Writing Feedback / IELTS; Paid work for children is good or bad? Discuss [10]

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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

What are your opinion on this ?

Whether or not children should do some type of paid work is still controversial. On the one hand, some people argue that it is not right. On the other hand, many educational experts believe that children could gain valuable work experience, learn many new things and take responsible for their life. Each of the argument has its own merit.

There quite plausible reasons for the former opinion. To begin with, children are easy to be exploited by employers because they do not have enough life experience so they may not know that they are being exploited. Thus, owners can pay them too low income while requesting them to work very hard. Furthermore, children should play around with their friends or be educated at schools before their mind become fully developed instead of working so they will have nice and memorable childhood. Also, children can be considered as low skilled workers, thus, we should let them focus on their study to gain more knowledge, becoming more productivity.

However, there are also strong reasons in favor of the latter opinion. Firstly, children are believed to be more mature if they contact with life early. They will gain more life experience which could be very useful for them in the future, for example, avoiding exploitation or fraud. In addition, as they work, they gain more and more skills or valuable work experience, then they are likely to be promoted and demanded because companies nowadays appreciate workers who have lots of experiences not qualifications. More importantly, children will have idea about the value of money or how hard to make money so they have to be responsible to what they spend money on.

All things considered, I think that children should not work until they are really mature. However, if they have desire to work to gain experience, we should let them do it under families' control or just in a certain time period.

Writing Feedback / Not only families and schools job, but also the whole society, to solve students behavioral problems [2]

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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior
What do you think are the causes of this ?
What solutions can you suggest ?

Nowadays, although education quality has been improved noticeably, serious problems with student behaviors are still happening. There are many causes and solution of those which will be discussed below.

To begin with, one reason is the education from students' families, especially their parents. It is very good for children if parents talk to them because they have been living for ages so they can teach their children what should do and should not. However, in some families, parents may work so much that they do not even spend time for their children. As a result, students may not know what they are doing is not right while they think it is right and keep doing that, leading to bad behaviors become more serious. Also, their parents might not know about that so they will not fix it and their children's problem become worse and worse. Besides, children are affected by their friends easily, thus, good student could be influenced negatively by badly-behaved friends and turn into bad student. Furthermore, schools may administer their students not strictly enough so they can behave badly without punishment or correction.

In order to solve those problems, parents should spend more time with their children to talk to them, understand what they think, know what they are doing so that they can try to solve the issues together in the right time. More importantly, schools should know students who are not well-behaved so as to reeducate them, preventing them from affecting other students. Additionally, families should find out whom their children are playing with and tell them not to play with children who behave badly in their opinion.

To sum up, it is not only responsibility of families and schools but also the whole society to solve behavioral problems. Therefore, those solutions mentioned above should be taken action before the problems becoming too bad to be fixed.