Undergraduate / Diversity, proper tools, great learning environment;TRANSFER- How IIT will prepare me [6]

Hello you guys. I am finishing my application for IIT, and this is my final essay. I would like to hear your honest opinions and any suggestions you have to improve it. Thank you.

Prompt:As a transfer student to Illinois Institute of Technology, tell us how you think IIT will prepare you to be a positive contributor to the world. This is your opportunity to share your goals and how you see IIT helping you achieve them.

Applying to college as an international transfer student who has not had the privilege to visit the different colleges before deciding on one that is suitable for me, I had to rely on other methods to reach my decision. Some of which were online research, and students' reviews and evaluations. Upon my research, and not to my surprise no school no matter how prestigious it is had perfectly positive reviews; however, almost everything about IIT appealed to me, which let me to take a firm decision to apply to it with the hope of being able to study there.

The fact that international students form a large percentage of the student body shows how the university encourages diversity and welcomes people with different cultures and different backgrounds. As an international student, not only do I admire how IIT appreciates people from different cultures, allowing them to benefit from each-others' various backgrounds and experiences, but also can only imagine how welcoming it is to be there.To be in a hybrid and friendly environment like such would contribute to the efficiency of my work, which would positively affect my success.

Besides a suitable environment, a great education is very important, and it requires many components, one of which is a highly experienced faculty not just with the subject they're teaching, but also with how to teach it. I believe IIT provides not only that, but also an intelligent integration of technological resources in the learning process. I believe that such things are the things that change our perspectives of education from the traditional view where the student merely gets information from a teacher to a life-changing process that really impacts our outlook on life and pushes us a step closer to success.

There is nothing that makes me feel more alive than achieving something I've worked very hard for. Therefore, it was a delight reading numerous reviews on how challenging the course work is, and while a few people may view this as a negative, this is an absolute positive quality in my opinion. Among the reasons we go to college is to learn new things, and challenge definitely gives us that that and more. It strengthens our character by giving us skills such as being self-learns, better thinkers and pushes us to become better versions of ourselves.

Even though this school provides a diverse social atmosphere, a great learning environment, and the proper tools to a successful education, I know it will provide me with something far more valuable, and that is the idea that no school no matter how prestigious of a school it is will not do my work for me. I am aware that studying at IIT will not be easy, and that I have to work hard to establish myself and the skills that I am hoping to learn by being at this school are beyond achieving a certain degree of knowledge, or being prepared for a particular career to achieve my dream job, but to have endless dedication towards my goal at a particular time, and to never stop improving myself. And that is believe constitutes a positive contributor to the world.

Undergraduate / "Warrior Princess"- KARATE ; Extracurricular activities [4]

So, if you guys see anything that should be fixed in terms of grammar structure or writing style, please let me know as this maybe the last revision before I finally submit it. Thank you for your time.

Prompt: Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

A version of my first name means "warrior princess", and to a little girl who believed in fantasies and thought the world of

warriors, this name was very appealing. Little did I know, this was no fantasy. After persuading my concerned parents, I
started karate classes at the age of 10. Two years later, I am standing before the judges who will decide if I deserve a black
belt. I gave it everything I can and was one of the few people who passed the test. Finally, I could see how sincerely my

parents supported me and believed in what I'm doing. Before the day I fought in my first local tournament, I did not know what

real pressure meant. I was the "new girl" who no one expected to win, and who surprised everyone by getting a gold medal.

By 2012, I had already made it into the national team and competed in all kinds of tournaments I could dream of. This
experience did not teach me fantastic materialistic skills as I thought it would, but intangible qualities that I will always cherish.

Undergraduate / TRAVEL to the USA; Umass Lowell & Umass Amherst -EXTRACURRICULAR/ WORK EXP [9]

So, I was planning to continue with my application to umass Lowell and umass Amherst, as an international transfer student. And, for some reason, I was very stressed about submitting everything that I forgot to do a spell-check. So yes, my application has LOADS of spelling mistakes and typos as you can see below.. I think that this essay makes me look ridiculous and it makes me seem like I don't care about this whole thing. I can't think of anything to do right now but to just sit and cry about the stupid and terrible mistake I did. I am thinking this is beyond repair and I don't know if I should continue. What's your opinion?

Prompt:
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Response:
To me, success is the ability to reach the goals that you truly want to reach. For a long time, I
thought my true goals were to be rich and have a great job until I came to the realization that I
needed things that are beyond the materialistic. I have always lived in my home country with my
single mother, who is a strong, selfless and supportive woman who felt the need to protect me as
I was her only child, and while I am grateful for that, I felt the need to gain my independance and
get out of my comfort zone. I was hesitant about transfering to a university in USA because I
wasn't sure if I can live alone and take full responsibility for myself. I talked to my dad who is
the most independant man I've seen, and asked "How do I know if I can do this if I have never
done it before?" and he said "You refer to your performance in simmilar past situations" and I
replied "But I haven't done anything like this before". And then it just struck me. If your answer
does not exist in facts, then you should search for it elsewhere, and I searched in my own self.
Do I think I can do this? I realized that only I had the answer to my question, and now I was
positive that I am making the right decision.
Finding my true interests and thus choosing a major was challanging. I never took it lightly
because I do not want to be just another person studying a something. I want to be great at what I
do, and while my current uniiversity is a place where I was challanged to work hard, think
critically and enhance my social skills, I decided to travel to the USA because I believe it offers
the greatest education at my decipline and I am confident that I will have all the tools that I need
to be successful.
I consider myself a blessed and lucky person who has the most supportive and loving family,
and while I am grateful for that, I believe this is the time when I should take responsibility for
myself, achieve my independance and follow my dreams, and that is what I hope to achieve.