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janajackson   
May 5, 2013
Research Papers / My Research Paper on Juvenile Justice. [3]

Juvenile Justice: What's best?

Every state in our nation has laws restricting children from voting, serving on juries, and buying alcohol. All of these laws recognize that children do not have the emotional or mental maturity adults have to make certain decisions. Over incarcerating juveniles in the justice system is costly without producing the desired benefits.

The majority of America's incarcerated children are behind bars, not because they are violent, but because they committed property, drug and public order offenses (Stuart). Locking juveniles up will only expose youth to more violent behavior. Since these are youth, they fear being victimized and assaulted. This accompanies a need for security, so they eventually rely on gangs and weapons for survival. Youngsters in custody are routinely assaulted by staffers, sometimes even older inmates. The beatings were so severe that teeth were knocked out, bones were broken, and some kids were rendered unconscious (Cose). The Bureau of Justice statistics reported that some 13% of juveniles in confinement suffered from sexual victimization, the majority 80% from the people charged to look after them. The incarceration of a troubled kid with more troubled kids only causes more harm (McCollum). Many people speculate that incarcerating youth enhances public safety, but it doesn't.

The cost of incarceration is really expensive. Locking up one child is more than $200,000 annually, wasting tax payer dollars (Stuart). Nationwide, states continue to spend the bulk of their juvenile justice budgets $5 billion in the year 2008 to confine and house young offenders in incarceration facilities. This is too much money being wasted on youngsters who are not even threats to society. Other methods seem more reasonable; the state should treat and rehabilitate these young people instead of punishing them. The juvenile justice system does work: a 1996 Florida study found that youth transferred to adult prisons had approximately a 30% higher recidivism rate than youth who stayed in the juvenile system.

The rates of youth incarceration has dropped drastically. In her article, New Study Finds Dramatic Drop In Youth Incarceration Rates, Hing goes on to describe just how much the rates of youth have gone down. In 2010, there were 70,792 young people behind bars, compared to 107,637 in 95'. The nation's juvenile incarceration rate had dropped 41% from its peak in 1995. Similar reports showing a huge decrease in youth incarceration rates come from the Annie E. Casey Foundation:

Locking up young people has lifelong consequences, as incarcerated youth experience lower educational achievement, more unemployment, higher alcohol and substance abuse rates, and greater chances of run-ins with the law as adults...Our decreasing reliance on incarceration presents an exceptional opportunity to respond to juvenile delinquency in a more cost-effective and humane way - and to give these youth a real chance to turn themselves around.

The Casey Foundation, along with Julianne Hing point out that the state should instead dig down deeper and find out what caused these youth to become delinquents, instead these youth should be placed in community based programs as an alternative to being placed in prison.

Rehabilitation gives kids a second chance at being able to make it into society. In her article "The High Cost and Harm of Juvenile Detention Centers", McCollum goes on to talk about how surrounding children with strong community role models, instead of

other troubled kids can prevent the increase of violent behavior that seems to occur in prison. Rehabilitation is better for society in the long run than releasing someone who spent their entire young adult life in general population. The focusing on the certain issues that are associated with specific minority groups, rehabilitative strategies for criminal youth could become more beneficial. Individualized treatment inside integrated facilities represents progress in the right direction, reducing the potential for stigmatization of minority groups and preventing the labeling of certain individuals because of their racial backgrounds. (Humanity In Action)

The Department of Social and Health Services reported that in 2008, 3,452 youth received the services described: behavioral therapy, family integrated therapy, and Dialectical Behavioral Therapy, as an innovative approach used to teach juvenile offenders behavioral skills to manage and control their behavior. The average cost per youth was $22,552, a lot cheaper than the cost of incarcerating a youth offender. Also, by working with these youth to help them become better citizens, we are no longer wasting tax payer dollars to punish children.

A lot of people argue that kids today are more sophisticated at a young age and that they understand the implications of violence and how to use violent weapons (Reaves). In Borkar's article, "Should Juveniles Be Tried as Adults", Borkar states a crime is a crime, no matter what age, and just because a kid commits a crime that does not mean that the crime was not committed and that the victim didn't suffer. So, according to Borkar harsh sentencing acts as a deterrent to kids who are considering committing crimes because light sentences don't teach kids the lesson they need to learn: If you commit a crime, you will spend a considerable part of your life in jail. Borkar's argument completely goes against the entire point of the juvenile justice system. The juvenile justice system has a purpose, and that purpose is not to punish; it's to rehabilitate and help these children realize that they can change their lives despite of the crimes they committed.

The evidence supporting juveniles being rehabilitated is very factual and provides many statistics to support that claim. Unfortunately, the evidence that supports locking juveniles up as adults in prison is injustice and it lacks any persuasive reasons to prove why juveniles should be incarcerated. Juveniles shouldn't have to undergo the ordinary criminal process like the adults because their young age acts as a deterrent for placing them in any trials that adults would be in (Borkar). Psychologically speaking, they still have to mature, and the juvenile justice system realizes this and that is why juvenile delinquency punishments are less harsh than adults.

** You see, the parentheses are my sources, my English teacher told me to type in all of my sources. I just would love some feedback on what I should fix or If I need to remove anything. this is my FINAL and I just want to do an excellent job! Thanks to anyone who gives me feedback, it's gladly appreciated. :) **

-Jana

janajackson   
Feb 2, 2013
Undergraduate / Comprehending Math; recent academic challenge [6]

Thank you so much, I don't mind constructive criticism, besides I really needed help to fix this essay! I'll be working on it this weekend to rewrite it.
janajackson   
Jan 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Comprehending Math; recent academic challenge [6]

ESSAY #2 Describe a recent academic challenge you have faced and how you have overcome it.
(Essay should be 600 words or Less)
So I would really love some feedback from you guys on how to improve my essay, thank you so much.!

