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mario_nagi   
Jun 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Leisure time is for improving mind or resting mind? [4]

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

You should write at least 250 words.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

It is generally believed that leisure time is needed to recover from the stress of everyday life.There are a lot of ways one can spend his spare time doing. Personally, I prefer doing activities that improve my mind like reading and learning programming languages.

Reading is one of my favourite activities, because it provide me with a lot of new and interesting information about a lot of different topics and places without even moving from my chair. For example, I learned a lot about Japan's tradition and culture from reading about it. Reading is an inexpensive, tremendous source of information that provide the reader with hours and hours of entertainment and delight without boring him and that why reading is one of my best spare time activities.

Another great activity that can be done in spare time is learning programming languages due to its amazing capabilities in converting a simple code into a working program that can do a lot of different functions. An example of this is the word processing programs that can interpret, correct and organize your essays and letters. Also, learning programming languages could open a lot of job opportunities for you in the future from designing simple webpages to complex programs.

In conclusion, it is best to spend your leisure time doing activities that can improve your mind and adding new information and experiences. Although what you do in your spare time is up to you and no one can force you to do anything, you should spend it all on beneficial activities that can improve your mind.
mario_nagi   
Jun 19, 2013
Essays / "Choosing a Career is very difficult"; thesis statement [4]

Fresh graduates usually believe that their lives after university will be smooth sailing.However, another hurdle awaits them in the form of career choosing.The qualifications,skills and experience required causes it to become a difficult task. which make the decision on a specific career a tiring task. In order to make it easy on fresh graduate to choose their future career they could ask their seniors for advice also they should attend a lot of courses and acquire certificates that prove their skills.

so, 1st paragraph could be about asking help from seniors and the 2nd about courses and certificates

sorry if it isn't so good and Good luck on your essay
mario_nagi   
Jun 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / What's more important? Roads or public transport? [5]

resources should be used
In improving transportation means
As a result a result
they will share their daily problems, and create long lasting friendship.
public transportation means are more

overall, your essay isn't bad ,but you must use more linking words i recommend (so,as,however) and you need to prolong your ending,for example you could say a recommendation or prediction like (In conclusion, it seems to me that, public transportation means are more appropriate to our modern life because this will create more jobs, make people socialize and increase our health state that why i recommend to invest more money on public transportation for all the previous reasons.)

Good luck on your exam/essay
mario_nagi   
Jun 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Business letter explaining the reasons why I want to be away from work [5]

You are working for a company.You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this.

Write a letter to your manager.In your letter

explain why you want to take time off work
give details of the amount of time you need
suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

Dear Tom,

I'm writing to you to request some unpaid vacation next month.

My younger brother is getting married next month and he has asked me to be his wedding planner so, as the wedding planner I will have a lot to do like ordering the flowers, cakes, musician, photographers and videographers for the wedding. Writing and sending out the invitations of the weeding, also I have to help him pick his new suit from the tailor.

To be able to do all this, I would need to be away from work for five days, from Monday 17th to Friday 21st.While I am gone my work could be divided between Johnny and Julia they both are very talented and I trained them myself to withstand any crisis that may occur.

I'd be very grateful if you could allow me this time. Thanks again and see you at the weeding.
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