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Posts by duongnh0602
Joined: Nov 15, 2012
Last Post: Nov 16, 2012
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duongnh0602   
Nov 16, 2012
Undergraduate / 'boys versus girls' - Texas A- Person who has made an impact on your life [3]

I'm still confused of those sentences "Hardly did I know that she'd turn out to be so jealous of me when I returned.It hurt,I felt betrayed that so close a friend could hate me so much.That day I built a wall,the strongest wall ever,around me and resolved that I'd never have intimate friendships with anybody."

Is it related to the rest of the passage? I dont understand that part very well?

Otherwises, your essay is amazing! keep working!
duongnh0602   
Nov 16, 2012
Undergraduate / Business and Economics / Football Match - Lehigh 2 Supplements [3]

Sup 1: what aspect of Lehigh most interests you? (150-250 words)

This year, I intend to major in Business and Economics and I know that Lehigh University College of Business and Economics offers the best entrepreneurship programs for the undergraduates. One of the most important factors contributing to the success of Lehigh is its institute- Baker Institute for Entrepreneurship, Creativity and Innovation. Beside many helpful entrepreneurship courses as well as the prestigious Eureka! Competition, the highly-acclaimed VENTURESeries, the International Undergraduate Workshops, what interests me most in Baker Institute is the unique LehighSiliconValley course. During the one-week course, participants not only have a wonderful opportunity to be in close contact with entrepreneurs, inventors, CEOs or venture capitalists but also are provided with in-depth knowledge, hands-on experiences from those practitioners. Engaging in "live cases" study with the real companies, dealing with the real situations in the real life makes very strong impression on me. This will be a chance for me to put all theories I have learnt at school into practice. In addition, having lunch or dinner with distinguished practitioners will also help me to closely interact and thoroughly understand their personal backgrounds, their character and their motivation. What I learn from them will help me in the path of becoming a CEO someday. Finally, LehighSiliconValley can make my dream come true- visiting the California's Silicon Valley, the hub of all new technology, innovations and entrepreneurships.

Word count: 224

Sup 2: If you founded your own college or university, what topic of study would you make mandatory for all students to study? What would be the values and priorities of your institution?

There is a football match in which the player just a bit hesitates then loses the ball to the opponents. They score a decisive goal and the player's team loses an entire season afterwards. Time is something that elapses in a very fast pace and cannot be taken back. Therefore, how to manage and use time efficiently is very important in everyday life. If I founded my own college, I would make "time management skill" course mandatory for all students to study. During the course, students not only learn the importance and some basic principles of time management but also participate in "live cases" which happen in their day life (I would assign a large amount of works at the same time for a week and see how efficiently they put the theories into practice). Besides, I also request every student to propose their own short term and long term plans, arrange them in order of importance with the help of our college's instructors. My first and foremost priority of this course is reality because only by dealing with the situations in real life could the students see the importance of time management. The motto of this course will be "86,400 seconds in a day is important" and I hope every student can make four years in my college the most meaningfsul and enjoyable time of their life.

Word count: 228

Feel free to comment. I really appreciate all of your feedbacks!
duongnh0602   
Nov 16, 2012
Undergraduate / "Obstacles" - Uf Admission essay [2]

"Moving in with my mom to another state my junior year of high school was an experience in my life that forced me to defy many obstacles." -> Moving in with my mom to another state, I was forced to defy many obstacles in my junior year of high school.

"but to take" -> But take

Hope this help.
duongnh0602   
Nov 16, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Doing things to impress others?' - Common App Personal [2]

Well done on your essay. Keep going! here are some advices:

"In 9th Grade when I used to go to class" -> erase "used to", I think maybe it is not neccessary

I think although it is a personal statement (which you do well in express something personally), it may need to be more formal than that (you should use was not instead of wasnt)

The sentence of this kind "The answer is a big no!" may be a little bit offensive to the adcom.

Those are just some of my opinions, though.

Hope this help.
duongnh0602   
Nov 15, 2012
Undergraduate / 'real life business situations' - Lehigh University Supplement [5]

Thank you! I really appreciate your feedbacks.

First I considered some specific programs at Lehigh to say, but then I feel vague about the word "aspect". I dont know whether choosing one particular program at Lehigh is off topic or not
duongnh0602   
Nov 15, 2012
Undergraduate / 'real life business situations' - Lehigh University Supplement [5]

Hi, everybody! I'm Duong and I'm from Vietnam. I'm applying for Lehigh this year and this is my first draft for the 1st supplement:

Topic: What aspect of Lehigh most interests you?(150-250 words)

Although I have not had the chance to pay a visit to Lehigh, through the university's website, I believe that Lehigh is best suit to me. In the days when leadership and innovation play a crucial role in every society, I need to be able to express and develop my creative ideas and imaginations to make positive changes in the world. At my high school, I try to express myself in various ways: captain of my class's soccer team, co-founder and vice president of school's music club and active participant of Youth Day Vietnam. At Lehigh, I intend to major in Business and Economics and one of the aspects of Lehigh that interests me most is its diversity of entrepreneurship programs, internships and externships. Lehigh is proudly in the top 25 schools with the best entrepreneurship programs according to Princeton Review and Entrepreneur Magazine. There are many wonderful and helpful entrepreneurship courses for the undergraduates as well as the prestigious Eureka! Competition, the highly-acclaimed VENTURESeries, the International Undergraduate Workshops and the unique LehighSiliconValley "live cases". Engaging in real life business situations will provide me with in-depth knowledge, valuable expertise and hands-on experience. I always dream of visiting Silicon Valley-a hub of innovations and entrepreneurships, meeting famous inventors, CEOs or venture capitalists and working in the real situations with the real companies in the real life. I hope I would be a Lehigh freshman next year to make my dream come true.

Word count: 241

Could anyone give me some feedbacks? Thanks in advance
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