Writing Feedback / Ielts Writing task 1: The portion of different ages of the population in Yemen and Italy [4]

This pie chart indicates the portion of different ages of the population, including 0-14 years, 15-59 years and 60+ years in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and plan for 2050.

Firstly, in Yemen, the ages of population from 0-14 years old has the greatest percentage in 2010 with half of population of this country, 50.1%. Besides, the portion of peope from 15-59 years old also plays an important role in total number of Yemen's population, has 46.3 %. However, in 2015, portion of people from 15-59 years old will reach 57.3%, increase 11%, which partly illustrates why the percentage of 0-14 years old people decrease 12.9% until 2015.

On the other hand, the amount of people who are beyond 60 years old in Yemen do not have many changes over this period, it only has a small percentage in the total number of habitants and grow slowly in 50 years.

Similarly, in Italy, the number of people from 15-59 years old are the substantial figures during 50 years, but it would have been dropped slightly from 61.6% to 46.2%, approximately 5.5%. Meanwhile, people over 60 years old are becoming popular more than ever in these 50 years in Italy, with a significant increase 18.2%. Also, people under 14 years old take 14.3% in 2010 and has the tendency to go down a little bit after 50 years.

In conclusion, this figures shows that 15-59 years old is the most popular ages from 2010 to 2015 though it has different trends in the two countries. In addition, the apparent contrast of both nations is the percentage of people who are under 14 years old and over 60 years old. While Yemen has a young population, Italy is opposite, absolutely. However, there will have been some changes in these figures in the futures, especially in these 50 years. Italy would have to pay a large amount of money for social welfare unless government will find out precautions from increasing the old people number.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; WRITING TASK 1 - TELEPHONE CALLS BY CATEGORY [6]

I am beginning to write an Ielts essay. Need some comments and contributions from all of you. Thanks

The bar chart indicates changes in the amount of minutes of telephone calls which include local phones, national and international phones and mobile phones in the UK during 8 years since 1995 to 2002.

In the first place, the time of local phone calls each year went up from 1995 to 1999, hitting a peak in 1999, about 90 millions, then declined rapidly in the following years. On the other hand, over the same period, the use of national and international phones showed an upward trend as a replacement of local phones, had an average increase by approximately 2.8 millons per year.

Besides, there has been a dramatical increase in the number of using mobile phones, from nearly 4 million in 1995 to more than 45 million in 2002. Mobile phones were considered as new trend of modern people which brought to them many advantages. They were believed to be essential facilities of people on the world.

These changes also illustrate that the habit of using local phones does not remain and people have tendency to use alternative kind of phones, which are moderner and more convenient. As a result, the use of mobiles phones, national phones and international phones rose with a high speed, especially after 1999, the time of mobile phones was threefold until 2002, meanwhile, the total minutes of international and national phones growed by 10 billions. Apparently, mobile phones had the fastest development during 8 years.

Overall, local phones are still the most favourite communication tools of people from 1995 to 2002. However, the amount of these devices are predicted to continuously decrease in the following years and people will witness the expansion of alternative kinds of communication, such as mobiles phones, national phones as well as international phones.

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