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Name: Krishti Bhowmick
Joined: Oct 4, 2013
Last Post: Nov 2, 2013
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School: Katy High

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krishtib   
Nov 2, 2013
Undergraduate / Brookfield Regency for Senior Living; RICE supp/ extracurricular activities [2]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150 word limit).

The summer of freshman year, I made some new friends. They were friends who taught me a lot in a very short time and I met them at the Brookfield Regency for Senior Living. My first day volunteering there, the assisted living coordinator announced to the seniors that they were going to be baking today and challenged each of them to make the best peach bread they could. Just seeing their faces light up at the word baking was delightful. Almost instantaneously, every inch of the room was covered in flour including the numerous walkers. The ladies did not seem to care as they precisely measured each ingredient for the winning peach bread. I was in awe of the determination present in each one of them. Seeing them, I realized happiness can lie in the smallest aspects of life and is just waiting to be found.

This is the other supplement

With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study? (150 word limit)

It was while I was mentoring under doctors and technicians in the Radiology department of the local Elmbrook hospital that I knew without a doubt what I wanted to do after graduating college. Watching these doctors use such intricate machines to detect problems within the human body and solve them so efficiently intrigued me. Analyzing equations and finding answers is something I have always enjoyed and feel this particular field is where I can hone my skills. I want to attend an institution where I am able to understand the functions of these devices and apply them effectively to help patients. Rice's program for Biomedical Engineering would allow me to do exactly that. The exceptional research opportunities that are available here would cater perfectly to my needs. Breakthroughs are possible with a remarkable team and outstanding facility, both of which are available at Rice.

I would really appreciate any feedback! thanks!
krishtib   
Oct 28, 2013
Undergraduate / University of Michigan: Supplementary essay- Finding a new home within my soccer team [7]

Perhaps you could say, "be underneath your leadership" almost brought me to tears. Then, you can sort of combine both ideas and it would still have a similar impact.

our first conditioning session and apologized for "not giving his all" Maybe just say that without the quotes to make it a bit simpler. But I think that was really all.

Good luck!
krishtib   
Oct 26, 2013
Undergraduate / "A part of me wanted to stay back forever" ; RICE supplement- Early decision! [3]

What motivated you to apply to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words.
I'm applying early decision to Rice so I would appreciate any help and please be harsh! thanks

After taking the first campus tour of Rice, a part of me wanted to stay back, forever. Living in the suburbs for most of my life, I have never really experienced a metropolitan environment. Located in the heart of downtown Houston, Rice would allow me to venture out and engage in the vibrant city life. I want to be able to take a bus around the city and see the architectural wonders, museums, shops and cafes. Situated in the suburbs, my high school classes contained a maximum of about twenty-seven students; I have grown accustomed to a modest class size. There was always a prospect of personally asking the teacher a question. Rice offers just that, providing me with the opportunity to interact with my professors as needed. At the same time, it maintains an assorted student body. Students from all over the world attend the institution and it would be fascinating to learn about their unique backgrounds. There is a plethora of cultures available at Rice and I would be honored to be a part of it. I want to learn from my peers, see things from their point of view, and also share my own insights with them.
krishtib   
Oct 26, 2013
Undergraduate / I found a series of blogs; UC personal statement: My journey to veganism [4]

The idea is very good. Here are a few suggestions.

When you say, 'The very next day I became vegetarian.' it makes it seem like it was an overnight change. Perhaps say it like you decided to become a vegetarian and transition into it.

Being vegan is a part of my identity instead say maybe, "Becoming a vegan..." since you weren't one always.

Hope this helps!
krishtib   
Oct 26, 2013
Undergraduate / University of Michigan: Supplementary essay- Finding a new home within my soccer team [7]

This is really good but maybe check the last paragraph a little and say what you want in a simpler way.

He never talked to me like that. Had I changed? His mouth opened again and the words "You did a great job as captain and I'm glad to be underneath your leadership" hit me like a train.

It makes it sound like a bad thing when you say 'hit me like a train'. Perhaps say it in a more positive way.
krishtib   
Oct 5, 2013
Undergraduate / Discover multiple microcosms within this unique language- supplement for Georgia Tech [3]

This is just a first draft for the supplement. I would appreciate any feedback!

Why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech, and what do you hope to contribute to our community? limit 150 words

As I read the course descriptions for senior year one title in particular caught my eye- computer science. This course seemed to have a little bit of everything that I am passionate about. There was the scrutiny of detail, stimulating mathematical problems and simple commands. Therefore, this year I decided to delve into the world of binary and java. Little did I know that I would end up liking is as much as I do. I want to go to an institution that will foster my knack towards this subject and allow me to discover multiple microcosms within this unique language. Georgia Tech would provide me with exactly this opportunity through its contemporary research facility in the computing college. The college has remarkable programs such as Threads that would facilitate my learning.

I think i might have to add something more towards the end but that would make it over the limit.
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