Writing Feedback / IELTS: International travel brings more benefits than its de-merits [5]

Topic: International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists, do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, faster and cheaper transport tools have stimulate tourism grow up. And more unreachable places are opening their doors to tourist. It is bring both positive and negative impact for the countries. In this essay, we will analysis the impact of this phenomenon.

In my opinion, the more advantage have bring from the international travel. It is speed up globalization of rural countries. It also boosts local economy which was lack of resources and industry. For example of most small islands in pacific, which are small and have beautiful beach, but always are shortage of resources such as fuel and water, it also can stimulate the economic by travelers, and provide them restaurants, hotel and entrainment. As a result, the citizens can become rich. On the other hand, when people open the door for global travelers, it is not only broadening tourists horizon, it is also introducing a new modern world to the local citizens. The people in local can get more information and knowledge widely then their ancient, and the can be more fashion and catch up the life-pace of modern society.

In contrast, it is also observed some negative impact for the global traveling. The most significant one is the heavy burden on local environment. More resources are expensed by tourists while more rubbish and waste water have polluted the natural environment. Too many visitors disturb the ocean development and break the balance of ecosystem. Such as death of coral reef is most likely are human activities result. For minimize such impact, government should take up responsibility to evaluate the capacity of tourism, and define the strategy and provide supervisor to limit the visitors. Furthermore, protect and maintenance the environment.

As a conclusion, international travel can bring more benefit for traveler, as well as for the local countries and citizens. We can treat it as improvement of modern life. But it is not double that to make travel resources sustainable and protect the environment and economy, government should take up more responsibility.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Many people are busy with work and not enough time for famliy [4]

Topic
Many people are busy with work and do not have enough time to spend with family and friends. Why does this happen? What are the effects of this on family life and society as a whole?

In this modern society, many people are busying with the work, they need to work over 10 hours each day, even need to back to work on the weekend. Sometimes, they even cannot see or talk with their family in whole week. Why this phenomenon will happen?

As the common understanding, we should agree modern technical we used today should release human resources for routine work. However, we found it is not the truth in urban area. When you are walking in the street with lots of IT firms or accountancy companies after 10 PM, you will find the windows of these companies always are lighting.

From my opinion, in modern society, People have more pressures than the past because high competition for the job. The population of city is grown up yearly, and everyone wants to have good salary and higher position, how to demonstrate you are the best of all competitors? The only way is working hardly, and working over time. On the other words, we have to reduce the family time. Another reason is to refresh and upgrade our knowledge for the new technology, we have to study more and process more information during our spare time. It also expense our relax time.

As a consequence, we can observe this phenomenon of longer working hours have negative impact to our daily life. First of all, people who are working in highly pressures in long time and without enough time to relax will create health problem, such as dizzy, tired, cannot be concentrated, and furthermore, to reduce the productivities of work. Secondary, lack of communication with family for long time also will build up communication issues. Most of time, people have multiple roles in the society, for the family, he/she should be father or mother, over time make them have no enough communication with their children, they will miss lots of grow up moment of children and memory, in some worse case, if lack of communication with children, younger will addition to video game or unhealthy hobbits, that will cause more worrisome problem for their parents. Finally, people have no time to meet with old and new friends if they always need to working over time. So they only can make friends with co-worker, this will cause a result they only can focus on small scale society relationship which is similar, and they have little chance to meet with different people and different event to enrich life experience.

Therefore, nowadays, people are working hard and never mind to work longer time, I still believe the negative impact is more effect to the modern family and society, how to make work life balance, should be our crucial task since we are living in this century