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andrea94   
Apr 30, 2013
Undergraduate / "We die every day"; Motivational letter for the RSM? [7]

Does anybody else have any suggestions? It is really important.
PS: how do I change the name of the thread? I didn't choose to call it this way. I would like to call it "Can you check my motivational letter?"
andrea94   
Apr 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "We die every day"; Motivational letter for the RSM? [7]

andrea94:
Besides, studying in a Scientific High School, I have also achieved good analytic and rational problem-solving skills, which can be very useful both in teamwork and when working alone.
Studying in a High school which is more science oriented, this reason helped me achieving a proper balance between technical and people skills.

Thank you for the help. Nevertheless, "Scientific High School" is how we call the type of school I attend in Italy, it is not simply a "High school which is more science oriented". How do you think I should modify the sentence, then?
andrea94   
Apr 27, 2013
Undergraduate / "We die every day"; Motivational letter for the RSM? [7]

Can you correct this motivational letter that I wrote in order to apply at Rotterdam School of Management?
These are the given instructions:
-Tell us about your international background: where were you born, where have you lived, what is your nationality, where did you go to school, in what kind of international activities have you participated. You can also write about what you feel you can add to the international dimension of the programme.

-Why are you attracted to an international business programme?
-why you would like to be chosen to participate in the IBA programme atRSM as opposed to another university?
-Tell us about your future plans
And here is the letter:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this motivational letter in order to apply for the BSc in International Business Administration at the Rotterdam School of Management.

My name is Andrea Petrini and I am an 18-year-old Italian boy. I was born in Foligno, a small town situated in the center of Italy, and I still live there, but I also lived in the United States for 5 months as I participated to an exchange program in 2011. I attend the scientific bilingual high school of my town where we study both English and French as foreign languages, but when I used to live in the USA, I attended the Crosby High School. Thanks to the great importance that my school gives to humanistic education (Philosophy, History, Literature), I have learned to "think outside the box" and to solve problems through a creative approach. Besides, studying in a Scientific High School, I have also achieved good analytic and rational problem-solving skills, which can be very useful both in teamwork and when working alone.

I have always been interested in foreign countries: everything started when I was 6 years old and I saw a picture of the skyline of New York City on my sister's notebook: I remained mesmerized by its beauty. From that moment, I started to make inquiries about foreign nations and the more I discovered, the more I liked the idea of an international job. Therefore, I decided to do some international experiences. The first relevant one was when I accompanied my father to the global retail trade fair (Euro Shop) of 2011 in Düsseldorf since he needed an interpreter. That was the moment when I realized that international business is what I want to study: I loved that experience because I had the occasion to interact with people from all over the world and I took my role so seriously and enthusiastically that some of the people with whom we were talking thought that I was the director of the firm. Another important experience is my exchange year in the United States. I lived in the small town of Crosby, close to Houston, and I had the chance to attend the local High School, hence improving my English. I also learned how the real American society is and works and I had the possibility to put myself to the test. Finally, my last significant international experience is the trip I did this year to Kępno, Poland, for a meeting for an exchange program funded by the European Union between four middle schools of Italy, Poland, Hungary and Czech Republic on behalf of the middle school where my mother works. Even though my role was simple as I only had to represent the Italian school, this trip has been very important to me since it has been an occasion to experience a different culture for a few days by reason of the fact that I had been hosted by the vice-principal of the Polish school. Furthermore, I have also been abroad for a lot of different reasons, such as my study trip to Ireland and that to France, and I have travelled very much because I think that travelling is the most wonderful thing that a human being can do. Nevertheless, these three are the most complete and meaningful international experiences that I did.

I would like to become the manager of an important internationally-oriented company or organization and this is why I chose to study International Business Administration. My ideal job would be working as the CEO of a sustainable green multinational corporation. I know that I am a very ambitious person, but, in my opinion, this is a quality because it makes me be strongly motivated in my studies and it makes me work hard so as to reach my goals. In addition, I am extremely adaptable and self-sufficient, in fact when I was a child my parents worked until late in the afternoon, so I had to gradually learn to do everything by myself. This has also helped me to become an enterprising and self-confident person, two important characteristics for a manager and for life.

