Writing Feedback / Different strengths and weaknesses of men and women, and suitability to work [5]

Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

i personally do not agree with this view, but it was easier for me to agree in this essay. anyway, i've barely found some arguments for it...

Men and women have always been seen as having different strengths and weaknesses, no matter how much some would try to change this point of view. I believe that some professions are especially created for a specific gended (female or male). 41

To begin with, women can understand problems better than men do. It has been scientifically proven that a female nurse would successfully tackle with a patient's pains, while a male nurse would not. For instance, an experienced nurse can understand the pains that a pregnant woman goes through and can give her the perfect advice. This is an example of a profession where a male would not have the proper qualities, since women are more empathetical(?) to others' needs.79

On the other side, men are definitely stronger than women when it comes to physical activities. Police officers, pilots, firemen or mechanics are just a few jobs that would undoubtedly suit a man. This is mainly because he runs faster, can lift heavier objects and fight more efficiently than a woman can. An article published in the Times Newspaper in 2010 revealed that 80% of the cases when a police woman was assigned to catch the burglars were a failure. On the opposite, policemen were successfully able to catch them in 70% of the cases.96

All facts being considered, it can be definitely concluded that certain professions are created especially for women, while others- for men. I am inclined to believe that this is true, as they have different strengths and weaknesses. 37

Writing Feedback / 'not practical, not fair'; Equal numbers of male and female students [4]

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more people feel the need of gender-equality rules being implemented into the educational system. In other words, they believe that universities should accept their candidates based on a fixed number of females and males. I completely disagree with this point of view.45

One reason why universities should not accept the same number of male and female students on every course is that it would be not practical. Some courses are usually chosen by males, while others are preferred by females. For example, Mechanical or Electrical Engineering courses have 80% male students, and Drama and Arts courses have 75% female students. It can be seen that males are attracted by the technical work, while females prefer the creativity. It is not an unexpected result, since those two gender's cerebral hemispheres evolve differently.89

Moreover, it would not be fair to base the admission process to courses on gender. The most important admission requirements should be based on the skills, experience and qualification one proves to have. For instance, if the maximum number of male students was reached for a certain course, it would mean that an unskilled female would be chosen instead of a smart and well-prepared male. This would lead to unequal gender opportunities.72

To conclude, selecting students according to their gender is not the most effective option, since female and male students should have equal opportunities in their university life. I am inclined to believe that both genders should be accepted into university based on their previous academic results. 46

Writing Feedback / IELTS: go to university or start work after school? going to uni is a better choice [5]

Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?
hi guys, this is another IELTS essay that I've written. please correct it and if you can, give me a mark from 1 to 9. thank you so much!

More and more people decide to graduate from university, because they believe that the skills and knowledge they gain will help them get a good job. However, there are still people who do not agree with this view, mainly because universities do not offer enough experience in the world of work. I personally agree that going to university is a proper choice for a young.

One argument in favor of attending university courses would be the certificate that one gets after graduation. The most important part of a CV is the education that one followed and the proof of it - the certificate. For instance, there is no question that a young who shows his Harvard graduation certificate would find a good job. An employer is aware of the fact that universities prepare a young for their academic and professional life. As a result, youngsters with no qualification and no proof of their capabilities are not taken into consideration when talking about well-paid and good jobs.

Another strong argument is the experience that a student gains during his university life. Many people claim that students are just taught complicated theories and memorize long essays. This way, they do not have the ability to put into practice what they have been taught. It is not the case, because many students have the opportunity to attend workshops, find a part-time job or even sign a short-term contract with a top company. A quick survey published in the Times newspaper proves that more than 70% of the current students have worked part-time or have done significant researches in their field.

To conclude, there is no doubt that graduating from university is the backbone of a successful career. I agree with this opinion, because universities are responsible for both the education of a young and the work experience that he gains.