Writing Feedback / Internet have opened up new doors for people who need recent information or news [2]

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which views do you agree with?

Internet have opened up new doors for people who need recent information or news. Like other technologies, Internet also has own advantages and disadvantages. However, Internet is a good place to find new information, news and makes easier to communicate with others, But it also provides a good place for individuals who strive to abuse these information. In my opinion, as a useful tools, internet can gather together people all over the world and makes easier for everyone to find his own requirement.

First, Internet provides a suitable place for us to find the information. If we need to search about the special subject, the first and main resource is almost Internet. For instance, if a student need to find special data about his research, he do not need to find it in a library or a bookstore, because Internet almost provide a widespread information for any subject. As a result, it is easy to find your favorite books or articles in the net.

What's more, Internet are able to connect people when they are far away. Nowadays, people are able to communicate with their colleagues, or relatives , or partners, etc through Internet anywhere or anytime. Recently, face to face communication have been developed through Internet.

However, Internet also is abused by some hackers who tend to use people's information illegally. For example, they try to abuse some information such as bank account's passwords or other personal information which are available in the net. Therefore, it is difficult to trust to this tool in a way if we want to transfer our cash or put our personal information into it.

In conclusion, Although Internet can be used illegally by some abusers, it still have provided many valuable and worthwhile information for us. It also facilitate to catch special information about every subject. In addition, Internet can link people throughout the world.

Writing Feedback / Success is not far-reaching for those who pursue their goals until they will achieve it [3]

In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer. When you write your answer, you are not limited to the examples listed in the question.

Success is not far-reaching for those who pursue their goals until they will achieve their goals. It is difficult to choose the one quality to show that this quality makes people to be successful. In my view, however, having a variety of qualities lead to be successful, But the most important quality is perseverance.

First, the success would be achievable when we pursue our goal. By studying the life of many scientists, it is easy to understand that why they could achieve their goals. They pursued their goal and they never were disappointed until they finally achieve their goals. The main reason that many people failed to obtain their goals is that they were disappointed quickly after first defeat. From my personally experience, in the difficult time of my life in which it seems that my dreams would not be achievable, I try to pursue my goal. One of my personal examples is preparing for the TOEFL exam. After I had studied for many months, when I took the whole exam in my room, the result was disappointed. However, I decided to persist until I could pass the exam.

Second, being persistent is a vital quality to cover up the lack of other qualities. Being cleaver does not guarantee the success. For instance, I know many people who are not very clear, but they are more successful than those who are cleaver. I remember the time I studied in the university, some of my classmates claim that they are clever students in the high school and they thought that they can achieve the best score in exams, however, they even could not pass their exams because they did not study as well as they must.

Overall, being successful depends on many parameters, however, if people pursue his personal goal, they definitely would be successful.
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