Writing Feedback / IELTS Academic essay:Some people think that music brings benefits to individuals [3]

Some people think that music brings benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The pros and cons of music for individuals is a topic which has aroused enormous controversy among the general public. Some people argue that music has adversely affected individuals'minds and society. However, another group believe that music is the part of culture of every society. It gives many benefits to people and societies.

In my point of view, music is most popular and ancient mode of human expression. Its the basic form of art and strongly connected to culture of every society. We cannot denied from the value of music, it has taken important part in people'life and society.

Some people hold the opinion that, there are various drawbacks of music. Nowadays, the standard of music and songs is not high as in the past. The language used in lyrics of some songs is very cheap and meaningless. If individuals started listening low quality music and songs then these cheap songs would inevitably affect on their minds. As mentioned above, music is strongly connected to culture of every society, due to cheap music and meaningless songs, the youngsters will get bad impression of their culture. Moreover, in recent years, loud music is more popular than soft and classic music which will only increase noise pollution in society and gives tension to people rather than relax individuals'minds.

Supporters of music believe that, there are various benefits of music. First of all, music is the famous and historic way to show your culture and tradition to other societies. Nowadays, young generation can get knowledge of old culture and tradition from music. In other words, in every society music is the basic way to transfer their culture from one generation to next. Secondly, many therapies have been introduced which use music to treat many physical and psychological diseases. Such as, music is used in the therapies to hypnotise and also relax a stressful mind. Moreover, in recent years the youngsters have chose music not only as a hobby, but its the best way for them to earn money. Many people were famous due to music in the past.

In conclusion, we cannot separate music from our culture and society. the solution of drawbacks is, the government should needs to open appropriate music academies which will give complete knowledge of music. The educationalist should need to start classes of music in schools which will give information of history of music.

Writing Feedback / Private and public health care system s- IELTS Academic essay [2]

Some people think that health care is a basic human necessity that should not be provided by the private companies, but should be provided by the state.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of health care being provided by the private sector.

The health care as a basic human right is a vital public issue about which people feel very passionately, they believe that it's the main responsibility of the state to provide sufficient health care for public. In recent years, many private companies in term of private hospitals and emergences have been established which provide appropriate health care for public. some people argue that there is no need of private companies for health care service; it's the duty of government. However, another group claim that with progressing rate of people who need health care services, private companies are essential to support the government and public.

In my opinion, it would be better if health care services are only provided by state hospitals because every one can easily afford it, but private companies'health services are very expensive.

supporters of private companies health care system believe that private hospitals have given many benefits to the general public and also give support to the government. By comparing to state hospitals, private hospitals are very well-equipped; they have got new medical technologies and equipments

for advance treatment of many diseases, which are not available in state hospitals. Secondly, in contrast to state hospitals, private hospitals are more cleaned and hygienic for patient. Moreover in my country if a patient went to state hospital for check up then he/she would need to wait for couple of hours to meet with doctor because these hospitals are always full with patients, but it does not happen in private hospitals, patients do not need to wait too long for check up.

On the other hand, according to defenders of state hospitals argue that
there are some drawbacks of private companies health care system. First of all health care services provided by private hospitals and emergences are very expensive compared to state hospitals, the government

provide economically convenient health services for public. Furthermore, as state health care offices cover health insurance, people will logically pay less for prescriptions. As well as, patients can get free medicines from state hospitals by compared to private hospitals where patients need to pay for everything, from prescriptions, doctors advice to treatment.

In conclusion, private hospitals disadvantages overweight its advantages. we are witness that by comparing to private hospitals, most people want to use services of state hospitals, Even if the treatments and equipments are not as modern as available in private hospitals.