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seeker194   
Jan 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) education can reduce the number of criminals? [13]

For this question, I totally disagree as many serial killers and murderers are highly educated people or child prodigies. But your paragraph show your opinion strongly.

I added something else...
Education molds the character and shapes the individual but the way he/ she make use of it for his/her betterment wholly depends on themselves. Whether they choose to use the key of education or waste it away, It all lies in their hands. Through education, they become functioning individuals but their morals also plays a big role in their decision in life.

Good luck !!
seeker194   
Jan 19, 2013
Undergraduate / Achieving an advance level in the field/ Broader knowledge;MEANING of "WELL EDUCATED" [16]

Hello Kitsumi,
Your paragraphs have many examples. what exactly are you stating? The focus of your answer becomes lost within the examples . Why don't you write transition sentences in between the examples of your three parts of definition? I think it will make your paragraph a lot smoother :)
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Scholarship / Courage is not born, it is developed; Scholarship 2013 [11]

Some changes:

today, but it is only after I had the courage to grow that continue to grow. Courage - day since Courage
developed; it is a full - developed; a full
academically above average - academically desperate
out of state private university - you should delete the word private, not really neccessary to mention it since u said EXPENSIVE before
offset by bad personal choices - you should delete the word personal
I had to grow up. - u should delete this sentence since you talk about still growing up in another sentence after that

I hope it helped !!
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / ESSAY: Is there a good reason to be impolite (rude) to another person? [8]

I just found some few mistakes. Here they are:

increasing important - increasingly important
who states that - who state that
no mater - no matter
When staying with families and friends,- When there are friends and family gatherings,
most important humans all your live,- most important people in your life,
your parents that you may- your parents so you may
while you don't like this color at all- while you dislike this colour
and understand what the another world looks like- and understand the wide range of opportunities of another world outside their small circle.

I hope these changes help you. Good Luck!
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Letters / How to write a good recomendation letter? (MS Program) [19]

You could write about the student's grades if the student has done well in certain subjects regarding his/her program in post secondary institution and other efforts like activities outside of his/her class.
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Essays / An comparative essay between Hamlet and Waiting for Godot and how it relates to life. [3]

I have gone over the themes but none of the themes are similar. I have read and analysed Hamlet but I am confused about Waiting for Godot. I found it very frustrating. I am still looking for ideas to write the 3 body paragraph in the comparative essay. Please help me. I am stuck and very worried :(

Actually, I have been pondering over this idea for quite a while but I am not too sure. Is it ok to compare the author' s writing style since Hamlet is a English play by William Shakespeare and Waiting for Godot is a French play by Samuel Beckett. If I do good in this assignment, it will raise my grade mark by a lot. If not then, my marks will instead decrease so I want good marks. Please help me.
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Research Papers / Tax problem in the USA - research assignment ideas? [5]

You could write about the changes obama's government is trying to make and its consequences/ benefits. I think this would be a nice idea since the future of USA heavily depends on these changes.
seeker194   
Jan 16, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school -IELTS 2013.1 [7]

Your writing is smooth and your paragraphs are written well. Why don't you add the paents expectation from his/her child , why would a parent make the child do study more and training school and such. You could add the parent's opinions plus concerns(since the world is becoming globally competitive,the parent would want the best for his/her child) and contrast them with your point of view.
seeker194   
Jan 9, 2013
Book Reports / Hamlet Theme Essay Introduction Help [7]

how to write theme overview for betrayal on hamlet: one paragraph long

My theme statement is betrayal leads to nothing but a deadly spider web of rage, fury and revenge leading to a never ending cycle.
What exactly do I write in the paragraph?
Please help me on ths one
Thank you for ur help
Much appreciated
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