Throughout my entire education I have faced several obstacles. The most significant academic challenge has been not having someone to guide and help me understand my academic classes. As a child born from a family with barely any high school graduates, education became tremendously difficult because although my Mom desired to help me, she did not know how. But this challenge did not keep me from accomplishing my goals. It only made them difficult, not impossible. Ever since I was in Elementary, math has always been a difficult subject for me; in elementary school, it took me weeks to understand basic division and multiplication. Even though throughout these last couple of years my math skills have improved, it's still a challenge for me to ace any math class. Last year when I took Algebra 2, I knew right away it wasn't going to be easy. The Long Division, all the graphs and the complex equations left me dazed, I had never felt so overwhelmed. Whenever I studied for the tests and quizzes I couldn't help but to feel lost in a sea of difficult notes; I knew I needed help, so from then on I made it my number one priority to attend all the after school tutoring I could; even if it meant I had to sacrifice some activities. Surprisingly, the sessions with my teacher and fellow classmates made a huge difference- my grade went up a whole letter grade, and even it wasn't an A, I was extremely proud of myself, I knew I did the best I could.

janajackson   
Jan 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'my first day on a new job' - narrative essay [2]

Yes, I like where you're getting but I suggest you add an anecdote in this essay. I really like this, but remember you want to Show, not tell.
janajackson   
Sep 20, 2012
Undergraduate / 'coming out of my shy stage' - MY UC PERSONAL #2 [5]

Thank you and you are exactly right! I need to revise my essay a lot, but if I were to use another word to describe me, what would that be? I used humble because I feel that I am very humble. But your feedback is greatly appreciated!
janajackson   
Sep 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'coming out of my shy stage' - MY UC PERSONAL #2 [5]

Prompt #2
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

ï What one word describes me best and captures my most important personal quality? Why is this appropriate word to describe me?

Any feedback or suggestions would greatly be appreciated. Thank you!

My greatest accomplishment would have to be coming out of my excessive shy stage. When I was in seventh grade, I used to be so shy; I would get speechless whenever I had to speak out loud in front of large audiences. Coming out of my glossophobia stage was hard, but it gave me dignity.

I can recall one incident when I had to present my eukaryotic cell display in seventh grade to the entire class. When I walked up in front of the classroom and all eyes were on me, my heart began racing while my palms got all sweaty. I stood there like a statue for at least ten minutes before my teacher; Ms.Walls asked if I were okay. I shook my head nervously with a look of fear in my eyes; and at that very moment, she had decided to send up one of my friends to help me present my display. This incident has traumatized me for such a long time. Once I started eighth grade, I made a decision that it was time for me to stop being so glossophobic.

The accomplishment of coming out of my intense shy stage makes me proud because through that experience I gained dignity, and with that dignity I also gained self ï confidence. This accomplishment relates to the person that I am because now I have a personality that is outgoing. I am loquacious and interactive with others around me. Due to this accomplishment, I can now speak in front of large crowds without any restraints.

One word that describes me best and captures my most important personal quality would have to be the word humble. I know that no matter how talented I am there is almost always someone who can do something better than I can. I look at those who are better than I am in something to remind myself that I am not the best, while still considering improvements I need to make. I accept compliments and insults in a mature way; I work hard to help others, because I want to, not to receive praise. I have learned through this accomplishment how to accept myself and my talents without feeling insecure that I need to boast about them.
janajackson   
Sep 17, 2012
Undergraduate / University of California Prompt - Am I answering the question ? [2]

This is very good, but you didn't explain how your world has shaped your dreams. Also, you are doing the same thing I was doing before my teacher pointed it out to me. She told me I was "listing". You're doing that in your last paragraphs, trust me you don't want to just list because then when its time to turn this essay in, colleges are going to read it and probably go on to the next one. also about you and your sister going to your fathers house 400 miles away from LA, I think that is irrelevant. You can take that out. But besides that, your essay is pretty good. Just remember to describe and explain how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Also, since you are talking about your sister, that would mean your essay will be about how your family has inspired your dreams.

Good luck! :)
janajackson   
Sep 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Psychology and Economics studies' - My Cornell supplemental essay [6]

Your essay is very good! I love how you drew the reader in with your introductory paragraph; but then it becomes just a bit flat. I am not saying that it isn't good, but just remember that you don't want to just ramble on and on. Besides that, your essay is fine ! :)
janajackson   
Sep 10, 2012
Undergraduate / Impartial - one word to best describe my community - UC personal statement Promp [4]

Prompt: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how has your world shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Although the community I grew up in has had many bad things happen, it also has many good things happen. I come from a place where many individuals become successful; while others have no life set goals they want to accomplish. The events that occur within my community have affected me and everyone else within the community. My community has contributed to my qualities of being hardworking and always having tolerance.

One word to best describe my community would have to be impartial. A lot of times in my neighborhood I see people work hard to reach a certain goal they have planned. But others, they just don't seem to try hard enough. If I said the world I came from was perfect, I would clearly be stating false accusations.

The world I come from has shaped my dreams and aspirations in numerous ways. I've always believed that the environment a person comes from is what determines person's qualities, both right and wrong. My school has also played a big role as one aspect of my community, including my family. My family has always encouraged me to push forward in order to be the best that I can be. My family and my community is my motivation.

Throughout my life I have always attended small schools. Going to small schools has given me many opportunities to have closer interactions with my fellow classmates than I ever could have if I were to attend a large school. My world has shaped me into who I am now. My community has taught me tolerance, patience and hard work. My family has taught me to never give up and to always keep the faith if I want to achieve. My school has taught me something as well; school has taught me how to be interactive and friendly with my peers. With these qualities I now possess, I am ready to strive to pursue my dreams
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