Moreover, I chose to apply at the Rotterdam School of Management because of its remarkable ranking and its strategic position: in fact, Rotterdam is situated in the heart of Europe and it has the biggest harbor of the Old Continent, let alone the fact that it is a cosmopolitan city that supplies plenty of business and cultural opportunities and that two leading multinational companies such as Unilever plc and Royal Dutch Shell plc have their head office there. Furthermore, the RSM is a very prestigious and well known institution with a pragmatic and effective teaching approach.

In addition, a life without risks is a life without success. As you know, I decided to take a risk since I chose to apply for this course at your university, a university that is far away from home and in a country where a language I do not now is spoken. I could study in my native country, where everything would be significantly easier. But I made this decision consciously, as I know that studying at RSM would give me many major opportunities that I would not receive studying in my home country and as I am aware of the fact that I will not disappoint you. I am not afraid to take on this challenge, and I am eager to take on other challenges that I will face in the business world.

As Seneca, the esteemed Latin writer and philosopher, says, time has to be considered not quantitatively, but qualitatively: that means that we have to use time as best as possible because, as he writes, "we die every day" (cotidie mori, from the first Epistula - "letter" - of the "Epistulae ad Lucilium") since death possesses the time that has already passed. And the best way to use my time is to study in an excellent school: that is why I have chosen to apply to the Rotterdam School of Management.

Yours sincerely,

Andrea P.
andrea94   
Apr 27, 2013
Undergraduate / Course details; Programme of mathematics [2]

Can you correct this detailed list of the mathematics contents that I took in the three final years of my secondary education? It is really important because it is part of the application procedure.

Here it is what they ask: You must provide a detailed list of the mathematics subjects and contents taken in the three final years of your secondary education. The list (an English translation is required) needs to be signed by your math teacher (including contact details: name and email address) and stamped by your school.

And here is the list:

PROGRAMME OF MATHEMATICS
Class B Bilingue
Third year
ALGEBRA
 First-degree and second-degree inequalities (integer, fractional, digit and literal inequalities)
 Irrational, integer and fractional equations and inequalities

PLANE ANALYTICAL GEOMETRY
 System of abscissas on an oriented straight line
 Absolute and relative distance between two points
 Abscissa of the midpoint of a segment
 Cartesian coordinates in two dimensions
 Distance between two points in the Cartesian coordinate plane
 Cartesian coordinates of the midpoint of a segment
 Segments in a given proportion
 Centroid of a triangle
 The locus of an equation in the Cartesian coordinate plane
 Segment axis
 Condition for a point to belong to a curve or to a line
 Points of intersection of two loci
 Implicit and explicit form
 X-axis symmetry, y-axis symmetry and origin symmetry
 Analytical method and theorems

The straight line
 Equation of parallel and perpendicular lines
 Equation of a straight line passing through the origin
 Slope of a straight line
 Translation of the coordinate system
 General position of a straight line
 Condition of parallelism and perpendicularity for straight lines
 General form of a straight line
 Reciprocal position of two straight lines
 Locus: y - y0 = m (x - x0)
 Locus: y = m1x + q , with m1 as a given number
 Point-slope form of a straight line
 Slope of a line passing through two points
 Line through two points
 Axis of a segment as a straight line passing through its midpoint
 Distance from a point to a line
 Angle bisector

The circle
 Definition of a circle as a locus
 Equation in terms of center and radius
 The expanded form of the equation of the circle
 Circles in particular positions
 Reciprocal position of a straight line and a circle
 Conditions for determining if an equation is a circle
 Circle through three points: using the circumcenter or three conditions
 Tangent line to a circle: Î" = 0 method, d = r, using the fact that the tangent is perpendicular to the radius from the point it meets the circle, formulae of splitting

 Reciprocal position of two circles and radical axis
 Locus: λ(x2 + y2 + a1x + b1y + c1) + ľ(x2 + y2 + a2x + b2y + c2)
 Particular cases of the equation λ(x2 + y2 + a1x + b1y + c1) + ľ(x2 + y2 + a2x + b2y + c2): passing through two given points, tangent to a given straight line in a point

 Amenable curves to the equation of a circle

The parabola
 Construction of a parabola with ruler and compasses
 The parabola as a locus. Equation of the parabola with axis of symmetry coinciding with the y-axis and with the vertex in the origin

