of the exams, there was a huge weight lifted off my shoulders. The results really didn't really matter at that point. The fact that they were over was a huge burden lifted off of me.repetition you said that already

the American way of studying had shown me that studyinglearning ( to avoid repetition ) could really be fun.

At least I now I know that in spite of

Well , I found those mistakes and I wanted to mention them ; maybe it can help you . In my opinion , it' s a very good essay and the topic is interesting ; For me , It doesn't sound like an excuse but it shows that you are motivated !

Please can you help me with mine ?
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Undergraduate / ' I'm an Indian girl. ' - Community essay (UMich) [2]

paid far lesserless than they deserve. Still, I say "thank you, bhaiya" (Thank you, Brother) and still they smile at me as a sign of acknowledgement.

My class has people belongingMy classmates belong to various communities; ethnic communities, societal communities, linguistic communities, geographical communities

Every day I identifyfind outabout differences but also similarities between usmore and more similarities and more and more differences among these people.
(accepted not by binding rules but merely by widespread use). : avoid the use of parenthesis

It is a community whereinin where I discover ... communities everyday; many every day.

I love it !! I hope I was helpful ! good luck

please can you check mine and give me your opinion ?
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Dream big' - app for an exchange program [5]

thank you very much ! but how do I change my last sentence ? Do you have any suggestion ?
and what are my grammar mistakes please ?
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: parents have brought to our lives [3]

They touchteach us how to walk, they touchteach us how to talk, and they are also the first one to establish our foremost knowledge about the world.

However, because of the time we stay with our parents, the infinity of knowledge all over the world, parents are not always the best teachers. well I don't really like this sentence , try to change it ;

one personwe cannot live with his or herour parents for theour entire life
For example, US teenagers, as soon as they reach their eighteenth birthdays18 years old , mostly want to learn how to live on their own and prefer not to stay with their familyfamilies .Moreover, every individual have their own life.
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Research Papers / I S U on Divorce, any corrections ? [10]

Professional Interview

Referencing the methodology section of this paper, reveals how these following questions where were pursued.

Two: Do you think schools should by notify notified by the courts when attending children hail from divorce parents?

Three: How should custody is be awarded

There were some pretty interesting comments that developed have developed ( I'm not sure ) from this interview

All in all what I expected to here hear from some, I heard different, as well as a few tradition perspectives from a sophisticated teacher as well as someone from a corporate high caliber position. What do you mean ? I don't understant this sentence , it needs to be modified ;
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Undergraduate / 'transferring to Photography program' - you a perfect candidate for FIT? [4]

You don't have to tell them your name or your age , I guess they know it :)

Try to begin with the words your father told you ( this is what I dit in my essay ) I think it's more powerful .

"Don't listen to anything anyone has to say about you. YourYou're not here for them, you're here for yourself , to make us proud ! " my father said as I was crying . My name is Minkaiu Timbo; I'm 21 years old born in Freetown, Sierra Leone raised in different parts of . Due to the civil war that was going on in the Western Countries of Africa , we moved to the United States when I was 8 years old . After moving here to the US I had realized it's a totally different atmosphere. It was a different scary new environement . Starting Elementary school and middle schoolherewaswere one of the roughest times of my life, indeed . I was the new kid at school that had a thick accent and was bullied through out my elementary school and middle schoolall the time . a suggestion :)

While growing up here one thing that the kids didn't bully me about was my fashion sense, but that's not the reason why I'm the perfect candidate for FIT. It's more to it . I'm the prefect candidate for FIT because I'm a very passionate individual that puts his heart, passion, dedication, and hardworking into something I really want. Getting accepted to FIT will change my life. I will be one step closer to my dreams. ( i love that )

