Undergraduate / UVa- grammar errors- "Being a moderate Muslim is no easy" [13]

Well you need to cut out some words if the limit is around 250. Maybe take out some of the rhetorical questions, that could shorten it down some what =]

Undergraduate / Interesting idea? - Argonne National Laboratory and Fermila [6]

I loved it, very creative and funny. I think it will surely stand out from the other applicants and grab their attention. Great way of looking at the question

Graduate / Essay on Interpersonal Skils and experience - Law school [4]

A great tight essay that clearly answers the prompt. Only thing I could suggest is to maybe add some transitions to the end of each paragraph. Just to help it flow better than it already does. Hope I was able to help and good luck!

Undergraduate / UVa- grammar errors- "Being a moderate Muslim is no easy" [13]

This is very well written but I do not know the prompt so I am not sure If you have answered the question.

I really do not see anything that needs to be cut out or and errors =]

Writing Feedback / for IELST...." sports or physical course is importmant "essay [5]

You are on the right track just have some errors:

In recent years, a large number of schools have dropped their physical education classes and sports teams, due to the desire to focus on academic studies.I believe daily physical activity is very important for any adolecent.Why? These have some points that we could prove it.(i WOULD TAKE THIS WHOLE SENTENCE OUT)

The main focus when partaking in physical activity is to develop healthy living habits. Not only help ones body strength, but also a better understanding of ones body. For instance, if you are swimming or hiking for a short period of time and feel short of breath, one will know that more physical activity is needed in order to get into shape.

Participating in physical activity at a young age can help instill a strong sense of drive and motivation.For example, if one is on a baseball team and maybe your team loses. Having previous experience with working with others will help you accept defeat and merely try harder next time.It is one of the best classes an adolescent can take.

Physical education plays a vital role in a young person's life and can help shape their future health -wise. With the growing obese population, more measures need to be taken to insure healthier lifestyles. Taking away physical education from schools will merely set us back further than we already are heath-wise. Children can surely balance both school and a physical education, afterall, it will help them in the end.

Hope I was able to help =] good luck!

Undergraduate / ideas or items in a particle accelerator - direction with Common App Essay [7]

Don't worry you will get this done. I always do things last minute and things always seem to work out.

What you have is pretty good; a bit confusing, but I understand where you are going. Just continue on to answer the question that you stated at the very end of the paragraph. Just talk about multiple cultures co-esxisting together and then go into your personal experience. You are on the right track.