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Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere.


fahadbd 25 / 56 5  
Aug 16, 2013   #1
In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?


Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere. Students' behavior deteriorates a good environment in school. A large number of students as a result are disturbed due to the cause of student's manner. However, there are many compelling reasons behind the cause.

Schools which are mainly the purpose of learning and teaching to the students, have several problems around which may madden students like lacking of air conditioning, inadequate sports ground, over-crowded number of students and so on. In fact, these will be the primary reasons of student's bad behavior. Adult students are always aware of legal demand when something is missing suddenly they grow annoyed. For example, if a teacher failed to conduct class, rough behavior grows instantly towards him. Moreover, when no teacher in the class, students speak out with each other and make noise. On the other hand, many of them are naturally impatient which occurs various disorders in a teaching environment.

The solution should not merely come out from authority but students have to be given parental care properly. Students are influenced by his or her partner. They will have to provide proper guideline as well as teaching of good behaviour. For instance, mother/father will teach his or her child how to adapt with the school environment, how to behave with teachers. They should be encouraged in terms of having bad results.

In conclusion, in my view, due to the lack of proper instruction in the field of school environment students creates worse nature towards teachers as well as next to the partners. Authority should take punitive measures to those of bad manner students.

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tarbiat 3 / 6  
Aug 16, 2013   #2
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dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 17, 2013   #3
Last few years, authority as well as governmentisare highly concerned about the school atmosphere

.... What do you mean by authority? Government also has authority. Do you mean school authorities? .... school atmosphere? Your prompt talks about student behavior which is very different from what you have written.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Aug 17, 2013   #4
You need to pay serious attention to grammar, my dear friend! Don't worry... You'll be alright with practice....and we'll help you;

Schools which are mainly the purpose of learning and teaching to the students, have several problems around which may madden students like lacking of air conditioning, inadequate sports ground, over-crowded number of students and so on

.... Have a look at this sentence - it's pretty too long and therefore you tend to make many mistakes;

Schools which are mainly for the purpose of learning and teaching to the students

.... teachers teach and students learn - schools provide education;
The primary objective of the schools is to provide education to students. ... Likewise, make shorter sentences until you get a good hang on grammar
Also, I really don't get the idea of what you were trying to say in the latter part of that sentence.
Sybrinth - / 4 1  
Aug 17, 2013   #5
I think this essay is over-generalized and very impersonal. You are answering the question in a way that is too broad, and there is nothing in it to help me connect with you as a person. Incorporate some of your own specific experiences and reflect upon them to make it more personal: have you seen this type of behavior in other people? How did you feel about it? Put in your voice.

I would also stay away from the traditional essay structure with the introduction and conclusion. Start out the essay with an attention grabber (such as a personal experience like I mentioned before), and scrap the "in conclusion" statement from the last sentence. These make your essay sound too formal. Think of a creative way to distinguish your essay from those of other applicants.
Dreqc 2 / 7 1  
Aug 18, 2013   #6
instead of "student's manner" you could use "Etiquette"

For instance, mother/father = for instance parents

to conclude my dear replace your phrases with academic vocabulary

and try to use more active writing


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