 Concavity and width
 Equation of the parabola with axis of symmetry parallel to the y-axis, vertex, focus, equation of the axis of symmetry and directrix
 Parabolas in particular positions
 Parabola passing through three points
 Conditions in order to write the equation of a parabola
 Reciprocal position of a straight line and a parabola
 Tangents to a parabola
 y = x as an axis of symmetry
 Equation of the parabola with axis of symmetry parallel to the x-axis
 Locus: y - ax2 - bx - c + k(y - a2x2 - b2x - c2)
 Deducible curves from the parabola

The ellipse
 The ellipse as a locus
 Equation of an ellipse whose major and minor axes coincide with the Cartesian axes
 Symmetries, vertices and foci
 Eccentricity of the ellipse
 Translated ellipse, completing-the-square method
 Deducible curves from the parabola

The hyperbola
 The hyperbola as a locus
 Equation of a hyperbola whose foci lying on the Cartesian axes
 Eccentricity of the hyperbola
 Translated hyperbola
 Deducible curves from the hyperbola

Fourth Year
REAL FUNCTIONS
 Definition of function, classification of functions
 Definition of domain, image of an element, range, graph
 X-intercept and y-intercept, sign of a function
 Preimage, inverse function
 Properties of some functions: even, odd, injective, surjective, bijective, increasing and decreasing functions in an interval, monotonic, bounded, unlimited, periodic functions
 Graphs and characteristics of elementary functions: constant, linear, quadratic, direct and inverse proportionality, homographic, root, nowhere continuous, absolute value, piecewise functions

GONIOMETRY
 Oriented angles and how to measure them: sexagesimal system and decimal form, the radian
 How to pass form a system of measurement to another
 Definition of sine, cosine and tangent of an oriented angle
 The unit circle
 Trigonometric functions defined using the unit circle
 Variations of sine, cosine and tangents and respective graphs
 Trigonometric standard identities and relations between trigonometric functions
 Secant, cosecant and cotangent; variations of the graph of the cotangent
 Trigonometric functions of particular angles: 45°, 30°, 60° and 18°
 Periodic functions and period of the trigonometric functions
 Inverse trigonometric functions and their graphs
 Related angles
 Opposite angles, complementary angles
 First quadrant and first octant reduction
 Trigonometric formulae: sum and difference formulae, double-angle formulae, sum-to-product formulae, product-to-sum formulae, half-angle formulae, parametric formulae
 Trigonometric identities
 Elementary trigonometric equations with sine, cosine and tangent and equations attributable to them
 Second degree trigonometric equations with only one trigonometric function
 Solvable equations with appropriate divisions
 Deducible equations to elementary equations using trigonometric formulae
 Linear equations with sine, cosine and tangent: graphic method, normalizing method and using parametric functions
 Homogeneous and non-homogeneous second degree equations with sine, cosine and tangent
 Elementary trigonometric inequalities with sine, cosine and tangent
 Integer and fractional trigonometric inequalities

TRIGONOMETRY
 Theorems for right angles
 How to solve problems with right angles: the four cases
 Area of a triangle if two sides and the included angle are known
 Chord theorem
 Law of sines
 Law of cosines
 How to solve problems with any triangle
 Plane geometry problems
 Gradient of a straight line
 Angle formed by two straight lines
 Cartesian and Polar coordinates

EXPONENTIAL FUNCTIONS AND LOGARITHMS
 Powers with rational and irrational exponents
 Real-exponent power properties
 The exponential function, its properties and graphs
 Exponential equations: elementary equations or equations that can be transformed into elementary equations, solvable equations through the substitution of the variable
 Exponential inequalities: in canonical form or in forms that can be conducted to the canonical form, solvable inequalities through the substitution of the variable

 Definition of logarithm and its fundamental properties
 The logarithmic function, its properties and graphs
 Comparison between the exponential and the logarithmic curves
 Common logarithm (log10(x) ) and natural logarithm ( loge(x) )
 Fundamental theorems and identities of logarithms
 Change of base
 Exponential equations and inequalities that are solvable using logarithms
 Logarithmic equations and conditions of acceptability of the answers
 Logarithmic inequalities

