Writing Feedback / Ielts essay. Violent crime among teenagers [3]

Task2- Recent figures show and increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

It is unquestionable that rising figure of the crime is one of the most alarming and pressing issue in the world today. Unfortunately, the most percentage of the violent crime is committed by teenagers. To psychologists belief youth till the age of 18 who lack of social and emotional knowledge are more likely to become offenders. And I am consummmately agree that absence of education is menace to human wellbeings.

The decision of a teenager to quit school is a firts step to prisoning. The role of school in a life and behaviour of a child is massively important, it`s where they are taught legislation of a country. Primarely, school provides academic knowledge, by learning intresting subjects students are directed to their career resolvations. Here where teachers` efford needed the most, teachers ought to spark pupils` interests in order to shun bordom and thoughts for outside businesses.

And absence of parent control gives youth the freedom to everything. Nowadays it is common case when both parents work in a family and the divorce hugely increased. The disarray occuring in families compel teenagers for isolation and intense emotions.

To conclude, This setuation needs advanced approach as it impacts induviduals pysical and moral wellbeing. Government should encourage and empower teachers and parents to take resposibility.

Writing Feedback / International pollution issues such as the energy shortage and global warming [3]

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Facing many international pollution issues such as the energy shortage and global warming, some people believe that individuals have limited abilities to deal with that issue, compared with the nations and society.

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To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The tension and pressure we are facing because of global problems are increasing and deteriorating. To some people`s belief, these issues are enourmace and not for individual`s effort to cope with but society`s. However, I strongly oppose this notion , every tiny vigor of anybody`s can be essential, while we are fighting with huge and vital global phenomenon.

Global warming and the energy shortage occurred partly by individuals daily lifestyle. If particular attention is paid for simple things we engage our days, significant improvements could be done. For example, we occasionally leave rooms light on regardless to our location. The smoke produced by tobacco which is massive menace and one of the hazardous reasons for global warming could be reduced only by personal attempts. Moreover, individuals could cut down utilizing personal cars and use public transport instead. So here comes evidence, profusely vital role of personal effort against perilous problems.

Furthermore, society consists of individuals, so if the spirit of environmental care leaves individuals, no nation or society will ever deal with it or compel individuals to care. Therefore its nation and governments duties to capture individuals attention towards environmental issues and also inspire and empower them to neutralize their lifestyle. Thus, nations can facilitate in a huge amount in this field.

Above all, when it comes question like farther existence of mankind, to discuss whose responsibly for particular problem is nonsense or disarray, all of us share this planet, it`s all our problems, and we ought to handle by genuine integrity.

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Writing Feedback / A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people [2]

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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The issues about animal rights have been discussed and argued with logical explanation such as human beings` cruel approach to wildlife and also, innocence of people in utilizing animals for personal purposes. However, both aspects haven`t been enough satisfying to settle up new legislation or rights for animals, even though some people still insist that animals must be treated as humans, I strongly oppose to this tendency, animals are animals, humans are humans.

Animals are our food, clothes, entertainment and also pets. Yes, indeed those beautiful and valuable creatures deserve respect and fair treatment and we share this planet together, but these facts don`t mean we are equal. Imagine, if animals have the same right as people then what is a lion tries to taste a hunter, murdering wild lion the hunter should be sentenced, or in opposite case lion should be caged. Moreover animals aren`t intellectual as humans, they are not able to understand the rights or honors given to them if we do give them.

Treating animals as humans we should stop eating meat which contains important vitamins. Perhaps, we could survive without vitamins that contributed by meat, but how about food balancing system, if we cut down intaking of meat then vegetables are only solution left. Unfortunately land for farming is extremely limited so it`ll defiantly rise the cost of products.

To sum up, Trying to invent utterly diverse agenda for treating wildlife, humans will create massive problems which will dramatically deteriorate our lives.
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