Writing Feedback / IELTS : ESSAY ON DESCRIPTIVE WRITING FOR GRAPHICAL DATA [4]

ESSAY PROMPT : THE graph ( see attachment ) shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

CAMBRIDGE IELTS 7 TEST 2 WRITING TASK 1

The illustrated line graphs represents a comparison amongst various kind of meats eaten by Europeans (chicken, beef, lamb and fish) respectively over the 25 years i.e. from 1979 to 2004

Fish line graph starts off with lowest consumption amongst the four from 1979 at approximately 60grams/person/week, and slowly continued to decline over the years, finally reaching a 40-30grams/person/week in the year 2004, thus is the least preferred of all

Beef and lamb line graphs also showed decline in their consumption over the years. Beef consumption was reached its peak in 1979 at about 220gramsperpersonperweek, which declined rapidly by 30-40grams approximately in the early 1980's it then recovered rapidly in the year 1984 reaching its peak at 240 grams/person /week .The beef line graph was erratic with occasional dips seen in the early 90's and then in late 90's at about 150gram/person/week, another one in early 2000.The lamb line graph exhibited a capricious consumption trend which was diminishing progressively from the year 1979 to 2005

In contrast, chicken line graph displayed a trend opposite to other line graphs, it began approximately at the same consumption level (150grams/person/week) as the lamb line graph. This graph showed variable upward trend, which increased progressively over the years, reaching a peak of 250grams /person/week in the year 1994 and still continued to rise reaching the highest the consumption rate(260grams/person/week) and preferable type of meat among Europeans.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMES? Or they need to be based on circumstances? [4]

CAMBRIDGE IELTS 7 TEST 2 WRITING TASK 2 page 54

Crime and criminals go hand in, one thing which can deter them from committing these UN -lawful acts is a proper judicial system consisting of prompt execution of justice and punishment.

Fixed punishment lacks flexibility and a narrow foresight for e.g. A child is s accused for death of an individual, then according to the law this juvenile is a 'perfect candidate' for death penalty because "murder" is the focus not the circumstances in which this crime was committed and if the whole scenario is consider it perhaps be the 'game changer' in this case in turn saving this child from un- justified death penalty

Next, if complex cases comprising of various mysteries in itself props-ups in the courtroom, the judges would be perplexed, confused - how to go about such criminal cases because critical 'out the box' thinking is not involved and only fixed punishment laws is to be followed.

Thirdly, a criminal can present forged evidences, false witness to deviate the course of justice as not check and balance is present in such fixed punishment system, consequently innocent suffer and eventually are behind bars (jail) instead of the real culprit.

In contrast, if situation, main purpose behind a criminal act and the mental status of a convict are considered then un-just and fatal decision issued by the court of law could be prevented for e.g. A mentally ill patient escapes from the mental asylum and suddenly starts to pellet pedestrians with stones, in this process he or she fatal injuries one pedestrian- then automatically he or she will be liable for death penalty as they have taken someone's life even if this individual is not mentally sound even to evaluate his only actions in addition to this similar circumstances are also seen in many juvenile criminal case hope fully in reality these children are sent to re- habitation center or juvenile jails rather than be punished with capital punishment. Thus inquiring over all view on any case is vital and it would increase the relative degree of precision of handling of evidence and scrutiny and strengthen civilian's faith in the judicial system of their country

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