Research Papers / '20th century hero' - Research Paper on Franklin D. Roosevelt [9]

Hi, how are you?
My research paper topic was to write about an historical figure within the time period from Renaissance to the modern time.
My instructor made sure that the research paper should not be a biography.
(Howeveer, I feel like my research paper turned out like a biography of FDR..)
My topic is 'Was FDR a hero or a dictator?'.
Please help me revising any grammatical erroes and point out any awakward spots or sentences.
Also, It would be very appreciated if you give me some of your ideas about how my research is. I'm still struggling with my thesis and conclusion.

Thank you very much.

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"Was Franklin D. Roosevelt a hero of the 20th century or a borderline dictator?" In American and World history, Franklin D. Roosevelt is known as one of the greatest U.S. presidents with his accomplishments such as New Deal policies and leading America to win World War II. However, Roosevelt is also called a dictator for holding office for nearly over 12 years and attempting to circumvent the Constitution by packing the Supreme Court with Democrats.

In Roosevelt's first inaugural addresses, he said that "The only thing we have to fear, if fear itself". By his inaugural speech, Roosevelt had shown his strong confidence in Americans which won back the confidence of American public. (Winfield, 1989) At that time, America was undergoing the Great Depression and business suffered greatly from a long-continued depression. (Johnson-Cartee, 2004)

As soon as Roosevelt took office as president, he started to pass radical legislations such as the Emergency Banking Act which closed down all the banks for four days, the Beer and Wine Revenue Act which legalized production and distribution of beer.(Roosevelt & Schlesinger, 1983) With positive support of the public, Roosevelt rushed to make a great number of laws for his New Deal program. The objectives of New Deal were to help people who were suffering from Great Depression, to boost America's industrial production back to where it used to be and to reform the economy. As Roosevelt planned, Congress passed all of Roosevelt's legislations which he suggested in 99 days. With Roosevelt's New Deal, various work relief agencies like the Works Progress Administration, the Civilian Conservation Corps, and the National Youth Administration saved millions of Americans who were in bankruptcies. (Thurston, 1996)

Another major accomplishment of Roosevelt is World War II. Despite the fact that Roosevelt promised that America would not enter the war in his inaugural address, he lead Americans to recognize that entry into the war was an American responsibility. WWII ended the Great depression and restored national prosperity to the United States. America's participation in World War II required a great demand for labor in order to produce military gears, weapons, vehicles and munitions. Within several months of the U.S. involvement of World War II, America's unemployment rate rose by 10%.

(Shmoop History, 2009)

Just as Roosevelt's accomplishments are famous, his objectionable actions and failures as a president are also well-known.

Gilbert Taylor said that "Probably FDR's most consequential political miscue as president-his proposal in 1937 to increase the membership of the Supreme Court." After the Supreme Court turned down eight New Deal programs as unconstitutional, Roosevelt tried to pack the Supreme Court by age discrimination and appointing six new justices in an attempt to expand the size of the Supreme Court. However, Roosevelt's attempt to resize the Court failed in spite of separation of powers. (2008)

In conclusion, Roosevelt is definitely one of the most loved political figures in American history. However, Roosevelt is also opposed by critics because of his excessive ambition which was reflected as socialism and his characteristics of a dictatorship. For instance, Roosevelt's court packing plan proved that he would do anything to have his New Deal policies approved. Also, there are some political views that Roosevelt's New Deal policies actually extended the Depression at least 7 years longer than it needed to last. Roosevelt's ability as a president during the wartime and his daring ways to deal with America's economic and political issues in his first 100 days in office are highly acknowledged and Americans should accept both sides of Roosevelt as a president who marked an epoch in history. Without Roosevelt's radical legislations, America would still be in a depression or crucially defeated in World War II.

Undergraduate / I had a hard time fitting into a new culture- U Maryland / Diverse community [4]

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At the University of Maryland, we value a diverse community. How have your life experiences and background shaped you into an individual who will enrich the University of Maryland community?

At the University of Maryland, I do not only look forward to maintain my scholastic performances, but I also plan to participate in diverse student organizations and activities. As an immigrant student who moved to America in my freshman year of high school, I had a hard time fitting into a new culture especially a different school system. Since school was the place that I spent most of my time, the only help that I could get was from my teachers and classmates. I was fortunate to have many great friends and teachers who helped and guided me through a better educational path as well as a new lifestyle in America.

By living in two very different cultures, I fully understand the importance of diversity in the community, which will be helpful because University of Maryland is a melting pot. There will be students from all types of cultures and ethnicity and I believe that I can be the one who understands those students' educational and emotional needs.

From my experience with volunteering at a local middle school's after-school program and a local Korean community, I learned how to be patient, work, and interact with other people who came from various backgrounds and cultures. Those experiences turned out to be my best volunteering memories. Working with many people from different cultures also motivated me to pursue my career in the field of education and make a difference in the lives of others.

I am confident that I will not only be an academic student but also actively demonstrate good leadership in a multicultural society. I know that sharing my diverse experiences that I have had will motivate my classmates for exploring a new world of multiculturalism.

I am very up for challenges; I always try to spend as much time as I can to explore a new culture. And I believe that University of Maryland will be the place where I can fully experience a diverse community along with the great program and curriculum which will be the pathway for my successful life and career as a future educator of America.

Undergraduate / "What is the one activity most important to you?" - Common Application [3]

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Description of the one activity most important to you and explain why.