I'm interested in transferring to Photography program at FIT because I always had a strong passion for Photography. During My freshmen year was the year I discovered my talent for art in my basic photography class. My teacher had a talk with me after class about applying to Thomas Edison High School of Technology. I was nervous about applying because I knewbecause TEHST wasis a very competitive school and highly acclaimed career and technology education school for talented students in Montgomery Count. Thomas Edison High School of Technology is a highly acclaimed career and technology education school for students with a career talent . I got accepted to TEHST my sophomore year. It was really hard for me to adjust to attending two different schools Montgomery Blair High School and Thomas Edison High School of Technology. While attending TEHST Multi-Media program I learned Adobe Photoshop and started designing and editing pictures as a hobby. After my sophomore year I learned all of the Adobe Creative Suite programs such as InDesign, Illustrator, After Effect, Flash, and Dreamweaver. That's when I realized aI had a true talent for the art media . I fell in love I guess . On my spare time I watched tutorial videos on YouTube to enhance my skills. In addition to my junior year I was a member of the yearbook club. I had got the opportunity to take photographs for the column "What's HOT, What's NOT" I interviewed people and took pictures of all the fashionable students. Then I than had athe chance to create the layout for the yearbook. I was hornedhonored to be apartpart of the yearbook committee.
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Graduate / 'the field of education as a preschool teacher' [3]

It's quite long , there is no a limited number of words ?

my Bachelorsbachelor degree in Speech Pathology . andI had the privilege of working in the field as a speech assistant During the three years I worked as a speech assistantfor three years in my local school district . Fortunately I worked with three established Speech Pathologists who shared their years of experience and passion for the field and provided me with real world experience to determine that speech pathology is my calling in lifeproved to me that speech pathology is my only vocation in life ( a suggestion )
mimi305   
Jan 19, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Dream big' - app for an exchange program [5]

hi ! I have to talk about mu personality , my career goals and how this program can help me to meet those goals and how its influence on my personal develpment :)

plz last year I wasn't selected , so I'm trying again !

this is my essay :

"Dream big"are words my mother have always told me, are words that have inspired me since my childhood. Living for one year in the United States is, without a doubt, a big dream for me to realize. Since elementary school, I have always refused to be like the others and searched to stand out the crowd .So, I do not hesitate to take responsibilities like being the delegate or preparing presentations on different topics .I grew up ambitious , determined and inquisitive . I am an open-minded person. Thanks to "Sawty" association, I have attended different roundtables and meetings and found myself interested in debating with people having different cultural and political influences. I get so happy when I get to convince people of my ideas. But if they're not ,I just respect theirs .I love discovering new places and making new acquaintances . I have volunteered on several occasions and met underprivileged people which have nourished my heart with compassion and kindheartedness, sensations you'll never learn from books .One after-school activity has particularly inspired me and oriented my career choice is teaching English and French to elementary and preparatory school kids. Their good marks and their smiles and joy have proved to me that teaching will be one of my vocations in life and specially teaching immunology in university . In fact , among all the subjects I've been studying since my first year , immunology has appealed me the most .I dream of being a researcher in this field and conduct pertinent and useful researches related to the treatment of cancers and immunodeficiency illnesses .Being a researcher is my second cherished vocation. Therefore, the NESA program will provide me with the incredible chance of studying immunology. I can't believe that I'll be completing an internship in an american laboratory.I'll surely gain so much in terms of professionalism and qualifiedness.Not only I'll deep my scientific knowledge but also I'll discover the american way of teaching. After obtaining my diploma in Biological Engineering with honor, I intend to accomplish my higher education which is imperative to become a researcher and a professor.My dreams don't stop here.I aim to have my own firm, a monoclonal antibodies production firm. If nobody realizes this idea before I do , it will be the first company of its kind in the Arabic world. This is quite challenging for me.Thus,I need to build up a stronger personality.I believe that the NESA program would help me to fight my fears and become more confident and self independent. Everyday, I'll prove to myself that I'm capable of overcoming every challenge, that being patient and believing in my own potential are my keys to success. Besides ,improving my English is definitely a huge benefit for me.In fact , It will help me to write greater speeches and to deliver them assuredly in meetings hosting international guests. I also dream of representing Tunisia in international seminars related to immunology. Hence , in the united States , I'll try to join a club and work on delivering speeches in front of an audience.I do aspire for leadership positions and I know that,step by step, I will reach my goals.I am sure that the NESA program would open a door full of opportunities for me so early in my life. My mom have chosen the right words , I guess.
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