GEOMETRICAL TRANSFORMATIONS
 X-axis symmetry
 Y-axis symmetry
 Symmetry with respect to the bisector y = x
 Origin symmetry
 Horizontal and vertical translation
 Horizontal and vertical stretching and compressing
 Graph of the functions |f(x)|, f(|x|), f(-x) and -f(x)
 Application of the geometrical transformations to the exponential, the logarithmic and the trigonometric functions

Fifth year

FUNCTIONS
Definition of function. Classification of functions. Domain and range, intercepts with the Cartesian axes, sign of a function. Properties of some functions: even, odd, injective, surjective, bijective, increasing and decreasing functions in an interval, monotonic, bounded, unlimited, periodic functions. Graphs and characteristics of elementary functions: constant, linear, quadratic, direct and inverse proportionality, homographic, root, exponential, logarithmic, trigonometric functions. Absolute value function. Inverse function. Piecewise and composite functions. Neighbourhood. Isolated point and limit point.

ALGEBRA OF LIMITS AND CONTINUOUS FUNCTIONS
Definition of limit: finite limit of a function as x approaches a finite value, infinite limit of a function as x approaches a finite value, finite limit of a function as x approaches infinity, infinite limit of a function as x approaches infinity. How to prove the limits using their definition. Left-hand limit and right-hand limit. Definition of a continuous function at a point. Continuity of elementary functions. Fundamental theorems on limits: theorem of the uniqueness of limits (with demonstration), theorem of the permanence of the sign (with demonstration), the squeeze theorem (with demonstration) and its consequences. Calculation of limits using the squeeze theorem.

Limits for sum, difference, product and ratio. Indeterminate forms. Limit of rational integer and fractional algebraic functions as x approaches a finite value or infinity in the indeterminate forms. Limit of composite functions. Substitution of the variable when calculating the limit. Limit of exponential functions with variable basis. Notable special limits (with demonstration). Calculation of limits using notable limits.

CONTINUOUS FUNCTIONS
Discontinuity of functions. Classification of discontinuities of a function. Properties of continuous functions (without demonstration): Bolzano's theorem, Weierstrass's theorem, Darboux's theorem. Application of the Bolzano's theorem to equations and bisection method for the approximation of the solutions.

DERIVATIVE OF A FUNCTION
Differential quotient and its geometrical meaning. Derivative of a function and its geometrical meaning. Right-hand derivative and left-hand derivative. Fundamental derivatives (derivatives of elementary functions). Equation of the straight line that is tangent to the graph of a function. Continuity of derivable functions (with demonstration). Points of continuity, but of non derivability: cusp, angular point, vertical inflection point. Theorems to calculate derivatives: sum, product and quotient rules. Derivative of the exponential function with variable base. Rule of derivation of the inverse function (geometrically demonstrated) and derivative of the inverse of trigonometric functions. Higher-order derivatives. Stationary point of inflection. Tangents to an angular point and angle that they form.

THEOREMS ON DERIVABLE FUNCTIONS
Rolle's theorem (with demonstration) and its geometrical meaning. Lagrange's theorem (with demonstration) and its geometrical meaning. Cauchy's theorem (without demonstration). Applications of Rolle's theorem and Lagrange's theorem. Consequences of Lagrange's theorem: functions with

f|(X) = 0 in an interval (with demonstration), functions with the same derivatives in an interval (with demonstration), sufficient condition to determine on which intervals the function is constant, ascending or descending and "inverse" theorem (both with demonstration). De L'HĂ'pital's theorem (without demonstration) and its applications to solve indeterminate forms. Sufficient condition of derivability (without demonstration).

MAXIMA, MINIMA AND POINT OF INFLECTION AND STUDY OF FUNCTIONS
Definition of local maximum and minimum, definition of inflection. Theorems on local maxima and minima: necessary condition for the existence of a local maximum and a local minimum for derivable functions (with demonstration), sufficient condition for the determination of the points of maximum and minimum and of stationary points of inflection. Research of absolute and local maxima and minima. Definition of point of inflection, ascending and descending point of inflection. Determination of the intervals and points on which the function is convex or concave. Criterion for the determination of the points of inflection and the type of concavity of a function using the second derivative. Asymptotes: vertical, horizontal and oblique asymptotes. Research of the oblique asymptote of a particular rational fractional function. Study of the point of non derivability using the limit of the first derivative. Study of functions that depend on a parameter. Problems of maximum and minimum.