"Welcome to ***** High School Concert choir." I still vividly remembered the day when I heard that warm greeting and a hug from my choir instructor.

I signed up for the intermediate choir in my freshman year in high school.
To be honest, I did not expect much about neither that class nor the quality of the choir because there was no requirement to be in intermediate choir.

Unlike what I expected, I enjoyed singing in intermediate choir very much and I started to wonder about how good would concert choir sound like. So I went to the annual holiday concert and I could not believe how amazing the concert choir sounded.

The concert choir members were only couple years older than intermediate choir members, however their attitudes toward the performance were absolutely mature and committed.

From that night when I watched concert choir's performances, I could not wait to be a part of concert choir. I worked and practiced harder in and out of the classroom and hoped to make it to the concert choir's audition the following school year.

Luckily, I made to concert choir right before the summer break of my freshman year and being a part of the concert choir has been the most important activity throughout my high school years.

Music has been one of the most important parts of my life since I was young and I have performed numbers of times within the church choirs and intermediate choir. However, when I first performed as a member of concert choir, I felt the best contentment which made me once again realize that the most beautiful instrument in the world is human voice and hard work always pays back with great satisfaction.

When I first went into the intermediate choir, I was just a shy and vulnerable student that nobody noticed, however as I learned how to express myself by putting my emotions into every piece that we sang, it helped me gaining interpersonal growth along with confidence and leadership. I became a section leader in my first year in concert choir, a vice president and a section leader in my second year and I was very fortunate to become a concert choir president in my senior year. From all those experiences within choir, I learned to become confident, outgoing and amiable by working in a great choir with hard-working and committed choir members and a great instructor. I can not stress enough how concert choir helped me to develop as a stronger and better person.

Undergraduate / "Does multi-disciplinary research team appeal to you?" - U of MD [NEW]

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Please answer yes or no. Does multi-disciplinary team research with a faculty mentor, lasting throughout your undergraduate years and dealing with the social implications of science and technology, appeal to you? If yes, briefly tell us why and what are some of the interests, experiences and skills that you would bring to such a research team.[/i]

Yes. Although I am not completely familiar with the procedures of researching in the field of science and technology, multi-disciplinary team research appeals to me in many ways.

By being a part of a versatile research team, I will be able to accept various ideas and methods of researching from different fields of study associated with understanding the social influence of science and technology.

Even though, I have not participated in any scientific nor technological research before, I always wanted to learn more about how science and technology affect people, the way of their everyday lives and the changes that happen in modern society owing to new technology and scientific improvement.

I am more appealed by a multi-disciplinary team than a research team that is made by people from only one discipline because if each person on the research team is from different areas of study, they would have varied ideas of how the research should be done from what they have studied.

Also, I believe a multi-disciplinary team is more beneficial to the project due to wide-ranging discussions, miscellaneous collections of ideas and manifold interests.
In addition, I would enjoy working with people who are majoring in different disciplines and accept their ideas as a team

Throughout my high school years, I worked on several planning committees and chain of command associated with school and I know I will be able to show my team work skills along with my leadership skills if that is needed. I am a good team worker and I enjoy sharing my ideas and discussing them to learn more about what others think.

I am also willing to work the long hours if that takes.

Since I have strong interests in education, cultural differences, and globalization, I would use my interests to bring out the best for the research team.

I would suggest to research about how the science and technology can develop new methods of learning, how the advancement of science and technology made globalization possible, and how have the science and technology allow people to communicate and learn about other cultures across long distances.

Also being a bilingual who speaks Korean fluently and I will be able to research about the social implications of science and technology in Korea which is one of the most powerful information technology leading countries.

Undergraduate / "personal experience that developed your academic interests" - U of MD [NEW]

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Write about the personal or academic experiences that have helped develop your academic interests. What did you enjoy learning about in high school, either through your classes, extracurricular or leisure activities? If you have any career aspirations at this point, explain how your interests match these aspirations.

As an immigrant student who moved to America in my freshman year in high school, I had a very hard time fitting into a new culture especially a different school system. Since school was the place that I spent most of my time, the only help that I could get was from my teachers and classmates. I was very fortunate enough to have many great teachers who helped and guided me through a better educational path as well as a new lifestyle in America. One day, one of my teachers asked me if I could interpret for one of her fellow teacher's student and her parents who just came from Korea.

The student and her parents did not speak a word of English and they were very frustrated about the new cultures and different school system just like I was when I first moved to America. After that, my teacher suggested me to volunteer for a local community so I went to one of the local middle schools and asked them if they needed as high school volunteers.

Fortunately, they had this after school program called W.I.S.E. program for those students who have working parents or need extra help with their homework and other school related assignments.

My assigned duties were to keep students under control from taking independent action, help them with their homework and unfinished class work, and participate in a variety of activities with them.

There were lots of students who just moved from other countries and needed extra help, and I was glad that I could be the one who could help them with their needs. By living in two very different cultures, I understand the importance of diversity in the classroom. Since American is a melting pot, there will be students from all types of cultures and ethnicity. I believe that every school needs to have at least one educator who is fully aware of the students' educational and emotional needs along with the cultural differences and language barrier problems.

From my experience with volunteering at a local middle school's after-school program, I learned how to be patient, work, and interact with other students from diverse backgrounds. That experience turned out to be one of my best volunteering memories. Working with many students and teachers motivated me to pursue my career in the field of education and make a difference in the lives of others just like my teachers did.

From that experience, I learned that I needed to study hard to be a good educator who can positively affect the students and bring out the best in them.