Writing Feedback / IELTS- children development and modern games [2]

Some people believe that modern children's games negatively affect the
development of their skills compared to traditional games. To what extent do
you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that nowadays children's games are totally different with traditional games that kids entertained with. Modern games such as computer games, wii, nontendo and so-on have attracted children as well as families. Despite, causing a great number of negative effects, still they have a massive market in toys industry. One of these negative effects aims children social and physical skills development.

Children physical abilities are not develop properly since; they are sitting in front of a computer for hours and play a game without any movement. Therefore, they do not experience different physical activities to improve their move and develop them. For example, they play golf with wii but they can not play golf in the real life. Also, they are not able to compete with a real person to recognise their strengths and weaknesses.

Moreover, these kids have no social connection with their friends; consequently they can not practice social skills such as, communication, sharing, solving social problems and so-on. Therefore, all these undeveloped skills cause great problems in their adulthood. For instance, they would have problem with team work, could not communicate effectively with their colleagues.

In contrast, in traditional games kids used to play together to do running, cycling, roping and other activities, which not only make them healthier but also help them to learn new physical and social skills. For instance, they were discovering new games, rules and regulations in their little society. They were learning about activity and new moves. More important, they were not isolated to a room without connection with other kids and practicing communication at early stage.

In summary, I personally believe that, the modern games have a great impact on youngsters in the modern society and affect them vastly. Thus, parents have a massive responsibility to limited computer games and encourage children to play with group of friends rather than a device.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: London, Tokyo, New York, Madrid, Frankfurt - Average house prices in 5 cities. [2]

House prices
The bar chart demonstrates changes related to the average house prices in five capital cities from 1990 to 2002 and compare these data with 1989.
In the first period of five year between 1990 and 1995 the housing prices in London, Tokyo and New York dropped dramatically. In London and Tokyo the average house prices dropped well under seven percent and in New York it fell five percent, whereas in Madrid and Frankfurt it had a slight growth about two percent in compared with 1989.

In contrast, from 1996 to 2002 the housing prices had an upward trend except in Tokyo by five percent drop. London had the most growth in this seven year period with more than eleven percent growth. New York as well as Madrid faced an increased in the house prices by 5 and 4 percent. Frankfurt just had about more than 1 percent growth.

In whole, London faced the most fluctuation trend, whereas Frankfurt had the most stable trend in the housing prices over the time.

Writing Feedback / Fixed punishment for each type of crime? DISCUSS [NEW]

Fix punishments

Fix punishment for criminal behaviours is a very controversial debate, which has two sides. One group of society believe that there should be an identical penalty for a specific crime, while other group believe that, to punish a crime, other involving factors should be considered. Therefore, these two strong opinions will be analyse in this essay.

On the one hand, it has claimed that, fix punishments can reduce the crime rate in the human society and some reasons are introduced to prove this statement. For example, it is evidenced that an identical penalty for an individual crime may stop a criminal person to commit a crime by reconsidering the consequences of its behaviour. Also, fix penalties can prevent a soft judgment, which can lead to unsuitable punishments for crime offenders. As it can be seen, nowadays, the punishments do not fit the crimes.

In the other hand, it has claimed that a judge should have authorities to order different penalties for individuals based on other factors, which contributed to commit a crime. For instance, may somebody was forced to defence him or herself and consequently involve in an antisocial behaviour. Moreover, maybe someone has a psychological problem and could not control their behaviours. Thus, a judge should consider all the situation and circumstance which cause a crime.

By considering, these two claims I suppose there should be a fix penalty for an individual anti social behaviour, although some flexibility should be add to the law to consider specific cases and circumstances.