INDEFINITE INTEGRALS
Antiderivative of a function. Definition of indefinite integral and its properties. Immediate formulae of integration. Integral of a function that has an antiderivative that is a composite function. Integral of the functions that have as antidederivatives the inverse trigonometric functions. Integration of rational algebraic fractional functions with first or second degree denominator. Integration by parts. Integration by substitution.

DEFINITE INTEGRALS
Superior and inferior integral sums. Definition of definite integral of a continuous function and its properties. Geometrical interpretation for a function that is not negative. Mean value theorem. The integral function. Fundamental theorem of calculus. Fundamental formula of calculus. Calculation of areas. Volume of a rotating solid.

Prof. XXX
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PS: I hope this is the right section.
andrea94   
Apr 26, 2013
Faq, Help / How do you get a credit on EF? [8]

Hello,
I don't understand how you can get a credit. Can you please explain it to me?
Thank you
andrea94   
Apr 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / People dream things that are often almost impossible achieve;Compare &Contrast Essay [4]

In some cases people tend to dream about thoughts that are often almost to (do you mean too?) impossible to do for certain people(try not to use repetition) . Even though theretheir dreams are way out of reach, that doesn't stop Herbert Nitsch and Dean Potter from doing what they believing in; surpassing their limits. In breathless Herbert had always dreamed about staying underwater, whereas Dean's dream is to fly without a parachute notwithout an equipment attached to him. Both "Breathless" and "Icarus 2010" sends the message that even though theretheir hobbies are completely different, they are willing to go the distance to achieve their goals without having any sort of strings attached to them.According to (Page 4) of Breathless, "Even before he was a free diver, Herbert Nitsch dreamed he could stay underwater" Herbert had a belief of livingbelieved that a person can live underwater without the need of fish gills or tanks filled with oxygen. Now Nitch is 40 years old and a part time pilot for the Australian airline, Nitch he believes he is as close to his dream more than everextremely close to his dream . In his past Herbert has been able to set "31 free-diving records including the "no limit" diving" (Page 4). In which an individual uses an(do you mean any?) means available to dive as deeply as he can on a single breath. To do something that he enjoys very much is the key motivation that he lives by to get closer to his underwater dream he was later asked what was too deep, an impossible depth Nitch responded"Something like 1,000 meters" Even though he tries many different diving techniques to descend deeper, such as conserving oxygen and "blood-shifting" where he tricks his body into thinking it's drowning (Page 7), there are limits that he can transcend. He falls into many risk's such as compression sickness, where nitrogen bubbling out of his blood into his brain and joints. However , throughout the year's Nitch has done the math, taken the necessary measurements and procedures in which he believes that eventually the body will stop fighting and give in to the pressure and the brain will decide there is nowhere to go but down.

On the other hand, Dean Potter lives to fly, whereas he has set world records for" height, distance and duration in a wing suit (Page 227)." His passion for flying is like no other and just as Herbert Nitch's dream of living underwater, his dream is to fly in jeans and a shirt without a wing suit nor parachute and walk away from the landing. Being a base jumper takes a lot of stability and concentration as any wrong move that a person makes can causecost them their life. There have been incidents where Potter had crashed and hung himself from tree' s, "I've had a lot in fact there was an incident that happened where he decided to run the slab and within a couple of steps he slipped and slid 80 feet, hitting a ledge that had saved him from a near death experience. Even though these major injuries have taken a decent amount of damage to his body he continues to do what he loves most. When you dream goes far beyond your limits, there is no stopping you goingnothing will stop you from going the distance to finally achieve it. Even though he has seen some of his friends die through his years of climbing, I would of thought (what do you mean?) that his journey would end there but mainly, it just keeps going for him. Is he an adrenaline junky or on drugs? Who knows, but when going all out for an unbelievable dream he could be.

Even though both Nitch and Potter are two completely different people, they do share many similar traits about them. They both are willing to go above and beyond to achieve the impossible. What I've been taught from these two individuals is that people shouldn't look down towards their dreams no matter how far and impossible it is. In fact people should do what they love to do . Even if there are some dreams that are out of reach it doesn't hurt to give it your best to make that dream into a reality. Even at the brink of times where they would possibly lose their lives in certain situations that didn't stop them, in fact due to those mistakes it helped improved themselves for the future

You should simplify the essay because sometimes it is hard to understand what you want to say. Try to be clearer.
andrea94   
Apr 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay, Increasing weight of people - causes and solutions [5]

You wrote a good essay. Try to avoid repetitions and to re-elaborate what you re-state in your conclusion more. In addition, in my opinion you shouldn't say what you are going to do in your essay, there is no need to do it.

I hope I have been useful
andrea94   
Apr 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 ; Are talents inborn or trained? [5]

You wrote a good essay, but you have to remember to restate the question and to do it with your own words. In addition, remember to leave at least 5 minutes to check the spelling, because they can take off points for mistakes.
andrea94   
Apr 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / Memorial Day Essay - significant history [3]

Memorial Day Essay: "What is Memorial Day, and what does it mean to you?" Word Count Limit: 500-525

It would be appreciated if you could find any mechanical errors, or give me some other ideas, feedback and that kind of stuff that I could include in the essay. Well here it is:

Memorial Day has a significant history which makes it such a poignant and touch holiday that it is today. Memorial Day was originally proclaimed as Decoration Day on May 5th , 1868, by General John Logan, a Union general of the Civil War. Decoration Day was first observed on May 30th , 1868 at the Arlington National Cemetery. On that day, flowers were laid on the graves of those who had died during the U.S. Civil War, both Union and Confederate soldiers. Despite the initial observation five years before (do you mean that the state of NY has started to observe it 5 years before it was recognized? , Decoration Day was first recognized by the state of New York in 1873. By 1890, it was recognized by most of the northern states as a national holiday. However, the southern states had failed to acknowledge May 30th as Decoration Day. InsteadHowever , each state of the south has theirits own "Decoration Day" type of holiday, by calling itcalled in different names, celebrated on different days. During the reconstruction of World War I, Decoration Day was expanded to honor all U.S. military soldiers who died from any actions the United States hashad taken its part in. It wasn't until then the southern states had finally begun to observe Decoration Day. Nevertheless, the southern states had continued to celebrate their other forms of "Decoration Day."
In the May of 1966, President Lyndon Johnson officially declared Waterloo, New York to be the birthplace of Decoration Day. However, there are many places that still claim to be the birthplace of Decoration Day. In 1967, President Johnson officially changed the name of "Decoration Day" to "Memorial Day." A year after 1967, the Uniform Monday Holiday Bill was passed by the U.S. Congress and signed by President Johnson making Memorial Day the last Monday in May. This resulted in a three-day weekend for federal employees. The consequence forof this act was that Memorial Day weekend has been increasingly become a time to play and having (why don't you write "have"?) picnics, instead of remembering the ones who put their life in front of ours.
While some people on Memorial Day may host a Bar-B-Que, picnic, or party to have fun, I see Memorial Day at a whole new angle of the spectrum. As a legal immigrant from India, I do not know any other way to thank the late ones who protect (us? me? you should write whom they protect) every day. From the perspective of seeing America as a foreign country, it is inspiring that American soldiers gave their life up, so I could be safe in the U.S. Even though I do not personally know anyone who passed in military service, it is heartbreaking to listen to all the stories of lost, loved ones. I have learned to appreciate these heroes because if it weren't for them I wouldn't have done all the wonderful things i did in my life. The fallen served as a symbol of bravery for America and prove the legacy of courage for Americans. The lost ones have done something that other people wouldn't have done, making them the very first to respect, who make every day possible for us in America. So on Memorial Day, join me to remember the ones who had always been there to protect us, when we couldn't protect ourselves.

Word Count: 525

Thank you for taking your time to read this essay, and please give feedback.

You wrote a good essay with only a few errors. Good job :)
andrea94   
Apr 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should museums charge admission fees? YES [3]

I do not know why you wrote this essay as you didn't mention it, but, if there are not conditions in length, it is a good essay. However, you should connect the sentences in a better way and try to express yourself in a clearer way.
andrea94   
Apr 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS : Have modern ways of preparing food improved the way people live? [11]

You have a good command of the language, but you wrote to little. In my opinion, you should give more examples and you should analyse both sides of the argument so as to write more. If you don't write at least 250 words they will take off point, so you should focus on learning how to expand your essays.

I hope I have been useful
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